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NintendoGal55


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Rainbow Dash befriends and then soon dates a Pegasus named Blazing Comet. She is much like her, being fast, daring, adventurous, and can keep up with Rainbow Dash. On paper, the two ponies seem like a perfect match, considering how alike they are. Fluttershy, with her dreams shattered, now has come to believe she will never be good enough for Rainbow Dash. But as time goes on, who is to say that the rainbow-maned daredevil won't realize that the perfect pony for her was right in front of her all along?

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wow the haters are out early today can't believe you got a dislike before a like.:pinkiesad2:

Thanks for the disclaimer. I honestly expected her to be mean for some reason. Cool that you're going to make her cool. Should be interesting to see how this plays out.

I like this story so far! Interesting how comet is a nice character mostly when the mane 6 is dating someone else the author makes them like mean or weird, I can't wait to see how this pans out. :twilightsmile:

Yes! Couldn't wait for this to be out!

Just as good as I thought it would be.

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Considering how most writers would make the "other woman/man" either a complete jerk or someone completely flat, which in itself isn't a bad thing on its own, it's all in the execution, but I wanted to take a different road. So yes, Comet will be cool! :twilightsmile: The story, as you can see, more about how somepony can seem perfect for you because they're just like you, but it turns out that the romantic compatibility isn't exactly what you thought it was.

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Yep! :twilightsmile: I'm hoping to make Comet a likable character throughout, so I'm glad you guys seem to take well to her so far! And yeah, I know what you mean. Sometimes they can turn out to be weird, mean, or are just blatant self-inserts with no effort to help tell the story. But here, everypony does like her and she earns it because she's nice and treats them as such.

773742
That's awesome! It'll be really cool to see how Comet and Rainbow get along, especially how their similarities begin to cause some friction. I'm really looking forward to seeing Comet still be cool after that.

773847
Yep! :pinkiehappy: There will be friction as everything sets in, but nothing that's overly stupid or too dramatic. But oh yeah, Comet's going to remain cool about it throughout. Not to say she won't have human reactions of feeling saddened that things didn't work, but she also won't turn into a bitch because of it. You shall see how it'll go! :twilightsmile:

773855
I would expect her to feel sad that things didn't work out, and maybe even some anger over losing Rainbow. Still, the way you've written her so far, I can see that she'll come around. Damn it all, I can't wait! :pinkiecrazy:

773873
Yep, she definitely will! A bit of a "I Want My Beloved To Be Happy" trope, as well as also realizing that she too isn't right for her. Hee! Well, then you're in for quite a ride! :pinkiehappy:

And there won't be cheating, either, I just can't do that to them, you know?

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That's cool. Though to be honest, even at her boldest, I don't see Fluttershy breaking up a relationship. In fact, I can imagine Fluttershy having that sentiment as well. If Rainbow is happy, then I'll try and be happy for her. Could make a funny argument between her and Comet.

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No worries, Fluttershy herself doesn't break it up! She'd never do that. :pinkiesmile: Yes, throughout the story she's very sad and now thinks she'll never be good enough for Rainbow Dash, but she's doing all she can to be happy for her and let her go. But yeah, she won't do anything to sabotage them at all! We all know Fluttershy isn't like that. But yeah, there won't be that, either!

A new story from my favorite auther? Thumbs up, favorite, email updates, read. It's over? Back to the closet.

:yay: New story:pinkiehappy: I'm glad your not making Comet a jerk its been overdone way too much. (on a side note i damaged my voice dramatically reading On a Cross and Arrow to a friend non-stop and now Pinkie Pie sounds like Micky Mouse and Rarity sounds like a man XD just felt like sharing.)

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Thanks! That's what I was hoping to do! :pinkiesmile:

:pinkiehappy: Pinkie Mouse! A new meme has been born. X3 Pinkie Mouse! Ho ho!

Awesome to see a new chapter! I really felt for Fluttershy and it's awesome that she was able to express her concerns to Rainbow. Even better that Rainbow understands how Fluttershy feels. Can't wait for more!

The only worry i have is that Comet is too perfect she needs a flaw, i don't mean she has to be a crazed killer with a axe that wants to eat Dash's hair in hope of becoming a turtle. Just a small flaw to help with her character. But anyways im really liking the.story:pinkiehappy:

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Understandable! But don't worry, we'll see more of her character along the way. :pinkiesmile:

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Yay! I'm glad that worked out! Poor Fluttershy! :<

Yes! New chapter!

Another new chapter! :yay:

What were you thinking? Ending it like that!? Now I can't wait for the next chapter to come out! :raritycry::fluttercry:
Poor Fluttershy :fluttercry:

792833 Awwww... :< I'm sorry! :fluttercry: I know how you feel, cliffhangers are evil. I guess I felt it would work here? :twilightsheepish:

Poor Fluttershy...it's not easy doing this to her. :fluttershysad: Even as the author who knows what will happen! :fluttershyouch::raritycry::raritydespair:

EDIT: For the "I'm gay" part, isn't that like, a quote from Hurricane Fluttershy?
Because the way they say "you're game?" makes it sound a lot like that...
I've heard tons of comments about that.

792889 xD You caught me! Guilty as charged! The "You're gay?" and "I'm gay" lines were indeed a shout out to the parodying of the "You're game?!" and "I'm game" lines sounding like "gay". :rainbowlaugh: I just had to do that as a bit of a parody shout out yet makes sense in context.

793044 I do that too, a lot, in my unfinished fic...
Isn't the first time I've caught a quote in your story. Well the first time was easy 'cause I said it, but whatever.

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That was en evil cliffhanger indeed! :rainbowlaugh:
But it left me with so much emotion and anticipation that I forgot about "Heated" (also reading).
I didn't really start reading fics until recently, and it does seem that I really enjoy FlutterDash shipping for some reason, with "Heated" actually being the very first.:rainbowhuh:
I have to say, I really enjoy your works! :)

793664 :rainbowhuh: Wow, so emotional you forgot about it?! :pinkiegasp: XDD I guess sometimes there are stories that can do that! Awwww...:fluttershysad: It will be at its saddest soon, but after that it progresses and gets better! :pinkiehappy:

Thank you! :twilightsmile: I appreciate it! I'm glad to have anypony who's a newcomer to the pairing read some stories of it and my own and see what they think. :3 Besides, not a lot of it out there in terms of fanfics...so I add some in! :raritywink:

I prefer the other one you are writing for sure (Heated is easily one of the the best Flutterdash fics I have ever read and I've read heaps of them)... but I like how well you have done Fluttershy in this and I can still see your unique flare for writing coming through.
Its an... alternative approach to a Flutterdash story and despite my initial reservations I intend to follow this as closely as your other works. Cant wait to see what happes next. I just hope that Fluttershy doesn't do anything too stupid after a the horrific sight. Good clifhanger too :fluttercry:

Oh no... Sad tag? Fluttershy was so disappointed that she'll go into an all out rampage slaughtering everyone and then commiting suicide out of her depression! Or maybe she'll just be in desperate need of help...

794382 That's understandable! I'd feel the same way, really. XD So I see exactly where you're coming from! Rest assured though, Fluttershy won't do anything stupid. :pinkiesmile: She's just going to go through a bit of a sad phase and try her hardest to move on and still be a good friend. :twilightsmile:

794410 XDDD Nope! Nothing like that! It's sad because oftentimes, we're going to see Fluttershy feeling sad about all this, but she tries to make it through. :fluttershysad:

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Oh good. Only be a good friend? :rainbowhuh:

794475 :derpyderp1: *Shifty eyes* ....Noooo....:rainbowkiss:

XD What the hay, I think you all know how it's going to end. :derpytongue2:

794501
Sweet. Then I'm keen to see how you get them there. Quite a few cliffhangers will be involved along the way too I would guess. (If the rest of your writing is anything to go by.):yay:

Keep up the totally awesome work.

794546 There should be some here and there, but I won't make them too gratuitous. Sometimes they just write themselves, you know? We'll see what happens! :pinkiehappy:

:fluttercry: Poor Fluttershy her little heart was broken:fluttercry:
The sad part was that Dash came unto Comet.

795609 Poor Fluttershy is right! :fluttercry::raritycry:
Indeed, that is the sad part! ...XD But I guess I wanted to make it really come to be mutual.

Poor Fluttershy. I just know it'll get worse for her when Rainbow tells her the 'good' news. :fluttercry:

As much as I love this story, I can't help but feel the synopsis gives away the outcome of the story. It's blatantly obvious that it won't work out with RD and BC and FlutterDash will be a success :yay: But still, it makes the story very predictable in a similar fashion as the episode The Mysterious Mare Do Well. It was pretty obvious the mane 6 (other than RD) were behind it which made the episode less enjoyable. I dunno though, you're the pro here.
:derpytongue2:

799814 Well, that is kind of the point here. I only try not to be misleading, but I suppose I could fix it just a bit. But really though, I guess you can say I would want everypony who reads it to simply read the journey, regardless of how they know it may end (Especially readers who are now familiar with the fact I ship FlutterDash), and that for once you will have that reassurance, even if you have to endure through it.

But then again, I suppose I'll see how it goes along and see what could work in terms of the synopsis.

...What in the hayseeds just happened!? Lawks, if that wasn't the worst of the best cliffhangers ever. :applejackconfused:

Still, I reckon you got big plans for a real twister 'mongst them pony folk and not just our leadin' twosome. (Am I making sense? LOL)

Can't wait for the next big hoedown, y'all! :ajsmug:

/Applejackness

YES! :yay:
Oh, probably shouldn't have used that character...
Whatever. :trollestia:

Awesome. A totally solid way to pull that off. Literally brought tears to my eyes.:fluttercry: Good job. Keep going :yay:

Poor Fluttershy, part 2. :fluttercry:

As I read Rainbow and Fluttershy's talk, I thought that you would have saved it for later, but it fitted very well here. I really feel for Rainbow and Fluttershy, and of course, I can't bring myself to hate Comet. Now I must wait for more.

804896 Poor Fluttershy!! :fluttercry::raritycry:
Oooh, I just about wanted to! I had this conversation in mind for later, but as I was writing this chapter, I realized it had to work out this way. I was worried at first, but I'm glad it's worked out good so far!

:pinkiehappy: Awesome! ...Well, not that their suffering is a good thing, mind you. XD But that's what I was hoping to do. That we feel sorry for Rainbow and Fluttershy at the same time for different reasons, and that Comet isn't a target for hatred. Basically, nopony's the bad guy here. It's just all a series of unfortunate events. :fluttershysad:

I'm spinnin' around, move outta my way, and my heart is all up in this huge mess~ :ajsleepy:

Nicely done, got a bit fast-paced at the start, but overall well. :pinkiehappy:

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I know what you mean. There is no way that Rainbow would see Fluttershy as distraught as she was, and simply say, "I'll stop by in the morning for waffles, and we can talk this all out."

I think the way you wrote worked very well, even if it's brutally painful. Good job to you.

I totally agree. Rainbow feels terrible that she hurt Fluttershy unintentionally, while Fluttershy's world is falling apart. Comet could easily be targeted for hatred, but she's been nothing but kind to both Fluttershy and Rainbow. Seriously, part of me is hoping that she secretly punches puppies in the throat before having a breakfast of orphan dreams.

On a side note, sorry for not mentioning it in my first comment, I love the names of the animals. I smiled at Hummingway.

804953 WAFFLES!!!! :rainbowlaugh: I don't know why, but that hypothetical cracked me up, especially the waffles! XD ...Muffins. :derpytongue2:

Thank you! Good to know that worked out as well, evoking the sad feelings within the situation. I kept it on the down-low, but will expand on them since it will be time going on as it all sinks in and everything falls into place, y'know? :pinkiesmile:

You just about summed it up! Rainbow feels guilty for unintentionally hurting Fluttershy, Fluttershy's heartbroken, and Comet...well, she didn't even really do anything wrong. But that's the point, I'm not making her an evil bitch who doesn't deserve Rainbow. She will have her own flaws and mistakes made, of course.

:pinkiehappy: Yay! Fun with the animal names! I remembered Hummingway, and just had to put him in there. ...And make him refined. XD

That... *sniff* was... AWFUL! Well, it was amazing, BUT HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO FLUTTERSHY? I guess there wouldn't be a plot... BUT FLUTTERSHY WAS SO UPSET! Ughh... my brain hurts. All jokes aside, I enjoyed the chapter immensely much, as per usual with your skill, and this chapter stirred so many emotions in me. I also found Rainbow's obliviousness hilarious. Really sad chapter, but still awesome. I impatiently await your next release.

805013 How could I, indeed?!?!? I'm sorry, Fluttershy!!! :fluttercry::raritycry::raritycry: I'll make it up to you!! :fluttercry:

Anyway, thanks! :pinkiehappy: At least it was still enjoyable none the less! Don't you worry, things will look up soon! :twilightsmile:

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