An Iron Pawn
A New Form
My eyes opened slowly. Well technically they didn't open since I didn't have them anymore, but you get what I'm saying.
'All right first things first. I'm in a new game, in Equestria. That probably means that Equestria isn't all cake, smiles, and rainbows. Games never take place in somewhere that nice.'
I paused for a moment, getting my thought back on track.
'Alright, field of vision...two eyes. Body feels...scratch that body doesn't feel. Strange ... alright limbs.'
I slowly move one leg, then the other, then my arms. I pull myself out of the smoking crevice that I had found myself stuck in, and I glance at my body.
'Well, damn. She sure went all out on this.'
Looking down at my body, I could see why I couldn't feel anything. I was made of metal. No I wasn't wearing a suit of armor or anything (gods be praised if you start out with some), I was literally made out of metal. My body had grown considerably, I was easily 7 feet tall, maybe closer to 7 and a half. My hands were ... different. I only had two large fingers, accompanied by a thumb on each. I quickly rapped my knuckled together, then hit my chest, and listened carefully to the ringing. I was solid all the way through.
Next I looked down my legs. They to had changed. My feet were a single solid piece, I had no toes. In addition all of my limbs were much longer than they should have been, proportional to my body. I'd have shrugged, but I soon discovered that I couldn't, as I didn't have a neck, or one long enough to shrug at any rate. It was a still a good body, all things considered.
"So ... do you like it?" I heard a familiar voice ask from behind me.
I turned around to look at my sponsor. She looked different, which didn't really surprise me, what did surprise me was how she looked. I guess that she used up too much power bringing me here, because it looked like she was stuck partway between the form she appeared to me in, and her actual form.
Cora was about the same height, 4 and a half feet. She, like my new form, had two fingers, and a thumb, except hers were more claw like, and her feet resembled her hands. Her body looked like it was a solid piece of metal, but with a closer look, I could see what looked like cracks in her body, that had a slight glow coming from them. She still had hair, which was now just past shoulder length, but it held a metallic sheen, and looked like hundreds of metal strands.
"Your body, I'm not that good with live things..." she said, shaking me out of my examination, "How is it? Did I do well?"
I said, "You did an excellent job Cora, I couldn't be happier."
Well, that's what I would have said, but for some reason I couldn't.
I tried again, with the same result.
I slowly reached up a hand to my face and began to rub it around. Aside from my eyes, I had no facial features to speak of (see what I did there?). No nose, or mouth.
'Damn.'
"What? Did I do something wrong?" Cora asked with concern.
'Well, I don't have a mouth, so I can't really speak. Which is going to make this game much harder.'
"Oh, I'm sorry ... Wait," she said suspiciously, "If you can't talk, then how can I hear you?"
'You're my sponsor, you're going to be aware of me at all times.'
"Oh..."
We had reached another moment of silence. I had a feeling that they would become commonplace in our conversations.
'Never mind, this is a wonderful body. So then, will you tell me what domain you hold sway over?'
"Oh, right. I'm the Core Goddess. Center of the planet and all that."
I nodded in understanding. It certainly explained my body, I'm now almost certain that it was made of iron.
'Thank you for answering, but I must ask you another question, does your body normally look like that?'
Cora had a confused look, but she glanced down at her body and gasped.
"No, no, no, no, no! This isn't good. I used too much power! I can't change back completely. What do I do?" Cora was panicking and I found it rather amusing, but I decided to calm her down.
'Simple. You leave me to protect you, while you regain your strength, though it will be much faster, if we take out some other pieces.'
"O-OK then."
I walked over to her and picked her up, she was very light, and placed her on my shoulder. I then really looked around for the first time. Aside from the large crack in the ground I had come from, the entire area I was in was heavily forested. The trees were enormous, and were definitely tropical. I was probably in a rainforest.
'So where are we anyways?'
"Well I didn't have much strength left, so I brought us close to my sister's domain, it eased the strain a bit."
I looked around, and every direction was pretty much identical, so I decided to just pick a direction and start walking. Before I had taken a step a net dropped over me. I looked to see where it had come from, to my surprise there was a group of five diamond dogs, three holding crude spears, one with a tube, which I assume shot the net, and one who looked to be in command of the group, and had several glass vials strapped across his chest.
"What is it?" one of the dogs said.
"Of no matter. It still work in mines." said the leader of the group.
Work in the mines, would I? I slowly and deliberately lifted my hands to the net, and tore it in half. The dogs looked on is shock. The first to recover was the leader, he quickly grabbed a vial and leaped towards me, smashing the glass into my face. When the vial broke, it released some sort of green gas. It didn't bother me in the slightest, as I had no mouth or nose. I responded to the attack with a sudden punch, which turned the leader into a lovely red smear.
I turned my focus to the rest of the dogs who looked on is shock. Taking a long stride I grabbed two of the dog's heads, and decided to test my new body's strength. I slowly started to increase the pressure on the dog's skulls. They started struggling and yipping, then the yipping turned into whimpers of pain, then the whimpers and the struggling stopped with two simultaneous sickening crunches. I looked for the two remaining dogs, but it seems that they had taken off while I was ... preoccupied. I glanced towards where they had been, and if my face had any features then it would had shown a slight smirk. The dogs were clearly not the best at stealth, and had left a trail that I could easily follow.
I turned my head to look at my sponsor, who looked rater indifferent to the whole episode.
'Shall we go then?'
Cora just shrugged her shoulders, "Well it's on the way to my sister's place, so why not?."
'Well then off we go, to kill some dogs!'
A/N
Well here's the contact chapter, and while it doesn't have ponies it does have d-dogs. Soon there will be ponies.
I don't really know what else to say, other than, as always I accept all comments and criticism. If you don't like the story let me know why to see if I can fix it.
See you all next time.
~Eathlome
Not a bad start, I assume you are an iron golem?
Nice job on the role reversal too
man the tow of them (Rust and BlackWIng) have relay started a trend, how many story's are we up to now 10+ something?
someone really should start a group and gather all the stories there so there easily accessed and keep tracked of.
anyways you shod relay talk to them if your using there stuff, i doubt any of them will have a problem but its better to safe than sorry
778363
There is a group with most of the stories in it (I think that there's around 20+ by now)
The groups name is:
Chess Game of the Gods
And they already said that it was ok to use their world.
~Eathlome
P.S. I'd give a link, but I'm writing this from my tablit, I'll give the link once I can get on my computer.
778401 Is your story in the group yet? If it's not you should add it in if Rust and BlackWing have already given the go-ahead.
This is pretty good and the premise alone makes it quite interesting. Like your character's personality and his budding relationship with his sponsor.
One thing, you used "looked on in shock" twice in a row here, try to avoid doing that. Try to use a little more variety when describing things and it'll make the whole story come across better.
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I'm just waiting for their go ahead, then I'll be adding it in.
Yeah, I need to work on diversifying my vocabulary a bit.
778599
Hmmmmm...
I'll have to think about that one.
~Eathlome
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778363
Try looking here.
Hope that this was what you were looking for.
~Eathlome
780878it was, thanks
779136
You gain full Endorsement from me, and I think Rust and BlackWing would love it. Good story
This gonna be good
778363 try 30+
787612
I know, right?
It's just going up like crazy.
I'm pretty sure that soon CGotG will be getting close to the level that Fallout Equestria is at.
~Eathlome
787630 who knows? We may get an interview for FimFiction...or even Equestria Daily!
This is looking good. Your faved and thumbs up. Cora is definitely lucky to have herself an experienced pawn.
Another piece to our game?
Oh goody another thing to punch through walls and other asorted objects!
I like how you dont have a jackass GM unlike Loki..... stupid bastard]
Anyways good story and such
And may the odds be ever in your favor!
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ah. Turns out I AM familiar with it. Atleats the universe. Ive read both the ballad of echoed griffin the griffin (ongoing. That story is harass) and what's is so far that mouthful of a title starring a cynical cynogriffin. FINALLY figured out what the hell is with people getting hit kicked punted and snapped into equestrian. Thank Jesus that the explanation isnt "Jesus. For shits and giggles"
I really liked how you switched the roles a bit. Gives the story a whole different twist. Can't wait for the next update.
I wish that I made Rook out of Iron now, you have definitely one upped my gargoyle! Casually crushing the heads of Diamond Dogs, hellz yes.
787630 If you need any unique OCs to join your side or such take a gander at my blog. I am great at coming up with characters but not so much at with stories. I am liking what I am reading and this is the first time reading this type of story. Faving as will to see how it all pans out.
Some cant communicate cause they dont speak the same language, others got their throats messed up. But to not have a mouth? ouch. Now he shall never again know the wonders of bacon and ice cream.
I sense a meeting sometime in the future between an iron man and a wooden wolf....
Also, gotta love little Cora. She is so AWWWGUBLASHUBUBUBUBU!
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Lols.
To author:
Ah, the obligatory beat up of D-dogs eh? How many of them have these chess pieces killed anyways?
So... was that a bid daddy reference because thats all i saw, big ass iron suit protecting the week small female on his shoulders
....Nope...I can't deal with inanimate people...I just can't....
In my head-canon, you are now a living suit of Mark VIII Errant powered armor. Ave Imperator.
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