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Majesty Song has always loved the statue garden. One night, while she sneaks into the garden as a young mare and meets Celestia, she begins her lifelong path to discover the dark truth about the statue garden's creation and purpose and her own purpose in a family that pushes her to be something.


A short story with help from magnumopai. This story begins over 900 years after the banishment of Nightmare Moon and takes place over the space of 15 years.

Chapters (8)
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I will read this FIRST thing in the morning :pinkiehappy: for now I will go eat a late dinner

777966 You suck. I actually toke the time to read this before commenting and where do you live Australia
I see the makings of a solid setting here. I hope to see more soon. I have high expectations of you considering Believing Stories.

ooo, Creepy :D

Have a good one.

Looks to be a fantastic beginning. Though I won't be here for the rest, I'll be sure to catch up when I return! Keep up the great writing! :twilightsmile:

this. Is. Going to HELL.... No no, I'm just messing with you. Looks like a my little amnisa twist may very well be on the way. :pinkiecrazy:

*facehoof* I just realized something....

Majesty Song= M.S. initials

Mary Sue= M.S. initials

....I'm going to be kicking myself over that for weeks now... :twilightangry2:

MORE?! :twilightoops:

How do you write so fast? XD Well, looks like I'm stuck reading your stories until I die... That would be a good death. :raritywink:

I literally stood up when you mentioned the statue seeming to move. I literally stood up and paced the room in a circle repeating "I can't do this, I can't do this, I can't do this". Weeping Angels, that was my first thought. I don't want to know if I'm right or wrong. XD I'll read the rest of the story when it comes out.

You're brilliant and I'm jealous.

779319 No unfortunately no Weeping Angels :fluttershysad: ... But I would SO LOVE TO DO THAT!!! I think I need to after this is done and the "Notes" Project is pretty well established.

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I'm glad I gave you inspiration then. ^w^ Well whatever is going on, I'm excited to see what comes next. :3

Ominous last line is ominous.

You've earned a thumb, and I'm looking forward to more :moustache:

You posted this RIGHT after we stopped talking didn't you? That is good because I would have been kept up even longer! lol

780530 actually...I think it appeared around 4:30 AM today. I did submit it around the time we were talking though. :coolphoto:

780539 Ah I see. Well that's good, I see that now. For what ever reason I thought it was almost 1 P.M. and I look down to see that it is a little after 4 P.M.

I have read and enjoyed! I already have an idea of what the statues are and why they are there; but I shall keep that to myself. At least until I get more evidence towards the statues.

780584 ok. I have a feeling it will be obvious...but I still would like to tell the story anyway even if people figure it out ahead of time. :pinkiesmile:

780593 By all means please do! Nothing should stop you from writing excellency! Your majesty.:trollestia:

I'm jelly for her presents and having the Princess and ruler of Equestria, Celestia, appearing at :trollestia:her birthday party.

794598 I know. after I described the shield I was like "Darn it! Now I want one too! :fluttercry: " lol

794619 I hope this story as the other one that you finished it was good and this looks even creepier, I like it.

If you have ever read the harry potter books or watched the Avengers movie or both, read this http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8145794/1/Chance_Encounters it is the most emotional non-shipping, non-romance, not dark, realistic, and greatest tribute to a great character story ever made. Though the emotional fanfics for the Artemis Fowl series are also very good.
:fluttercry: :raritydespair: :heart:

794752 Ok I've read all the HP books and seen some of the Avengers so I'll check it out :) I have to warn you this one will not be as intentionally creepy as Believing Stories. Hopefully it will still be good though. We'll see :)

I eagerly await the next chapter. Arrivederci...

794778 okay as long as there is some creepyness and cake i will love it.
The Cake is not a lie!!!!!! :trollestia:

794942 as long as you're still alive :raritywink:

:trixieshiftright: I still hold to the belief that a massive shit storm is on the horizon.

Good Princess Celestia, knows you sneak into the gardens, doesn't bust you for it. :ajsmug:

This is a good series you've started. You're right, not quite as mind-screwy as your last one, but I'm intrigued.

You have written an OC whom I care about. Whether this pony succeeds or not matters to me, in some small way. Well done! Hehe, this isn't that easy to do considering there's probably ten bad ones for every good one. :derpyderp1:

I want that shield...

797006 Thanks :pinkiesmile: Hopefully Majesty will stay interesting throughout the story.

I realized that I completely forgot to favorite this when I read the first chapter and I went on your page to send you a message about this story and saw that it had a second chapter. At first I was like " Why was I not informed of this?!" then I went on the story and saw that I forgot to favorite.:facehoof: my bad.

Sorry about the late update for all of those following. It's kinda I release the chapters once I feel like I've worked them to death. lol :twilightblush:

I think I see where this is going, but I'm not quite sure. I'll be more than happy to read and find out, though :twilightsmile:

809039 I have a feeling that most people have guessed by now where it's going but I still hope I can make it enjoyable :pinkiesmile: Thanks for not stating your guess here.

I assume that she's gonna end up a guardian of the garden, in some fashion. XP

Hmmm, Astrophel... Well, I'm unsure if want on this one, Type. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt that you've yet to disappoint me thus far. If I could give advice I'd say that the most important thing is to try and show how his addition into this story adds depth to Celestia's character and history. I do feel you're on the right path with this; if you continue to explore how out-of-her-depth Celestia is ruling the entire kingdom on her own, then we would feel the importance of Astrophel because we'd see the effect that loosing not one but both of her siblings has had on her ability to face her reign. But I won't presume to give you too much advice considering how well you've done with Believing Stories... But I feel if I bring that up any more and beat that particular horse any further (no pun intended (at first :trollestia:)) then you're gonna feel like nothing you do is ever gonna live up to it. XD

The big problem is I've been unsure why Celestia trusts Majesty so much. I guess I see now that the princess is preparing Majesty for her duties, and that's why she trusts her, and because she appreciates the pony's bravery... But I guess Celestia's motivations so far seem a little weak. I have faith that they'll work out though.

DX I feel bad for not being totally excited and filled with joy about this story. Despite what I've said I'm still enjoying this story and eager to see where it goes and engaged in the life of Majesty Song. Please don't be upset. :fluttercry:

And, I don't want to seem like I'm telling you how to write your story, just trying to give some feedback and advice. DX Man I'm really bad at this.

811396 lol. np don't feel bad. Feedback is appreciated.

She's going to end up with a pony version of a semper fi :ajsleepy: shits about to get real sad

Good to see a new chapter and I can already guess what is going to happen. I believe Celestia trusting Majesty so much has its own justification. She has been Majesty's best friend for her entire life. Their trust is like Celestia's and Twilight's.

It's been a long time sines I've felt human emotions of sadness.... You bastered. :rainbowwild:

Another solid update. I look forward to more :twilightsmile:

There were a few grammar errors in there, just small ones, ones that most people couldn't notice.
Amazing story by the way, can't wait for the next update.

A rock and a hard place, indeed.

Being given a choice like that would have scared the wits out of me at twenty-one. (Truth be told, it scares me now, nearly four of our decades later.)

Um...yeah...:twilightoops:...I can see a minor hitch in this plan. :unsuresweetie: It apparently hinges on Celestia having a secret army to fight against some kind of unspecified future threat, an army she apparently decided to make by turning unwilling ponies to stone (seriously, they do not sound happy about this). Not to be a downer or anything but...:duck:..when they are unstoned, as it were, what's to stop them from just telling Celestia to buck off. I don't really think she's thought things through all the way. :trixieshiftright:

A pony Semper fi?!?!?! Holy shit that's pritty deep hole.
But you know what... In a world that happy, there must be a sacrifc... To be onest, if it where me in that position... I would do it. That's what Semper fi means. Always do the right thing. Regardless of the cost. :rainbowdetermined2:

833880 Yep. It's Sempre fi to the extreme.

But wouldn't this be counter-productive? They don't sound like they're in any mental condition to fight whatever it is whenever that is coming. Shouldn't they be at least be in some sort of mental stasis so they don't lose their before that time comes?

I really need to pay more attention... I completely phased out the fact you wrote 2 chapters. Two!..... I am going to think on the story and get to you in a little bit.

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That's what I was thinking too.

Despite that one hitch, Type, this story is really starting to get good. Everything is coming together, and I definitely see where the issues have been resolved. Now we get to the gripping tension and conflict that was so powerful, so prevalent, so tangible in your first story. I see you still have it. ;3

Well, I was right on the what: Majesty becomes a statue (or, well, the option is there). However, until this chapter, the why eluded me. I couldn't figure out why Celestia would turn a pony who seemed to be her friend into a statue. But this chapter gave me the why, and I now look forward to more. :pinkiehappy:

:rainbowderp:You used my Semper fi refrince..
(Well I know this song is very inappropriate for this, but if you dont speak German. It will give you bucking gossbumps. Rammstines, Sonne.)
Other then that. My Marine corps self soluts your ' communits Flank.'

841863 *sigh* I'm going to kill that underling who started the whole "communist flank" bit.... lol jk... maybe :pinkiecrazy:

842015

If it's a communist flank... Does that mean it belongs to everyone? :ajsmug:

Just kidding. Anyways, I like the story so far. It's sweet and touching, and a good change of scenery from mental wards and suicidal Celestias. As well as the most interesting twist on Celestia turns ponies into stone I've ever seen. :3 Bravo, Komerade!

842141 Oi vey....My flank is not common property! My flank is Capitalist thank you very much! :trixieshiftright:

Thanks, though :pinkiesmile: . Yeah, I did need something a lot lighter from my first fiction. Even if Celestia still is dealing with a bit of a GLaDOS complex at least she knows who she is this time! I have no clue why I enjoy making her crazy though...

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