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moonlit scribe


I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaack! (and I wish the Twijack fandom wasn't dead)

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Hiatus: October 3rd, 2016


"No! I'd never do that!"I cried.
"But you will, my sweet, and bring down everything you've ever loved with it,"said the voice that had tortured me since I was a foal.


I hadn't had that dream, not since I had come here. But, now... My worst fears had returned, and with it came something I had never expected before. A new student, named Comet Tail. What he had to do with it, I never realized, not until now, when I became his friend. But I do now, and the last thing I want is for anyone to know where he came from.

I am Sunset Shimmer, and I will save us. Both of us.

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Comments ( 17 )

In my experience homeless shelters give people beds by the night not permanent rooms. The dialogue is good though.

7306020 Oh... Well, I've never been in a homeless shelter, so I don't really know for sure.

7306970
I've volunteered in soup kitchens a bit. Some hostels give people rooms in the short term, but there are so many homeless around that they would rapidly move Sunset on into a socially subsidised flat, with rent she could pay from a part time job. She'd still have to deal with difficult recently-homeless people as in your story.

7307131 Should I make it AU? I mean I'm not sure, but I wouldn't want to offend anyone. I'm not sure I really want to change the actual content of the story, though.

7307702 You needn't change it substantially, just make it social housing with difficult neighbours or a squat.

Umm could you like note the fact that this is AJ's perspective , cuz like until half way though I was like what the heck and then it hit me.

Aside from that tid bit I like this and look forward to more. :D :D

Sunset will be badass in this story, right?

7332584 Well, a little when she meets the other main character of the story.

There , there it's fine , we've all been there tried to write in one style consistent, and found it too difficult no problem

7387635 Yeah, I'm trying to write a new chapter for this and another of my published stories, and trying to write the first chapter in another two unpublished story. I can't exactly do it all at once.

Luna haven't heard all the story,did she?

Saw this in group. Will read later and let you know how it is:twilightsmile:

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