16-yr-old Twilight has been held in stasis for a millennia, ever since her mother was banished. Now, she must wait. Wait for her mother to return, wait for justice on Celestia and wait for a kinder world. After all, who would trust the Daughter of a Nightmare?
Inspired by Polaris501's story 'Heir of the Nightmare'
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You wrote this good enough for me to hate Sunset...
Good job...
Too fast when we got to AJ and Dash. had trouble following.
8017621 Yeah, me, too.
It ALSO might not hurt if you (the author) indent your paragraphs at the beginning of each one.
Oh, and maybe put SPACES between them? It's a bit hard to tell where one stops and the next one starts.
8017621 I could make the scene longer.
8019218 it's that it became hard to follow after the colt was found out. what happened tothe colt and yeah longer should be the thing it really felt rushed. slower pacing
8019250 Reread it now. I removed the colt and put in a better explanation.
8019260 much better, but question. why is Rarity called silver? She's marshmellow white and you had Fluttershy as purple.
8019387 Better?
Fluttershy is yellow, like a golden flower petal, a warm pat of butter, or Bart Simpsons penis.
8019464 I fixed it!
8019462 yup, just wonder how that happened.
8019500 No clue how I made Flutters purple. I guess I was focused on Twilight.
8019536 stil the best typo ever. instead of Stripped Gear. Stripper Gear.
8019546
RIGHT!!!??? That was hilarious!
8019554 yup.
8019572 Would you be willing to be my editor for this story? Please, I need one.
8019579 I'M not good at that trust me.
8019593 Do you know anyone who is? I REALLY need an editor.
8019632 join Lookign for editors.
8019747 I don't know what that is.
8019847 a group that people can submit stories for editing.
8019847 if you need help with editing i can help out
good chaper btw
8022621 Really!! Oh thank you thank you thank you!!!!! I accept!!!!
8022797 np happy to help just upload it and i will chek it over
MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Btw great story so far. :)
8022810 okay
8024290 Calm down everyone, please! I'm working on it!
8025428 okay
Sunset you've done fucked up now
Woot! Been busy so I haven't gotten to all of the updated stories till now and I must say......Thank you!!!!!
PLEZ UPDATE
8066404 Y'rah, share the sentiment
needs far more and the non salauche way this all went about feels wrong.
egg
me think when the mane 6 learn the truth or atleast twilight/luna side of things, they going to be piss at the princess.....
Tia gon' die
8097725 And
Da faque
My reaction to sunset's action.
This story is good but it is really rushed. I feel for this chapter in particular things are skipped over too fast.
Fluttershy along with the others should've glared at sunset for what she did last chapter and how she was treating twi this chapter.
There also should've been a little more reluctance from the rest of the mane 6 regarding leaving twilight alone. Maybe have had it mentioned that they pretended to go but secretly followed twilight to keep an eye on her and make sure she was okay
Update!!!!! Thank you. So Celestia how are you going to get out of this one mahahahahaha
8104409 betting Celestia had to keep twilight in stasis in order to keep her safe, I bet there was a good amount of pony who want to harm young twilight and Celestia kept her safe best she can, and it most likey kill her heart to have to put last of her family in stasis for long time....
also I like how sunset is a bitch but I do hope she stay and learn to be good pony, that and she and twilight are ship together
8104445 True but how will she convince Luna and Twi that though after all Luna isn't going to want to listen and what will this mean for the elements of harmony? I agree that Sunset being dark being cool way to go, it will be interesting to she her character development. And as for ships well let the surprises begin
8104453 agreed that or all of them fall for twilight lol......
8104461
8104465 I want the next chapter....for this story and many others
8104473 Tell me about, I have one story that seems to update once ever 2 years lol
8104475 one story I read was update in like 3 year then got lot of update, it even finish and got a squeal going,
8104481 This is why we what one day they come back but sometimes waiting is a pain lol
8104487 aye that true or there update and look like going to keep update after being close to being dead then no update after while... I understand rl is important but still it how I escape form my worthless painfully life...... I need cheesecake