There's always a little time for remembering when you live a life that seems to waft beside you. Gentle Breeze has always been a fan of those moments, she likes to enjoy them whenever she can.
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I really like it!
I did notice a bunch of sentences starting with the word "she". In writing, you should try your best to avoid having one word start a sentence more than twice after each other. Believe me, I do it a lot myself.
Keep writing!
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Yea I did sorta rush this out. I originally did it as a writing exercise but figured I would post it. Thank you for the constructive criticism.
You write a very satisfying story. It made me feel at peace. Kinda of like those moments at 3am when you walk through a quiet, sleeping town. There's just such a nice content feeling to your story and for that I'm truly grateful to you for writing it. I wish you all the best in you future endeavors.
Sincerely yours, mustangdrew4
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