Your paragraphs could be broken up a bit more, I found myself skimming some of them. It's too early to comment on the story. But with stories like these imo the bread and butter of the story should be conflict between the main character and the princesses/mane 6, try not to resolve it too quickly. It's tagged dark and drama so I think I'll like where this goes.

Very interesting and unique concept. You have my attention.

Yes freaking love the twist and the whole, "Human becomes equestrian villain" specially nightmare moon a character that lacks some proper backstory.

So, yeah, nothing great about me I'm afraid. But, that's not why you're reading this, is it? No, you want to see how my life went from dull and mundane to the worst possible thing I could have ever imagined.

I love how this statement is meta, and speaks directly to the reader. I read that you're writing this in a literal story telling fashion, and that's going to make this concept even more interesting.

turned into a Rule 63 version of Nightmare Moon

Did you need to do that? Honestly I just feel that louses some opertunitys
like if he was against that, the situation would be even worse
or if he liked it, it would be a small light in a sea of darkness
and if he was indifferent, you'd have the same story but I wouldn't be comenting

I'm not talking the nice, smooth brown your average African-American is blessed with, either.

Oh stop it you. And that's not all we've been blessed with if you catch my drift. I'm talking about basketball skills

Like and fav!

These usually are not my type of story, but you have captured my interest. I'll await the next one eagerly.

7390483 I agree

This guy is as generic as a Honda civic. He is basically every other character in this type of story."I'm not important or interesting but these thing happen and now I'm in shape, important, and powerful!" Wish fulfillment.

7412281 Who would wish to be trapped on the moon for a thousand years? Did you not read the description? Silly person..

First thing that niggles at me is that he's ON the moon. Nightmare Moon was imprisoned IN the moon. As in, fused with it. Magically. Hence the silhouette on the moon. Hence the name, "Mare IN the moon".

Other than that though. Good story. Can't wait to see where this goes.

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So I decided to create a story where the human becomes Nightmare Moon right after she's been banished, with the focus of the narrative on how he handles it and the events to follow. Like it? Hate it?

I'm really not sure yet. The premise doesn't really sound like anything you can do much with. "A thousand years of sitting around alone with nothing at all happening" doesn't seem like it would make for a very engaging story unless you skip over effectively all of it. Well, we'll see how that works out.

please don't let him have a second voice in the head, till now it looks good.

Space Core is jelly

7784098 lol!

7479214 SSSHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

A bit of an abrupt start leads me to think that he is just going to wake up from a coma at the end.

Still I am interested to see where this goes!

7644368 But I want him to have a second voice in his head!

Good start.

and I'd allowed several of my coworkers to talk me into going with them to Jerry's

cow-orkers? XD or co-workers?

but otherwise a good start

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Cow Orkers is now going to be a think I will add to my games from now on.

I really like this concept, not Celestia will be surprised when her sister comes back as a male

Really good so far!!

Oooooo... Me likey.