Oooooo I like this on it gun be good

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Thank you

7341386 you are welcome also who did the cover art it is good

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The source is there

I'm sorry, but I can't read this any more. It's just another poorly-written cliche-fest, complete with awkward phrasing, wooden dialogue, and unrealistic sex scenes.

7341563 Ok, now lets try doing that again but being constructive instead?

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That was constructive. I listed everything that was wrong with this fic.

7341644 Ya in a very mean way. They're pretty much insults. Constructive would be giving examples and how to improve them, not just saying "this sucks, and this suck and this sucks. This whole story sucks and I can't read it."
Why not give an example of how to fix it instead?

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Alright then, for example, the author could start by removing the lactation scene. Unless Nightmare Moon is somehow pregnant, she shouldn't be lactating.

7341656 Or he could pass it of as just part of pony biology. I've seen it done before

"fuck this Moon with all your might!"

*Scrolls back up, hits like, scrolls back down.

This is fucking amazing please make more.

I like how popular this story has become and the number of groups it is already in PS do you have a step-by-step way to put stories into a group I still cannot figure that one out

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I place this one in the Clopfic group

7342824 that I know but the way is says to do it in FAQ does not make any real sense is there a simpler way of explaining it p.s moar is so good

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i.imgur.com/p6NdcAy.gif

7342842 thanks

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Oh okay! I got it! Here's what you do:

1. Find a group you like to add it to

2. Choose the right folder to put it in (you may only choose one. Some may allow you to put in more folders)

3. Go to the folder and there will be a green button that says "add story".

4. Scroll for the title you want to submit; click on it and press add

Hopefull this helps

7342869 yea it does thank you

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Your welcome. Are you mad? I apologize deeply if I offended you

7342885 no I ain't made its just bend frustrating trying to figure this out and you helped a lot may your stories live long and prosper

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Thank you so much. And your welcome

Yeah, I don't think I've read half of this chapter yet and I just couldn't go any further. Griff's characterization in this is kind of irksome, seeming to be easily emotionally swayed by little things like finding out how Teresa has a boyfriend and Nightmare Moon saying "I like you," in what may be a completely different context than what she really meant. I groaned internally when he thought of commiting suicide just over a girl he doesn't even know yet.

Speaking of Nightmare Moon, I think I'm way more thrown off from her characterization than Griff's. We may only had 2.5 episodes from the show to know who she is, but we already got the picture just from her actions and speech alone. THIS? I don't think OOC doesn't even begin to describe how she was portrayed here. I don't see why Luna wasn't in this instead as she fits the role at least a little better than her evil counterpart, and what's with that weird superstition involving her? Is it saying MLP doesn't exist and somehow anthro horses were present in a time much earlier before humans came around, or what? I just wasn't into her at all.

I won't give this a dislike as I didn't even finish the whole chapter, and I see it rather unfair if I did, I was just peeved enough to give my two cents and not let this go without some kind of complaint. If Griff seems like a relatable character to you readers, I have no comment. I just won't be on this bandwagon with the rest of you, and I gave my reasons for doing so.

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It's okay. I understand

Made my Day

I'M TOUCHING MYSELF TONIGHT!!

Since I saw hentai in my teenage years when my parents went to sleep, I still to this day don't get what's cute about a dick twitching.

HAHA NICE

Made me cry a little bit , grammar isn't best in a few lines but a very beautiful story with Luna and Griff ^^

im interested if you could make more of them :>

THIS IS TOO GOOD AND SINCE I AM A PRINCE THAT MAKES THIS GODLY GOOD

P.S ANYPONY WHO DISAGRES WITH ME WILL BE EXTERMINATED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

P.P.S I AM A REAL DALEK MIND YOU

Nice story! Well done