Twilight Sparkle died one year ago throwing herself in front of a spell meant for Princess Luna. Today her friends gather on the anniversary of their friends sacrifice, but the service is interrupted by an ursa major and a mysterious figure.
7205657 Unless I read a different one TWLB is a feels story about Twilight being dead (and OMG the feels), this (so far) is about Twi's ascention after death and return to life on equestria. The feels are real.
ok good story it funny, like twilight i want expect details about how i twas like, also where was twilight, something major most have happen to her to have turn her form the shy bookworm to the tease, bad ass warrior.
good story i cant wait for more, also will this be futa luna story???
Okay, so 2 things: -Why did everyone think Twi died? We only get that she got hit by a spell intended for Luna but nothing else... which is pretty important as it is the entire premise. Dunno if this is said in a next chapter though.
-... need a proofreader? I see that your old one doesn't seem to like futa that much, which explains how, eh, poorly this story reads. Still, it is interesting to me, so would you like to have a proofreader?
”Don’t you think I don’t know that !? I just can’t lose her! I don’t know what I’d do if that ever happened! What will happen if ponies find out that she’s alive and living in Canterlot!” Celestia cried out fresh tears falling down her face maring her mascara.
I'm guarded. It seems like a bootleg The Things We Leave Behind.
I really gotta ask are twilight a futa anthro
7206095 nope no Futa in this one
7205657 never even read or heard of that fic so it's not a copy might just be a coincidence.
7206180 awwwww ok
7206197 my editor was getting sick of Futa XD
7206199 hey nothing wrong whit a hung futa twilight *pouts hard*
7206202 heh I know but what can you do.
7206214 yeah
7206214 HORSEDILDO'S :p
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Unless I read a different one TWLB is a feels story about Twilight being dead (and OMG the feels), this (so far) is about Twi's ascention after death and return to life on equestria.
The feels are real.
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7205657 ah I see the issue this is a warrior returns fic twilight never died but that is what it looked like to every pony who witnessed it.
i like this story so far hope to read more i can just imagine twilight pulling off a quantum leap microseconds before the blast hits her
ok good story it funny, like twilight i want expect details about how i twas like,
also where was twilight, something major most have happen to her to have turn her form the shy bookworm to the tease, bad ass warrior.
good story i cant wait for more, also will this be futa luna story???
7206525 unfortunately my poor editor is burnt out on futa stories.
7206758 that sad, but great story, glade to see a new story by you, cant wait for more
fantastic perfect amount of Gore comedy and romance what a way for Twiluna ship!! moar
Very well done my friend. Cant wait for more. ^^
Okay, so 2 things:
-Why did everyone think Twi died? We only get that she got hit by a spell intended for Luna but nothing else... which is pretty important as it is the entire premise. Dunno if this is said in a next chapter though.
-... need a proofreader? I see that your old one doesn't seem to like futa that much, which explains how, eh, poorly this story reads. Still, it is interesting to me, so would you like to have a proofreader?
7205657 hmmmm.... Nope only no details really match that story. First off that story was really sad, this one is more saucy and funny.
This is pretty good, but slow the fuck down, you're going far too fast for me to easily follow.
I dont even know where to start the story is ok to me just the shipping was way to fast she just got back and she already is with someone
Celestia don't wear mascara
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My story, she wears mascara :p