Mlanime Season 1: One thousand years, a mythical dragon is born.

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Mlanime Season 1: One thousand years, a mythical dragon is born.

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Comment posted by ShadowSpectrumSwordtails deleted May 19th, 2018

Killercraft

Killercraft #2 · Jun 26th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: A journal entry ·

other than the blockyness of the paragraphs and some spelling its going good so far.

ShadowSpectrumSwordtails

ShadowSpectrumSwordtails #3 · Jun 27th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: A journal entry ·

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Blocky, what do you mean by blocky?

Killercraft

Killercraft #4 · Jun 27th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: A journal entry ·

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Simply put there is too much information in a literal block of text which, to my experience, discourages the reader from reading the entire thing and just skipping to the bottom of the paragraph. It is a simple mistake for writers in general, just make sure you keep each subject apart.

For example: I am this person doing a thing to do something to the world and/or country from which i reside. All in one paragraph.

up above there is just too much info in one place but if you try this.

I am this person doing a thing. next paragraph. i need to this to save the world because of this...

you catch my drift? All i'm saying is that you need to space out your info a bit more and you'll do swimmingly

ShadowSpectrumSwordtails

ShadowSpectrumSwordtails #5 · Jun 27th, 2019 · 1 · · Chapter 1: A journal entry ·

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Yeah, going over the paragraphs I can see where your getting at, I’ll see if I can get a proof reader to help me with that. Thanks for explaining the problem man. Good criticism is so hard to find these days. If you know what I mean?

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