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Stormbringer
I write romance with intimacies, not clop. To my readers, I quote The Bard: “We who prologue-like your humble patience pray, Gently to hear, kindly to judge, our play.” (Henry V)
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Lot a words at launch, pal.
In case anyone doesn't know, this and the following are re-launches. Enjoy.
I'm very happy with the story you writing this is a very interesting story to read keep up a good work update more soon.
7259319 Three more "books" to be added, then three more other stories. Thanks.
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I suppose this is a valid construction, but I reckon you mean 'genially'.
Welp, I liked it the first time, and I still like it now. Glad to have you back.
I am so HAPPY to have this story back I missed it so much.
Very interesting story. Also like the contrast between the name derpy and muffins. It's sad their isn't that much twixderpy or twixmuffins( as she now called.)
NO!!!!!!! WHY!?!?!?!? Why did you give Derpy her canon name!? I like the original name you gave her over her canon name! You originally named her Bubbles Star
Love the story, but it seemed much more rushed. It definitely could have been fleshed out a bit more. and depending on your writing style it could have had an exemplary plot using bigots and possibly a better reformation of Diamond Tiara as it was only hinted at in this. You could also have used much more description in all but one of the chapters, it would have made for an even better read. And don't get me wrong, I love it, just think it could be better too. I also think you could have fleshed out the time with which Muffins was pregnant. Show some ups and downs in the relationship with Twilight. No relationship is without flaw, and from those flaws arguments blossom. These are just suggestions to keep in mind in stories to come. Again, fantastic read and I really did enjoy it.
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Sorry, not rushed, just my style. As far as fleshing it out, it is part of a larger story. Some of your comments about Diamond Tiara will be addressed.
7262704 well alright then. Like I said, they where just suggestions haha.
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Every British or Commonwealth coin I've seen said Regina.
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My only goal is to have a love story between Twilight and Muffins, along with the adventures of their friends.
Your tone is quite angry when there isn't any reason to be. To paraphrase Bill Shatner; It's just a story.
So now, should we call Minuet; Colgate? Or Bulk Biceps; Snowflake. Maybe the Pie family be called Inky, Blink, Sue and Clyde? They are all 'fan names'. I'm sorry but head cannon is not cannon.
I am not a hater, in fact, my story gives Muffins a LOT of respect and character.
I respect your right of opinion but here is not the place to express them. I did 14 years in the military to protect those rights. But I have the right to write my story the way I want to.
I would be happy to debate your ideas. But by PM only.
BTW; Why would I help people who are against the disabled? I AM DISABLED!
I'm not going to censor your remarks by blocking it. But I hope you will do the tasteful thing and retract it yourself. As I said, I will be happy to correspond by PM. You have concerns that need to be heard out and discussed in the proper way.
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It isn't the UK and as a former Benedictine Monk, perhaps I should use Princeps, Celestia isn't a queen either.
7265359 oh get over youurself already. its his story and he can do what he wants with it. Her canon name is Muffins...get over it. I cant stand people who rag on other peoples stories cause they dont like something about it.
If you must know, when Stormbringer originally published this story he had named her Bubbles. But now he is using her canon name cause he wants to keep it as canon as possible. So get off your high horse and move on.
nobody is making you read the story...if you dont like it then you dont have to read it.
7265704 actually the writers of the show can do what they want with character names. you you know that they officially changed her name right? They even edited "The Last Roundup" so that Rainbow no longer calls her Derpy. So yes, Muffins is her official canon name now. So get over it. Its not an injustice...its a fucking show. so get over it, move on, and go rant somewhere else. If you're so upset about it, make a blog about it or go to Hasbro and voice your concerns
7265704 Jim Miller in a June 13, 2015 Twitter conversation explained that the name was changed to Muffins for legal reasons. "Clearance type things" that don't "fall under executive 'meddling'."
So yes, her name was officially changed to Muffins
Am I happy about it? not really but you dont see me ragging on Stormbringer for using her new canon name. I just got over it, just like you should
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Dude, I was just pointing out that Latin is gendered. You wanna Latin wrong it's no skin off my neck. And princeps is third declension so go ahead. Masculine and feminine have the same form.
7265704 Ok, here is the straight skinny. It is my story and I don't give a rat's ass what you say, I was one of the one who came up with the group name "I Don't Give A Flying Feather About Your Thumbs Down, So Shove It Up Your Ass If You Need To Do Something With It!" And you are WRONG. This is not a place to stand on your soap box and preach. It is a place to share stories. So I'm going to make it easy, I will not dignify anymore of your comments was a response. And if you continue to rank on my friends and fans you will be reported as being offensive and a nuance.
i like the story its cute. my only complaint is that you skip alot with out telling us how long was skiped. it felt like a lie when twilight said her and derpy was togeater for some time when it seemed only a few days had gone by. other than that its a really cute story. ^_^
7267388 It is there, not a glaring "6 MONTHS LATER...". Also, when the entire cycle is done, you may be surprised just how much time has passed.
But thanks for the complement. Hope you like the series.
Stormbringer.
I cried so much with this chapter
Brilliant story great ships in there 10 out 10
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Thanks for your input. Any honest comments are welcome. As far as sequels go, it was actually more inspired by the previously rather than being a true sequel.
As far as it being rushed, I think this pace is just my 'style'. I don't like to take time to explain how Twilight washes her hooves after going to the john (poor example).
Thank you for taking time to read and comment. Perhaps some other work of mine will be to your liking.
I liked it, the pace felt a little fast, but I guess I'm just a sucker for the growing romance fluff, and woke I prefer the name Derpy it really isn't a big issue to me, muffins is cute and fleshed out in an interesting way.
8167300 Thanks for your kind words. I personally like a fast paced story. If I want to read long and drawn out, I will read War and Peace or The Hunchback of Notre Dame (those were torture to read).
8167748 I Can agree with that, even drawn out romance needs a REAL story. Lol.
But again, I enjoyed this, so hard to find a good, DeLight story that isn't abandoned.
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No offense, but he did kinda re-write some of this story as well as the others. There are less details than there used to be. I have been reading his stories since the beginning. Please don't be too critical on him. He is a very, very, very busy man after all.
First, I must say that I am very pleased with the portrayal of Muffins in this story. I've always been fond of the character (but not entirely sure why) and to think that she could be something other than a cross-eyed simpleton is very refreshing, a welcome change from her usual depictions. I think you've done a fine job of creating a believable back-story for her that also explains her current condition and gives a new aspect to her character that I think many of us can relate to. I'm also very pleased with how quickly Twilight begins to correct others using the name "Derpy" once she sees the pony in this new light, as well as how readily the others open up to Muffins once they can see past their own misconceptions of her. Indeed, never judge a book by its cover.
I'm also enjoying the depictions of Applejack and Rarity in this story. I've always imagined that in a romantic relationship, considering their differences in the past, they could be quite saucy with each other and this story thus far has shown them pretty much exactly as I had imagined. Conversely, I'm a little disappointed by the depiction of Pinkie Pie as a wantonly promiscuous liquor drinker, but alas such people do exist and if a pony were to be such a character I suppose it would indeed be Pinkie Pie. And of course Rainbow Dash here is pretty much what we would expect her to be, so I really cannot criticize your characterization of her. I haven't really seen enough of Fluttershy in this story yet to draw any conclusions about her, so for now we'll just have to wait and see.
In some ways I feel like this story progresses a bit too quickly with the initial romance and marriage all taking place in the first installment, but I try to remind myself that these are short stories and not full-length novels and that, much as it is with our favorite show that is allotted a mere 22 minutes each episode in which to attempt to tell us a quality story, in a short story the pacing must be balanced to keep the reader interested and entertained. So I can't honestly be too critical of the pacing, though I do think it would be interesting to see how you would write a story in which the characters are less certain of their feelings for each other and the mere courtship is an adventure in itself.
When I talked about "Bookends" I praised you for including elements of realism in the story, and I feel obligated to do so again here regarding the depiction of the children and their interactions. As is often the case in romantic relationships of this nature, at least one of the parties involved has children from a previous relationship and it can be a challenge to help them understand that their parent has entered into a new realationship now and that though it may feel very different that they will still be loved just as much. Furthermore, even when children are not so directly involved, we may have younger siblings, nieces and nephews or cousins, et cetera ad infinitum, who may be exposed to and influenced by our actions. As responsible adults we must be mindful that we set examples for these young people and conduct ourselves accordingly. And though in this day and age "unconventional" relationships are becoming more conventional, unfortunately the children are often the innocent bystanders who must also deal with the senseless prejudices that still exist. So again I give you kudos for reminding us with a slice of realism that even relationships that can feel like a fairytale romance can have their repercussions.
(Also, I thoroughly enjoyed the part where Twilight was teleporting Filthy Rich to various uncomfortable locations. Though some might argue that this is out of character for her, I thought it was a great illustration of how strongly she feels about all the members of her new family and the lengths she might be willing to go to for their happiness and protection.)
And of course there must be magic! I was also pleasantly surprised by the Unicorn Horn Sex and particularly the results of that intimate and magical interaction. Admittedly, I wasn't surprised by the nature of the foal born from this immaculate conception, but given the circumstances I suppose one really couldn't expect anything else. I look forward to finding out where you're going to take us with that special young filly. It was also a very nice touch to have Twilight be able to magically share the experience of giving birth with Muffins. If more men and women could share experiences like this in just such a manner I've no doubt that we would have a far greater understanding of and appreciation for each other.
If I recall correctly you said this was your first effort at writing this sort of story. That being the case, I have to say that so far I am very impressed. I look forward to reading more and most certainly will.
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Thank you for your kind words and observations. As not to give too much away, I will follow up with a PM.
Muffins Star I like it, I mean I think all 3 names are acceptable in Fanfic stories as it's creative license but I like it.
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Thanks.
Are they trying to keep it secret or not?
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Not secret, just being discreet.
“You’ve said some serious things, Mr. Rich. As if your narrow mind decides what’s right and what’s wrong. Your version of the ‘truth’ is all you can wrap your narrow mind around. And so you on pass your so-called knowledge to an innocent filly who, out of respect, takes what her father says as how things really are. You belittle and pass judgment on ponies without even really knowing anything about their lives or who they really are.
You really screwed up this time. Filthy Rich.
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That is not very discreet, discreet would be asking for 2 bedrooms and sneaking into the other's in the middle of the night.
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Okay, not discreet, but maybe low key.
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Thank you.
This really needs a non-con tag or at least an authors note at the start of the chapter. Rape is a really triggering topic and had I known there was a rape scene I would not have been reading this.
I was enjoying it but can’t go further. Thank you for the fic.