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Balance

Someone needs to be reminded that there must be a Balance.

Good and Bad.
Harmony and Chaos.
Love and Hate.
Life and Death.

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Loganberry

Loganberry #1 · Nov 21st, 2016 · 1 · ·

As a debut story, this isn't bad. There's the germ of a truly fascinating tale in here somewhere -- it's just hard to find beneath the waffly prose. A 300-word opening paragraph isn't going to attract many people, and the story feels as though it's been stretched too far to meet the 1,000-word minimum. As for characterisation, Luna is okay (though it's "dost thou", not "does thou") but Discord doesn't really convince. A mixed bag overall, but you clearly have an interesting imagination. I suspect all you really need is more practice and experience at writing ponyfic.