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LackLustre


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Luna returns from the only place she remembers, to a world and two sisters she isn't even sure she loves. Although she is assigned a tutor to help her learn all that she has forgotten, the feral filly-now a young mare-is unsure that she will adjust and become the Princess of the Night everypony expects her to be.

Despite these challenges, she remains fixed on trying to find home, wherever it may be.


Princess Selena's design source is here.
In which I try to see how well I can write a very strange AU using overused a few tropes and bizarre headcanon.
Edited by NorrisThePony.
Romance tag is for later chapters.
Updates whenever.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 8 )

So I've read this story through twice, just to have the image of the events in my mind, and I have to say this piece is impressive. The variety is even more impressive, and the way you used them was the most impressive.

It was smooth, and I didn't had to stop once to reread a certain piece...Well almost. The only part that seemed out of place was when the Nightmare announces it's name. It didn't seem so menacing in the last two dialogue lines this being has before it possesses Luna. I personally would've strode out their interaction a bit longer, maybe go for a deceptive, manipulative route, where the Nightmare tricks Luna into having power to compare to her sisters.

All in all it was a fine read. Sure there are some snippets here and there of spelling/grammar errors, but the plot overshadows it completely.

I'd say it's a 7/10. Good work.

7281293 Thank you so much! Please be sure to give it an upvote and check out some of my other works if I have the time. It's always nice to get in-depth critique comments like yours. :twilightsmile:

This story has gotten my full attention now I can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update more soon. :twilightsmile:

Interesting different take on the story. I will fallow and see what happens

Rather disappointing that you decided to cancel this after just one chapter.

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I sat on the choice for a while - there were a lot of other things going on, so it kind of had to be.

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