- Member Since 7th Oct, 2012
- offline last seen Nov 7th, 2022
Stormbringer
I write romance with intimacies, not clop. To my readers, I quote The Bard: “We who prologue-like your humble patience pray, Gently to hear, kindly to judge, our play.” (Henry V)
Sequels1
-
Stormbringer · 28k words · 47 9 · 865 views
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Stormbringer · 28k words · 47 9 · 865 views
- Stormbringer · 23k words · 39 13 · 1k views
- Stormbringer · 7.4k words · 92 9 · 3k views
- Stormbringer · 14k words · 53 5 · 660 views
- Stormbringer · 26k words · 82 9 · 1.7k views
- Stormbringer · 57k words · 34 8 · 643 views
- Stormbringer · 24k words · 45 8 · 634 views
- Stormbringer · 7k words · 43 0 · 1.6k views
Featured In8
Shipping 💖11,669 stories ·9,737 members
- Cheerilee's class!574 stories ·214 members
Twilight is Best Pony6,371 stories ·3,071 members
Twilight Sparkle12,269 stories ·4,753 members
Celestia X Luna Shipping (lunestia/princest)549 stories ·1,016 members
Twirilee29 stories ·374 members
Twilight's Marem/Harem3,583 stories ·2,220 members
Stories on Goodreads28,599 stories ·492 members
Stats
Page generated in 0.113 seconds
Total duration
1,081 users online
216,965 hits today, 2,054,621 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
*reads this, and rereads it*
Ya know my Friend, I do NOT do this very often, but you have earned it!
*Gives you a Deep Bow with my muzzle touching the ground*
7277719 Many humble thanks, my friend.
Oh wow you when you said you improved the story a bit you really meant it. I have the Original downloaded up to bookend 3 been waiting for 4 but I know how hard it can be to write or find time to write something at times. Its very good.
7277724 Just gonna note that Chapter 8 has 13 views and Chapter 9 has 143, so... I think that's what most people came for.
7278354 Keep the public happy, I guess.
Celestia was there right after it happened. It is only that the laws are in place that keeps Cherrilee's sperm donor alive.
Would I wish that something else could be done; the only good rapist is a dead rapist.
I know this was done to add drama and such, but why couldn't twilight just teleport herself and thunder hammer to celestia, and explain the situation rather than teleport everyone else and leave herself in danger?
As I was reading part two of "Bookends" I found myself reminded of an old joke that until now I had always found a bit insulting. The question is asked: "What do Lesbians do on their second date?" and the punchline then is: "They rent a U-Haul." (I realize there may be some in this global audience who might not get the joke, perhaps not being familiar with what a U-Haul is, so I will explain that it is a company that rents moving vans or trailers.) I always felt this joke was an insult, but to be honest I have to admit that there is a grain of truth in it. When one feels that one is in a minority and might only have one chance to be happy with someone... perhaps "desperate" is the appropriate word... one can be quite prone to rushing along in a new relationship and trying to make it into the ideal "dream come true" even if one still feels uncertain that such is the case. Though it never seemed implied that this was the circumstance here with the happy couple Cheerilee and Twilight, the speed with which their relationship progressed simply reminded me of this phenomenon as I read and I thought I'd share those thoughts here.
In chapter two "Learning To Love" I was pleasantly surprised by the scene of physical intimacy. I was not surprised to find a sex scene in a work of fan fiction, but was rather pleased to find that the scene did not at all feel like the obligatory sex scene. It was not simple gratuitous sex, but rather a scene of two new lovers savoring their exploration of even the most intimate regions of each other's bodies. Their need to carnally please each other and to be pleased was obvious, yet their actions and thoughts were punctuated with an almost innocent tentativeness that made their interactions feel very genuine to me. I thought the scene was artfully and tastefully written.
I don't want to give away any spoilers, but I have to say at first that I was a bit taken aback by the revealed secret in chapter four and I thought that I might have to say something negative about the taboo here. But after giving it much sincere thought I have to say that, if I were in that particular situation, I honestly might come to the same conclusion as they did in the story. For me that will never be anything more than a hypothetical situation of course for a number of reasons, but still one has to wonder what one might do in the same circumstances. Thus I preemptively recant any negative criticism I might have given to that particular portion of the story. If such predicaments could occur in reality then I think such arrangements could occur as well and I believe it would be unjust for anyone not in those situations to judge those who are.
Last time I gave you kudos for the realism in your writing, and I must do so again. While I must admit that chapter seven "Horror In Paradise" had some very "cringy" moments to read, I can accept it as a necessary part of this story. Reality isn't paradise and is often far from it, and whether we are individuals living "alternative lifestyles" or not, often we must deal with that unavoidable truth. And for those of us who do fit into minorities, quite often there are individuals who not only disapprove of our ways of life or even our very existence, but also for some illogical reason feel that it is their responsibility to punish us for our "immorality". Many even have the audacity to claim that they are acting in the name of some higher spiritual being. Unfortunately, the only punishment these small-minded individuals are capable of conceiving is violent physical abuse. While I can wish that this was a chapter of the story that none of us could relate to, sadly such is not the case and, while it was not a pretty scene, I again applaud you as an author for bringing to light in this story a stark slice of reality that I know so many readers have had to live at least some variation of themselves. The scene is a reminder that, even if we are fortunate enough to find happiness and acceptance, there is invariably someone out there who irrationally finds our happiness offensive. Also, strictly from a writing point of view, the scene is a timely contrast against the previous scenes of family and friends happily accepting the declaration of the new relationship and contributes an antagonist and an impetus to help keep the story from "stalling", to elicit both emotion and further interest in the reader as the narrative is driven forward. Well done.
Again to avoid spoilers, all I will say of chapter eight (apart from the fact that more than one of the soliloquies evinced a tear and a sniffle) is that I thoroughly enjoyed Twilight Velvet's role. How very satisfyingly apropos.
Overall, part two impressed me as a carefully considered drama and a "roller coaster" of emotionally poignant events so significant to each of the characters that the reader can't help but empathize with them. I've often heard it said that one of the main goals of an author is to evince emotions in the reader and I think you've accomplished that very effectively with this installment. Both entertaining and emotionally evocative, "Bookends" part two definitely left me wanting to read more.
8340648
, but you don't believe it unless it makes you cry. 
I almost weep at your praise. I know of what you say and why, because of that, it means even more to me. But I will admit that I had never heard that joke before, and it did elicit a small chuckle, no offense. I'm reminded of the saying: It is true if it makes you laugh
My writings have been accused of 'rushing relationships'. To address that (for other stories), I could make an excuse that in spite of Lauren Faust saying that these are not humans in pony form, but ponies with human like brains, we do not know what the 'norm' for their emotional development would be. I like to think that they are more honest with their feelings and perhaps have a better sense of true relationship.
Know that your honest comments are appreciated as are you. And your insights have helped me look at my own stories from a fresh angle.
8340835
It is an interesting point to keep in mind, that physically and instinctively these are still ponies though mentally and emotionally they have evolved to be like humans. Though animals have mating rituals, such are usually far less time-consuming than a human courtship and, also unlike humans, the ponies obviously are more emotionally open to becoming friends or even lovers while humans would spend much more time establishing mutual trust. Perhaps it is simply a matter of choosing a mate to allure and then, having successfully attracted the mate, finding a spot to settle down. In the case of Cheerilee and Twilight, who are already familiar with each other, half of that has already been done and it becomes a simple matter of deciding where to do it.
oen thing I don't get is why did twilight now tp him to cantlot?
8401521
It was just part of the story. She was wanting to protect her lover and Cheerilee's mother. They were safer with the princesses and knew that they would come to help. Twilight made a decision, it was as much as protecting Cheerilee as it was defying Thunder Hammer. If she sent him to Canterlot he would have just came back. This took care of him permanently.
Plus I liked how the story played out.
8401553
oh I knew that, I just though of it,
a very well....perfectly put together chapter sir ive always loved read this series <3
Many thanks.
Today on lessons with stormbreaker, we learn that YOU DON’T SCREW WITH ANYONE AS CLOSE AS FAMILY TO THE ROYAL SISTERS. Seriously I have yet to read a story that portrays celestia even close to this way. This is amazing.
9664258
I blush at your kind words.
You'll be changing your tune very very soon Twilight.
9818709
There is that.
I wonder what the consequences would be if he assaulted her after her ascension. Death on the spot probably
A free trip to the moon. And not being an immortal Alicorn, the airlessness and cold would probably be uncomfortable.
Dash and Big Mac just feels cursed. Dash and Soarin, sure. Twilight and Big Mac, okayish. But Mac and Dash is just... no.
Yeah, still cursed.
Every time. CURSED