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There's a pier home to thousands of people. Overflowing with men and women from every walk of life. Side by side, hand in hand, gladly packing themselves onto the engrossing boardwalk. They relish the rides and relax on the wooden platforms, sitting on each other's shoulders, laying in each other's laps. But none dare to approach Derek Chandler. That pile of detritus and filth. He was the boardwalk's cross to bare... until she came.

Our faith comes in moments; our vice is habitual.

(Notice: Contains vulgar language that may be offensive to some readers. Contrary to what the picture suggests, there is no actual clop in this story. However, the topic a major point in both character development and the plot. Suggestive themes.)

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... Man, what the hell are you doing reading this comment? Go read the story! :twilightangry2:

I wrote the whole thing, edited the whole thing, and drew the picture. Yeah I know that's some quality art right there, you were just dying to know ain't that right? :rainbowlaugh: I make fun of a lot of people in this... Specifically I call out AbsoluteAnonymous, Mystic, shortskirtsandexplosions, Ariamaki, Cloperella, AegisShield, RobCakeran53... cloppers, everyone reading, and bronies in general. BUT YOU'LL LIKE IT! ... y'know hopefully. Notice I'm a brony, so the main character is making fun of me too. And if you haven't heard of any of the authors I named... just go. Go see them. You've been living under a rock for too long. :pinkiehappy:

Hey man, this is great. The attention you paid to environmental slang and styles is above par. Overall a pretty enticing story, but try and pay more attention to continuity throughout. I got a tad lost in some sections. The only other thing that stands out is a shy lack of figurative language/imagery, an adjective in front can only take you so far. Through and through, the amount of effort and work you put into this is hard to ignore. You earned my thumbs up, thanks for the read.

Sad to say, this story breaks one of the site rules if I'm not mistaken;

Found under FAQ> Story Submission Rules
''Meta stories, defined broadly as any story that is about the site or its users.''

Then the one above that rule might apply too, but I'm not sure;
''Stories that are clearly written as an in-joke between a group of people with little relevance to those outside the group, colloquially known as "circle-jerking."''

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Cuz my dream girl is like… Sailor Moon… or Sakura Haruno, Rise Kujikawa, Pinkie Pie. Heck I think some anime guys are pretty hot. Like Kiba, The Count, Sanji.”

MY SEXUALITY IN A NUTSHELLdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png


1330972 This is not about the site nor it is about user's accounts on it.
The fact that author is referencing the site does not mean anything. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png



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Okay, I just want to say that this fiction surprised me. Heck, at the begining I thought it is a troll parody of MLD, but in the end it turned out to be incredibly entertaining and actually deep.
I salute you sir, you created a masterpiece.

Oh Waylon the feels! I feel horrid for not reading this sooner, and now... Now I need to think about deep things

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