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The7thElement


Some brony who wishes to tell a tale or two. Whether you like them or not.

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The7thElement

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in the wording of Yoda: Feel a Marriage, I do

Interesting story, can't wait to see where it goes. Moving a little fast in my opinion, but I think it can work. Keep it up, I hope to see this updated more often than you said!

7252508 Thanks for the feedback probably going to be taking a break from my other fic, so expect this one to be updated more than the other one.
7251475 You'll have to wait and see my friend. Wait and see.

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Nice to know. Also, might I suggest placing this story in other groups for more publicity and possible feedback?

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I mean more people will be able to see it, as it's relatively hard to find stories if they're not in groups (to my knowledge at least). So with more readers brings more likes, sadly dislikes most likely, and people willing to give actual feedback. Example, put this story in Human in Equestria or Human X Royalty (assuming that's happening). People are in those groups because they like that kind of thing. They'll see a new story was added to the group and possibly give it a try. Basically, putting a story in more groups just gets it out there more.

(Well from what I’ve seen and heard most humans are selfish, arrogant and a whole mess of other things)
EVERY FUCKING STORY

yay another misanthropic human on equestrian....man what is next, him falling for twilight?

7276458 Well when you think about it a majority of us are. Not saying I hate the human race just merely pointing out a truth.

7276458 Welp, another story I will not be reading. Shame, I thought this one had so much potential. :fluttershyouch:

Comment posted by The7thElement deleted Jun 11th, 2016

And that darkness was Tia's cake storage room

7277174 Please let me know why you won't be reading this story. And don't be afraid to criticise, as I do appreciate criticism.

Dang.......well then I'm Gonna assume this will fast forward a few thousand years

I like the concept of what you did here, it's the alicorn without the bad back story.

This is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks for that. Also what do you mean by the alicorn without the bad backstory? Would love to know.

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Thanks for that. Unfortunately I'm putting this fic on hold for a while to work on another chapter or two of my other fic.

7295790 I may have worded that wrong, I meant you did good with the immortality, I have seen people that come close to getting it but your one of the first that I can believe

7296236 Glad to hear that, also thank you for clarifying.

7277174 I must ask why you won't be reading this fic. Please tell me even if you have to criticise me.

They know each other now for about a thousand years, and they still don't call each other by their first names. Being respectful to your ruler is one thing, but adding titles when talking to a friend of yours is never nice to hear.

Oh my god, how Fucking oblivious must you be to not see the giant 2 legged creature teleport not even 2 feet away from you

7336629 Thanks for telling me this I'll proceed to make it so anon addresses Celestia by her name more. But you have to understand that Anon has been Captain of her personal guard so calling her by her title is sort of a regular thing.


7337725 Would love to know if your talking about Leonheart or Anon. Because if it's Anon teleporting into Celestia's study I have an explanation for why the griffons didn't see him.

Using Shadowmancy Anon teleport into the shadows of the room so that the griffons wouldn't see him.

7337899 I was talking about anon, and that explanation makes sense on how the didn't see him.

7338457 Sorry for not including that I was sort of rushed for time.

And with that he fell asleep.
h that he fell asleep.

Is that supposed to be there twice?

7366037 Thanks for pointing that out mate. Helps me a lot to know that things like that happens, let's me know I gotta go over them more carefully.
7366057 Thanks for the likes buddy. Also next chapter will be out after I update my other fic.

I'm vary happy with what you write. Question will anon be in celestia solar guards or be with luna in the Lunar Guard or both just wanted to know update more soon :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for the question. I'll give you an explanation of Anon's predicament.
Well Anon was Captain of Luna's personal guard before Nightmare Moon (Luna is the one who gave him the title of Paladin). When Luna/Nightmare Moon was banished Anon became Captain of Celestia's personal guard. After a thousand years of service Celestia made Anon's rank higher than the other members of either guard (He's only commanding officers are the princesses).

To sum things up Anon is in service to the princesses more so than either of the guard. (As with his rank he isn't apart of either guard) But with his relationship with Luna he is more akin to work with the Lunar guard than the Solar guard.

So to answer your question he really isn't in either guard but he is attached more to the Lunar guard more than the Solar guard, so expect to be seeing the Lunar guard more than the Solar

Sorry if this seems really long and doesn't answer your question right away, But whilst writing this I realised I didn't really say which guard Anon was apart of well so I decided to clear it up with the maelstrom of exposition that I put above.

Blech. Could do with an editor... :pinkiesick:

... Otherwise, seems decent enough to keep an eye on for now.

7377207 Thanks for the advice. Unfortunately I don't have anyone to edit for me. But glad to here you still wish to keep an eye on this.

Bruh... this is set 1000 years before the Mane Six right? Why the fuck is Ponyville around? In the show Ponyville is most 200 years old, at least 100. Granny Smith is fuck knows how old.

Good job keep it up can't wait until the next chapter

7435132 Only the beginning chapters are set 1000 years ago.
7435424 Great to hear you like it so much.

Ugh, yet another misanthropic prick of a human enters Equestria, unfortunately being infused with the author's own opinions. No thanks, do better next time.

There something that is unanswered. Where the hell are all the Lunar Guards that are under his command?

The idea have a lot of potential, but the writing leave much to be improved.
That's all I can say on the story. I ain't no professional critic.

Main protagonist bent over too quick, no thanks.

7577309 Don't care if you're not a professional critic. Criticism is appreciated all the same.

7582435 It was more about the fact that I know and feel that something is wrong, but not what it is.

7582471 Well when u figure out what's wrong let me know and I'll try to fix it in the future.

Uhh? just What!?

Fate to not interact with the rest of the elements? Uh i sort of dont understand.
(or is Pinkie 4th wall breaking true and u have no clue how anon should interact with the rest of Twilight friends?)

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In all honesty it is because of Pinkie's little 4th wall break

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