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Seems Like Y'all Need A Hero

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There is a fear that hides in the future. A fear that consumes the world. Alone at night, when you look at the stars, you might feel it. In the dark places between the stars you might just see it.

There is another fear. This one lives in our heads. That we'll never be good enough to get off this rock. Or, will we dwindle in our vices until the sun runs dry. Will greed rob us of the fuel to lift us into the stars? Will sloth rob us drive to kick off into the unknown? Will wrath strip us off anything worth striving for?

Equestria falls in a fight it never could have won. But as the hands of the clock wind back to give them one more shot at victory, it soon becomes clear that they won't be alone for round two.

Tied by gravity to a species much unlike their own, they must somehow unite and learn to overcome their own natures. If not, there may be very little left when the true fight actually begins.

A fascinating and tense story true to the roots of science fiction. This is far more than just a first contact story.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 15 )

I love this. It needs a better description to bring the readers in and a little proofreading, but it's very good so far and I haven't seen this concept before. Anywhere.

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Thanks pal. I'm always looking to improve. Maybe PM me some of the ideas you have that could make this run a bit smoother.

And I'm glad to have something that you think is so original. That was one of the most important things I had in mind when I wrote this.

7334707 In that case, I do have some advice involving the description. Cut the first two paragraphs, they don't actually say anything useful. Make the third paragraph the start of the long description and the entire short description. Finally, add something that anchors the story to the main MLP timeline and to Earth's timeline. Basically, add a paragraph that says when and where these two sister species ran into each other, or sets up that meeting.

The description is what will pull your readers in. It has to be good, or you're not going to get anywhere.

Wow, that was really good. It felt a bit drawn-out at times but overall I think this has amazing potential! Good job!
And yes, Twilight, we are lonely.

Well I must say this has such rich detail and full of potential. I can't wait to see where this will go.

Oh, wow... I will be waiting for updates on this one!

This is a bit fantastic. I can't wait for more

This is a very interesting story so far and I love your more scientific approach of how the lone human manages to establish contact with Equestria, with limited, household, means and that it is the Equestrian how find the answer to make it a more two way communication and over come the language barrier of two totally different species with totally different view on their use in technologies and using the most common basic elements that they would probably familiar with in only using sounds. I wander how she is going to manage to understand and reconstruct the words and syntax of the ponies language on her own, without a them of linguist supporting her; she can't do this just on her own she will need outside help for this that is dedicated on the subject of reproducing lost languages. for fortunately for her, there is plenty of potential help on the Internet. Any visual reference can now be over come with Twilight sending parchments will help a lot for her.

I loved the idea of having a pony with a name that doesn't sound to have any resemblance to his craft, with is a little refreshing to see this.

I am looking forward to seem more of your story soon.

♪I can't wait for mooooooore♫♫

I did want to mention that in my mind I think of names as being more a representation of what parents think would be a good name. Perhaps a pony will try to fit the shoes they were given or perhaps they can strike out on their own and gain a cutie mark somewhere else. I feel that we see names matching professions more often then not because as foals they are exposed to their parent's jobs and interests in supportive fashions that frequently lead to the ponies following the obvious course set by their parents.

ie, musical pony with a musical name gives foal a musical name, foal does music.

That was my first reaction to Macaroni by the way.

Great job once again! This is getting really interesting..

This is great.

It seems a very inefficient way to teach English to an alien civilization. However, it is the effort of a single child so it makes sense.
Hmm, sorry to see that this story is on hiatus after just 2 interesting chapters. The author can't be out of ideas that quickly.

Really loving this story! I hope you continue it. :)

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