11412397 Reasonable. The gimmick here was that it was a super, super cliche story. Nothing in it is original in concept and there are probably thousands of stories with the same concepts on this site alone. It starts off a little slow up until this point, then gets dark and suicidy, then gets all edgelord, then gets soap box philosophical, then gets mary sue, then gets porny, then ends on what seems is a happy note but really doesn't resolve shit. Most of my things are experimental in some way, and this one was an effort to be as, uh, stereotypical of MLP fan fiction as possible. At least when I wrote it back in 2016. WHich is more recent than I thought, actually... wild.
Well you know what i'm just going to continue the FIRST train.
This is pretty well written, even though the MC has his mind in the gutter all the time.
You cruel author, holding off the logical continuation until the second chapter! The pancakes, obviously! *wink wink, nudge nudge*
Oh ho ho! Our poor human. One glance (or, rather, a lengthy examination) of Luna's 'pancake' was all it took. Can anyone blame him? Not me!
And he realizes the folly of going naked around Luna: Hard to hide, uhm, raging pancakes!
*cough cough*
Seems well written, so it gets a thumbs up from me, but it just isn't my taste, so I leave it here.
11412397
Reasonable. The gimmick here was that it was a super, super cliche story. Nothing in it is original in concept and there are probably thousands of stories with the same concepts on this site alone. It starts off a little slow up until this point, then gets dark and suicidy, then gets all edgelord, then gets soap box philosophical, then gets mary sue, then gets porny, then ends on what seems is a happy note but really doesn't resolve shit. Most of my things are experimental in some way, and this one was an effort to be as, uh, stereotypical of MLP fan fiction as possible. At least when I wrote it back in 2016. WHich is more recent than I thought, actually... wild.