The Proposal
Rainbow Dash glided down the halls of the Friendship castle with a new Daring Do book in her hooves. “Twilight! You in here? Twiliiight!” After a few minutes of searching, Rainbow’s ears perked up at the sound of voices coming from one of the rooms. With an excited grin, the blue pegasus landed on the polished floor before pushing the door open. “Hey, Twilight, guess what I…”
She stopped short when she saw Sunburst kneeling down in front of Spike. “You’re more than I could ever want in life,” he smiled, holding out a silver ring with a bright purple gem. “Will...will you marry me?”
Spike’s green eyes widened, with a few tears gathering at the corners. “Sunburst, I...I don’t know what to say!”
Sunburst looked bashful. “Say yes?”
Spike clasped his claws together in delight. “You bet!”
Rainbow Dash’s pupils shrunk into pinpricks. Without a word, she retracted backwards and silently closed the door on her way out.
“See?” Spike quipped as Sunburst rose to his hooves. “That wasn’t so bad!”
“W-Was that okay?” Sunburst asked, fiddling with the ring nervously. “Starlight might think it would be...I don’t know...a-a little bit cliched?”
Spike shrugged. “I think she’ll be too surprised to care. If she loves you...which I’m pretty sure she does...then it would matter to her, right?” He nudged Sunburst with a grin. “You’ll do great!”
Sunburst was silent. Scuffing his hoof along the floor, he looked at Spike, his eyes tinted with uncertainty. “What if she says...no?”
Spike looked him right in the eye. “You love her, don’t you?”
Sunburst bobbed his head. “More than anypony! Except maybe Sunset, but--”
“And you’d still love her, even if she says no?”
“...Of course. Of course I would.”
Spike placed a reassuring claw on his shoulder. “Then you’ll be fine.”
“Sunburst!” a voice called out. The two turned to see Starlight standing in the doorway. “‘We’re gonna be late for our picnic is somepony doesn’t hurry up~!” she sang as she went into the hallway.
“C-Coming!” Sunburst squeaked out. The stallion started to tremble, beads of sweat rolling down his face. “Oh...oh ponyfeathers!”
Spike’s eyes widened. “Sunburst, calm down!”
“It’s happening Spike, it’s happening!”
“Sunburst, breathe!”
“Oh...oh goodness, I feel faint! I’m gonna...I’m gonna--!”
Spike gave Sunburst a quick slap in the face before gripping him by the cloak, his green eyes full of ferocity. “Snap out of it!”
Sunburst stopped short and blinked twice. He looked at Spike in shocked confusion. “Did you just slap me?”
Spike released him, now looking apologetic. “I was calming you down!”
“...Why would that calm me down!?”
“Sunburst!” Starlight yelled from down the hall. “Our food’s going to get cold!”
Sunburst swallowed hard as Spike gave him a silent thumbs up. The young unicorn took another deep breath and left the room. As Spike followed him out, Twilight came from the opposite direction with a questioning smile. “Where are they going at this hour?”
“On a picnic,” Spike said casually.
“...Really?” Twilight shifted her confused gaze to Sunburst’s and Starlight’s retreating silhouettes. “Sunburst looked awful nervous to be going to a picnic...even more than usual!”
Spike snorted, crossing his arms.. “He should be nervous. He’s proposing.”
A moment of silence passed, and Spike’s claws immediately went to his mouth. His eyes slowly trailed up to Twilight, who stood frozen.
“You picked a nice spot, Sunburst,” Starlight commented as she pushed aside her empty plate.
The two of them ate on top of a small hill, surrounded by wide open spaces. The the purple picnic blanket beneath them was soft and comfortable, and the daisy sandwiches were nothing short of delicious. The sun began to set, painting the sky a beautiful mix of red, pink, and golden yellow. Starlight promptly moved on to dessert, pulling her chocolate cupcake closer. “You’re really coming out of your shell,” she added. Her eyes glittered in the fading light as she smiled. “You know that?”
Sunburst blushed as his gaze fell onto the picnic blanket. “W-Well I can’t take all the credit,” he stammered. “I never would’ve left my house if it weren’t for you.” His eyes lifted. “In fact, I...I wouldn’t even be the pony I am today if it weren’t for you.”
Starlight took a bite out of her cupcake before holding a hoof against her mouth as she chuckled. “Well, don’t forget about Princess Flurry,” she said after swallowing. Sunburst’s gaze dropped again as he played with the end on his cloak.
“Starlight, you make me feel better than I am. I deeply admire the mare you’ve become...and I love...everything about you. I...love you, Starlight. And...and I want to spend the rest of my life with you--if you'd be willing."
Starlight regarded him strangely, her cheeks covered with cupcake crumbs. “Sunburst, what--”
A train whistle pierced in the distance, followed by a hardy “ALLLL ABOOOARD!”
Starlight’s mouth dropped when she looked down the hill. “The train?” She looked back and forth between the Friendship Express and Sunburst, her eyes widening. “Wait a minute,” she said, looking around them, her ponytail whipping from side to side. “This is…” She froze, her features flooding with realization. “This is where--!”
Sunburst took Starlight by the hoof, and smiled gently. “Starlight Glimmer...will you marry me?”
Starlight’s other hoof flew to her mouth. Tears welled up in her eyes, despite her attempts to blink them away. Before Sunburst could voice his concern, she lunged forward and embraced him tightly. “Yes,” she laughed. She sniffed briefly and buried her face into his shoulder. “Yes,” she repeated in a soft whisper.
Sunburst released a breath he didn’t know he was holding and held Starlight close with a tearful grin. They slowly pulled apart and stared at each other as the train whistle sounded a second time. A slow smirk formed on Starlight’s face as she leaned in. “Hmm...I wonder where we left off last time?”
Before Sunburst could even think of a reply, her lips planted on his, sending shock waves through his brain. Starlight gently pulled him close and made a soft noise at the back of her throat as she kissed him.
As the final whistle sounded, Starlight pulled back and opened her eyes. Sunburst’s eyes were crossed, and his coat was beet red. A strangled sound escaped his lips as he fell limp in Starlight’s hooves with a goofy smile plastered on his face.
“Sunburst!?” Starlight yelled out as her fiance lost consciousness. She set him down on the picnic blanket and shook him vigorously.
“Sunburst, wake up!”
“Married!?” Sunset exclaimed. She had come jumping through the portal as soon as Twilight wrote her the news.
“Isn’t it great!” Twilight trilled, clopping her hooves together in delight.
Spike looked up at her, his arms crossed. “You really didn’t have to call her over. Sunburst wanted it to be a surprise!”
“That’s kind of on you,” Sunset pointed out awkwardly. She turned to Twilight before Spike could defend himself. “It’s great yes, but...dating Starlight? Okay, I get it. Those two are obviously fond of each other. But now he’s marrying her?”
Twilight’s eager grin slowly faded. “What...What’s wrong, Sunset? You don’t approve?”
Sunset’s head snapped up. “W-Well, no, o-of course! Of course I approve.” She gave a weak smile and ran a hoof along the floor. “It’s just that...gosh, I missed so much of his life, and now my baby brother’s going to be somepony else’s husband…”
“And Starlight’s going to be a wife,” Twilight sighed happily, bringing a hoof to her chest. Spike grinned, nodding.
Sunset’s eyes turned downcast. “Well...at least now he’ll have somepony to keep him company while I’m...away,” she admitted. “I hope he’ll have enough room in his house for the two of them."
Twilight’s eyes widened. “Wait a minute...wait, you’re right!” She frowned worriedly as Spike cocked his head to the side.
“About what?”
Twilight’s hoof smushed against her cheek. “I-If Starlight marries Sunburst, she wouldn’t exactly be living with us anymore. She’d be...living with Sunburst.” Tears started to collect in her eyes. “She’ll...she’ll be...leaving the nest!”
Spike placed a claw on her shoulder. “Twilight, Starlight’s still gonna be your student! She goes back and forth between Ponyville and the Crystal Empire all the time!”
“I know!” Twilight sniffled, grabbing him and clutching him close to her chest. “It’s just...oh Spike, our little girl is growing up!”
“She’s older than us!” Spike grunted.
Sunset Shimmer joined in on the hug and squeezed them both tightly. “Sometimes I wish he would stay small and cute forever,” she choked.
“I knoooow!” Twilight sobbed.
Spike sighed loudly as the two mares squished him. “So…” Sunset sniffled, glancing over at Twilight. “What is this? Are we...in-laws now?”
Twilight paused, her eyes glittering with tears. Her mouth wobbled as she nodded. “I’m okay with that,” she squeaked softly. Spike finally wriggled his way out of their iron grip and landed on the floor.
“Come on you guys! This is supposed to be a good thing! You two should be happy for them!”
The two mares looked at Spike in surprise and quickly collected themselves. “R-Right,” Twilight said, clearing her throat. “I-I suppose we should...start working on invitations?”
Sunset sighed and sat down on her haunches while Spike grinned. “There you go! Let’s see, there’s all of us…”
“Trixie,” Twilight chuckled, rolling her eyes.
“Their parents…” Spike continued. Sunset’s mouth went dry.
“Shining, Cadence and Flurry would want to come too,” Twilight added thoughtfully. “And since they’re coming, Princess Luna and Princess Celestia would want to attend as well!”
Sunset’s eyes almost bulged out of her head. Before her mind could even form a coherent sentence, a frantic voice echoed the Castle halls.
“SOMEPONY HELP!”
Twilight gasped and bolted out of the library with Spike following immediately after. Sunset briefly shook her head and quickly galloped after Spike. They followed Twilight through the Castle until they reached near the main hall. Starlight Glimmer stood there with Sunburst draped across her back. “Twilight, I need--!”
Her eyes locked with Sunset’s. “...Oh boy.”
Spike walked up to Sunburst’s limp body and frowned. “I guess she said no, huh?”
I am writing with a terrible cold on my hands 
Hopefully it'll be cleared up by the next chapter, which is the final one of the two!
Also if you caught the TMNT reference, I love you forever! 
Thank you for reading 
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Of course you would do something like this.
Now to read the story.
I'm six lines in and I already love it.
PrettyGoodNeedsMoreFlurry/10
Noice. Starlight seen as Twily's little bird frying the nest? Now that was pretty unexpected. I wonder what's going though Rainbow's head at the moment.
What do we have here
Heh heh heh. Called it. Great story so far though!
Lol
I think you have doubles here.
Methinks this should be a question mark, or a question mark and then an exclamation point... Or an interrobang (‽).
7332745 Good job, me
Fixed!
Its cute, and I like how it plays like a real proposal
This is going to be interesting, that's the only thing I can tell for sure at this juncture. Can't wait to see more, and I hope your colds clears up soon!
7332750 I'm still not done reading though, and I have edited my previous comment to add more typo reports. But for god's sake, this fic is freaking cute, you're gonna kill me with diabeetus!
Looks fun. I'd love to see how this descends into heartwarming insanity.
By the way, by not inviting Discord, he is practically guaranteed to crash the wedding.
You made me feel tingly inside can't wait for more chapters
Okay, I'm sold. This being the first StarBurst fic I've seen that goes into this, I'm definitely going to keep an eye on it. I just hope that Sunburst clears up that little misunderstanding that Rainbow Dash saw. Btw, when you say that the next chapter is the final one of the two, do you mean that this story will only have two chapters? If so, then that's a shame because this story has potential to go for at least six.
Knowing Rainbow, she's told the others and are rushing double time.
Interesting idea. Can't wait for the next chapter
For the sake of puns, I'm gonna wing it: al-betrothed!
(get it? cause albatross? nevermind then, i'll just be going)Now... in your description, it should be "Sunburst decides to work up the courage".
Just a heads up!
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I can definitely see how Sunset's caught off-guard by this sudden turn of events, as well as how Twilight is slightly reluctant to let Starlight go, even though she's happy for her. But unless we see some kind of actual objection from both Sunset and Twilight Sparkle, I really don't see how this conflict between Starlight, her mentor and her potential sister-in-law's plans will be an important plot point in the story as compared to, say, the imminent marriage between Starlight and Sunburst.
If Sunset and Twilight were to somehow express their objections in the next chapter, which isn't really hinted at in this one, the only way this could end with the maximum of two chapters without the resolution being hopelessly contrived is the marriage going ahead and both Twilight and Sunset Shimmer still reserving some objections towards this union which will gradually fade over time, or they will cast their objections aside soon enough and accept this with open hooves, which, if properly executed, might require more than the two chapters that you had explicitly stated.
Or you could make the second chapter an absurdly long one, which would be amusing to see.
I'd reserve my judgement before the story is complete.
Liked/faved just for the wacky sitcom misunderstanding at the beginning.
My one major criticism of this story is the title, and unfortunately, the title is a MASSIVE problem. Betrothal is something that's arranged between families when the children are, well, children. Betrothal and engagement aren't the same thing. What Sunburst and Starlight just did in this story was get engaged, and they're both consenting adults, so..."Betrothed" is an inappropriate title for this story.
Since it's in the same continuity as Sunsplit and Sunburned, might I suggest "Sungaged" as an alternate, more appropriate title?
Anyway, loving this so far, but PLEASE fix the title. It really, seriously needs to be changed.
7333077 Heh, you're right. This cold medicine is NOT doing me justice tonight!
Edit: I has stolen your name! (Thanks for it)
Another edit: Sunsplit was actually by Masterweaver
Aww, I hope you get better. Despite your cold this is still comedy gold. Great start. Oh, I zecora'd there for a moment. Oops.
7333077 Spike notices the most obvious things it hurts that nopony else does in the show.
7333085 You're welcome, happy to help. And I know how it goes with cold medicine and allergy medicine...
Hope you feel better!
No joke, right when I got to the train, a train went past my house blowing it's horn.
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Oh, yes. And 5 bucks says someone'll whip up a new cover art picture for you before the end of next week.
7333143 I'm watching you, always
but it would be nice, we'll never know 
I honestly couldn't find anything more than this one here, and it's kinda gritty, at least on my end.
7333160 I don't know about that
I just hope the rainbow thing doesn't get resolved until the wedding.
"Wait, I thought Spike was getting married to sunburst."
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Derp.
I'm up waaaaaay too late, and honestly didn't notice that. 
You had better stop crying about this, you two. Before Celestia/Cadance/Twilight Velvet start pestering you about your love lives.
Seriously, there's still one Flash Sentry in each world. At least one of you could make a serious move here.
Poor Dashie
Have a moustache
Also, I hope you feel better soon!
It's when Spike points out that Starlight's older than either of them that I started laughing out loud. Well done!
Well, this looks like it's going to be vastly entertaining. Though Twilight and Sunset really wouldn't be in-laws. Not unless Twilight adopted a mare older than she is, which would be all kinds of weird. I'll just chalk that up to getting caught up in the moment.
Definitely looking forward to more.
Okay, that Dash scene at the start, it has to come up later. That's just a loaded gun waiting to be shot. Chekhov's gun I think it's called.
Still, a great and amusing start, can't wait to see the next chapter
Also, do get better soon! Drink lots of tea. Colds aren't good. Captain obvious signing off.
He's going to have to learn how to take a kiss or it's going to be a very long and awkward honeymoon for them lol. I guess other guests would be a few ponies from Starlight's old village as well since she made up with them too. It is going to be something for Sunset to meet with her parents and Celestia again. I was surprised that Sunset and Twilight wouldn't enjoy being sister-in-laws they seem to have a pretty good friendship going after all.
Huh...so this makes Sunset related to Twilight, who though the marriage of Shinning and Cadence now make both mares related to Celestia and Luna as in-laws. Man can't wait for that to sink in for them lol.
I didn't get what the significance of the train is though in the proposal was that supposed to mean something? Also how long as it been since the last story? How long were they dating up to this point because it's impossible to tell without any kind of reference in this. That scene with Spike and him all you needed to do was say have Spike say "Dude you two have been dating for (X amount of time here) and she's obviously happy with you." or something like that to help show how long they've been together up to this point.
I am very confused on who is doing all the talking or doing with all the Lights and Suns and all these simular names
Oh boy.
This is amazing fic i ever read kuddos to u sir yeash
I figured Sunset would be more upset about the engagement, but then she's probably distracted by the thought of meeting her parents and sort of parental figure Princess Celestia again. And go Spike, he's often the voice of reason for Twilight. Most weddings are usually pretty chaotic, but with how many royal figures will be involved (not to mention Sunset's emotional baggage), this is going to be particularly crazy. And entertaining. Looking forward to more chapters.
Liked and followed! Any other StarBurst fics I should be aware of?
7333976 Thanks
There's a bunch of Starburst fics here.
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They should ship them together.
Sungaged.
Mortgaged.
Another cute story, but...
The train thing really threw me off. I feel like it must be a reference to something, but I have no idea what.
I love it!!
7333598 reminds me of that scene from Independence Day.
I am such a weirdo I read the same story over and over again if it gives me the feelz
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Honestly not that different from people adopting each other into their families. The only part where it doesn't count is legally binding. Goodness knows I've been big brother to people older than me.
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Is there a source link for this cover art?
cdn-img.fimfiction.net/story/36s1-1466822926-333751-medium
Oh, and somebody owes me 5.
i really wanna see dashie's reaction after this