Sunset Shimmer - A Pony in Hogwarts

by ratedoni

A Pony in Hogwarts 03

A Pony in Hogwarts 03: The first ride is pretty bumpy

“You… you like my hair?” years later Hermione Granger would facepalm anytime Sunset reminded her of their first interaction, but right now one could be forgiven considering that the mousy haired girl had not yet defeated her longtime nemesis known as her hair, so hearing a girl that by all accounts had gorgeous wavy red hair with golden highlights say something non-sarcastic or even insulting about her hair was certainly mind blowing.

“Yeah, I mean, look at it, I’m sure no one in Hogwarts will have hair like that”

“Fortunately, AUGH!” The jibe was soon punished by Sunset’s quick hand making contact with Ron’s head “what was that for?”

“Ron, quick advice, never insult a girl’s look or the next seven years will be very painful and not by my hand” she said looking directly at Ron but while those two continued arguing Harry tuned them out and put his attention on the girl still standing.

“Don’t pay them attention, I think they are always like this” Harry said enjoying the day, so far he had made a couple of friends who didn’t care who he was, well, mostly, Ron treated him like a friend but Sunset wasn’t even amazed by his story, it was great, she just treated him as Harry Potter and not The Boy Who Lived like the rest of the wizards he met back at Diagon Alley.

“Is alright, are you excited about going to Hogwarts? I read the latest edition of Hogwarts: The History” that called Sunset’s attention from her entertaining argument with the other redhead.

“Wait… you already read it?” she asked to the girl who was about to get into a rant about the foundation unknowingly saving Harry and Ron.

“Yes, once Professor McGonagall arrived at my house and gave us all the information about me studying in Hogwarts I got the book and read it so I would know everything important” the brunette seemed so proud of what she had done that Sunset had half a mind of screaming ‘nerd’ at the top of her lungs but Ron’s comment saved her from committing that faux-pas.

“The professor went to your house? You’re a muggle-born?”

“A what now? What’s muggle-born?” Sunset’s confusion was obvious to Ron but thankfully instead of receiving a tactless answer that would have ended in him having a black eye Hermione was the one who answered.

“It means that while I am a witch my parents are muggles, what about you all?”

“I’m a Weasley, basically everyone in the family is a wizard” Ron said remembering the long list of family members that were written in his parent’s books, he didn’t know much about his mom’s side of the family and whenever he asked his mom went all quiet, it made him sad so he stopped asking.

“My parents were wizards too”

“I have no idea whatsoever and I don’t care” Sunset said with so much aplomb that they were all in awe at that declaration “so, anyone knows a game or we are just going to be talking about nothing until we reach Hogwarts?” and with that Ron searched through his bag and pulled a deck of cards teaching about a game called Exploding Snap, they quickly found out that Sunset’s agility and eye to hand coordination left them on the dust.

Finally after several rounds of the game, more debauchery involving huge amounts of candy that no sane parent will let their kids be involved into (much to the horror of Hermione remembering all the lessons she received from her parents about dental care), talks about their own lives and before all that one last round of introductions (Hermione was really amazed of meeting Harry after she had read about him in a book that talked about important wizards and witches of the last century) the train finally stopped and they got their things in order after they split the candy left over among them.

Once they were down Hermione found the boy that had lost his toad who was now clutching said toad on his hands.

“So this is it? They’re making us walk to the castle?” thankfully, before Sunset could get starting a voice powerful enough to be heard by everyone started.

“All first years over here!” both Harry and Sunset smiled at each other when they recognized the voice and quickly found Hagrid standing among the other first years; it was almost comical to see such a guy towering over so many children and at the same time be so careful around them, it was obvious why first year students were left on his care.

So after a little greeting by the half-giant they all got into boats that had no one rowing but they still moved; it was interesting for about five seconds before Sunset put her attention on a long squid tentacle rising from the waters to the amazement of all the other kids.

“Just to warn you, I’m starting to like sushi” Sunset said noticing how quickly the tentacle returned under the water.

So without anything else happening everyone was left on the entrance of the huge medieval castle watching the amount of statues, armors and paintings that moved in complete astonishment, even Sunset had to be sincere, she was amazed about the place, but for different reasons.

“Wow, if this is only the entrance then the rest of the castle is a gigantic kid trap, I mean, sets of armors everywhere? Is like they said, well, we have a bunch of eleven years old in the castle, what will be the safest thing that kids will never play with and will never hurt themselves when playing with them? I know, sets of armor made of metal with dangerous and pointy weapons with them” she said sending Harry on a fit of giggles that lasted until a stern woman with her dark hair on a bun received them and herded them to the mess hall where the rest of the students were reunited, or better said, separated by houses and quickly explained them how they were going to be sorted into the four houses of Hogwarts.

“I knew my brothers were lying when they said I had to fight a troll” Sunset refrained from saying something about Ron, being gullible and the absence of a brain.

“What if the hat sorts us on the wrong house or says we don’t belong in Hogwarts?” she barely heard Hermione mumbling about that and Sunset finally had enough.

“Okay, look, if they had used that dumb hat for who knows how long I’m pretty sure they have a lot of trust on it, and besides, who cares what house you get send to? I mean, if any of us is send to a different house than the others, will you stop talking to him or her?”

“Yes if they are sent to Slytherin” Ron said showing his distaste for those of green and silver making Sunset groan at those words.

“See? That’s what I was talking about!”

“Sunset is right, what if I get sent to Slytherin? Will you stop talking to me Ron?”

“But Harry, your parents were in Gryffindor”

“So what? That was them, this is our life, we can choose what we want and what we like” Sunset said huffing once more before getting ready to the spectacle that will be the house sorting.

Comments

[Ebonheart]

Excellent work, I look forward to more...
Any word on your Fake Sun story?

[badninja]

I get the feeling that she will like Harry end up choosing Griffindor. She may be ambitious as all high heck but deep down she disagrees with everything they stand for. I can see Ravenclaw but pony culture beats into the foals heads things more like Griffindor.

Overall this sounds like a good story and I hope to see more chapters in the future! Now tracking.

[Astorius]

*Sees that it has gotten its own story*

[Dicefire5]

Great to see that this got its own story!

I look forward to more of your work.

[warbird]

I'm really enjoying this. I hope you continue this story.

[Dorath]

Now I'm wondering ... with Celestia's and Sunset's influence, will Harry be a Slytherian this time around? (And what would that do to the cannon story ...)

[AndyDash]

Die-hard Potterhead here...yup, this is going on my reading list!

[ScopeEva]

This isn't half bad, not at all.

However you are in serious need of a proofreader or an editor to help clean things up, maybe add a little polish here and there. It's good as is, which is impressive shining through the mistakes and mangled grammar but with out those it could be great. If your interested I would be willing to help out, I have the free time at the moment, little rust on my Harry Potter but you've put me in the mood to go back and re-read it.

Oh and in the interests of getting a little more exposure, once things have been tidied up there are a bunch of groups you could add it too.

[Ghrathryn]

Gotta agree with ScopeEva on this one, there's at least a few flaws I spotted, such as using 'is' when you needed 'its' or 'it's'. Another case in point would be here:

“Yes if they are send to Slytherin” Ron said showing his distaste for those of green and silver making Sunset groan at those words.

The word in red should be 'sent'. That said, this could be interesting so watching.

[calinjc]

Sunset for Griffindor! Sunset for Griffindor!

[XYZDreadnought]

7272958 I honestly think Sunset would make a better Slytherin, She is good at manipulating people, and has a lot of ambition. hell she wants to be a princess for crying out loud.

And just think, she will be able to put Malfoy in his place constantly.

[XYZDreadnought]

Well looking forward to a long story of Sunset poking fun at the Harry Potter Universe

That said, is Sunset going to be able to use her pony magic, or will she be stuck with boring Harry Potter magic?

[Seirs]

Well this is a very interesting start to a story that seems to have a ton of great potential. Really looking forward to more.

[badninja]

So how is the next chapter progressing for you?

[PrincessFlutters]

This is going to be good!

[Vutava]

“You… you like my hair?” years later Hermione Granger would facepalm anytime Sunset reminded her of their first interaction, but right now one could be forgiven considering that the mousy haired girl had not yet defeated her longtime nemesis known as her hair, so hearing a girl that by all accounts had gorgeous wavy red hair with golden highlights say something non-sarcastic or even insulting about her hair was certainly mind blowing.

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I ship it.