When Pinkie Pie starts acting a lot less random than usual, all of her friends freak out; except for Twilight, who embraces the new, easy-going Pinkie. But what caused her to change in the first place? Why is a dragon terrorizing the town? And what does any of this have to do with oregano?
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at first i was like
but then i was like
and then i was like
all in all it was a good story, and could pass as an actual episode... send it to Hasbro!!
Awesome!
...Im not sure how to feel about this...
>thumbs up.
That'll do
Apart from the minor grammatical errors (which a little proofreading could easily fix) and the fact that you cook soup on a stove, not in an oven, it was a great story! If I had written it, I probably wouldn't have ended it quite like that, but I didn't, and it works, so it's okay.
Also, I nearly fell out of my chair at the Dragon Ball Z reference.
Haha that was great! xD Good job mate!
im just gonna walk away.... and hope i never saw this fic or see it ever again...
Every story is better with a cross-face chicken wing. Well done.
Wow....well I hope this won't mess up they're friendship
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This got liked for my "lol, what" reaction to the ending
I loved the story! Really well written and the small twist at the end was good. Great job!
767260 Lol, I'm flattered, but I doubt they would actually make an episode like this
Is my story so crazy that I put a chicken-wing in it without even realizing?
767385 767479 769130 Thanks
767427 768578 Haha, that's what I was hoping for
767449 Huh, I tried to get it proofread, but no luck. I went over it several times myself, can you point out the problems?
D'oh, I know nothing about cooking or dress-making, it was so hard to write those parts. Do ponies even have stoves?
EDIT: Changed it to stove anyway, if other writers have ponies playing video-games I think I'm fine from a technological standpoint
The ending was the hardest part to choose. I decided to leave it with that 'cliffhanger', and then if people were disappointed maybe write an epilogue or just add a couple more sentences to conclude it more properly. I'm glad you liked it though
768263 What?
768310 Nah, they're stronger than that
768534 What are you reading?
Well, aside from the guy who apparently wants to pretend this never existed, this turned out pretty good.
Thanks a lot guys, It's folks like you that keep me motivated to write stupid crap like this
I can see this as an actual episode of My Little Pony... You know, everything except the part where they find out SHE'S A FRICKEN ALIEN
But good story none the less! 
But?
But?
But?
...I give this story:
769266
Thanks, I'm surprised people can actually see this as an episode sans the sci-fi bit, but flattered
But I guess that's one of the reasons that people write fanfics, to do something the show would never do
And I couldn't pass up the ending punchline when I thought of it, no matter how stupid it was
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Pinkie approves of this tribute
769160 I meant what you described Rarity doing to RD after touching her mane. The combination of a forelimb pulled uncomfortably behind the back and another forelimb used to choke. Cross-face chicken wing.
769364
Oh okay, cool. You learn something new every day
769160
Sure thing! But be warned, I've been told I'm a bit picky.
“I knew you were awesome, but I had no idea that your were that awesome!”
'Your' should be 'you'.
"After carefully scraping the bit’s of cloud off of her lips,"
'Bits' is plural, so there's no apostrophe.
"I could try out some of my more manestream designs,"
This one's on purpose, right?
"The pink pony looked down at the dress that had magically formed around her; A deep, midnight blue, it when she shook herself, it shimmered beautifully."
Either change the semicolon to a period, or make the 'A' lowercase. (Personally, I'd make the semicolon a period.) Also, remove the first 'it'.
“The designs I had prepared were for Fluttershy, I need to start again…”
This is where I would have used the semicolon, but I think that's more a matter of taste.
"her injured rabbit on tow"
I believe you mean 'in tow'.
“Oh, I know! When you’re done the soup, we can make cupcakes!”
'When you're done the soup' should be 'When you're done with the soup'.
"When the pegasus had finally place the tray down in front of him,"
'Place' should be 'placed'.
"Twilight smiled; at least one of her friend’s was rational."
Since 'friends' in this case is plural, but not possessive, it doesn't have an apostrophe.
"There was a knock on the door, eliciting squeak from wherever Fluttershy was hiding."
'Eliciting squeak' should be 'eliciting a squeak'.
"She cautiously made her way to door,"
'To door' should be 'to the door'.
"Her curiosity peaked, the unicorn trotted towards the sound,"
I believe in this case it is spelled 'piqued'.
“We all love you no matter what you eat, so there’s no need to keep secret’s.”
'Secrets' is plural, so no apostrophe.
"and we we’re just going to hang out because she said you were the coolest friends ever."
'We're' should be were.
And that's it. I hope this helps!
769936
Wow, thanks a lot! Don't worry, picky's good
Yeah, manestream was on purpose
Also, personally, I don't think people use semi-colons while talking out loud
And everything else is fixed. God, there were some real facepalm moments there, especially all those misused apostrophes
I blame the internet, I used to have perfect grammar and spelling until I came on here
Thank you so much for your help though
And then Rainbow Dash woke up screaming "Pod Ponies!" THE END.
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Lol, it is my dream to have Pod Ponies inducted into the official brony dictionary
770049 You're welcome! Glad I could help!
I'm both ashamed and proud to know you after reading this.
Apologies for the lack of help with the proof-reading... I'm getting sick of feeling sick. And I can't stop reading so the killer headache won't go away. I think I need to get my eyes tested asap.
We need to hang out when I'm sure that I won't die.
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Only I could somehow earn both shame and pride from a single act
No worries though, a delightful good samaritan helped pick out the mistakes I was too stupid to notice myself
And why should death stop us hanging out?
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I do it all the time. It comes down to how retarded the act is.
I saw that. And a very nice pony they is.
Oooh, that's true. I'll come sit in the corner of your bedroom every night after I die.
Hey does this story remind anypony else of the royal wedding episode sorta
Good story though
I hate it when Twi's wrong !!!!!!!
773129
Sorta. That wasn't the inspiration, but thanks anyway
776443
I find it funny because it's so unlikely
Yes!
Pinkie Pie calms down for a change! 
Oh wait... Never mind.
776982
Whoops, sorry about that
Maybe someone should make a more serious, slice-of-life version of this.
788404
It's cool man. The ending WAS pretty funny. Who knew RD would have perceived things correctly for a change?
Good stuff. I love how "Pinkie" acting "normal" causes most of the rest of the cast to start weirding things up just to compensate.
811792
Oh hey, thanks
Huh, I didn't think of it that way, but your right, it's almost like normally she's a 'crazy vacuum' sucking it out of everyone else
Huh. This didn't go where I expected it to at all. Very nice journey you took us on with this piece. Loved the idea of the sugar substitute leveling her off though and can't help but think a Pinkie gets diagnosed with diabetes story would be intriguing. Anyway lovely story.
838207
Inorite? I need to write a serious version of this at some point
But I'm glad you enjoyed it
*slowly points and jumps, looking excited* It's...that thing! The one you were talking about! READ LIST! *hits fic with READ LIST. Attack is not very effective* Fine, I'll just have to read it NOW.
I hope everypony learned their lesson, when Pinkie isn't crazy, she's been replaced!
Now let me go laugh about it and probably end up crying cause I laugh so hard
990587
Lol, I completely forgot about this comment, sorry...
Does that mean you like it?
1043789
You can always expect on Pinkie to be random
I'm glad you enjoyed it
1044748 Yes, yes it does.
I totally didn't see that ending coming
Which made it even funnier
1445935
Gracias amigo, I'm glad you enjoyed it
Hm. The random didn't really do it for me here, but that's probably just me. You still want me to proofread this? Of course I'm willing to, but you'll have to remind me next week.
1669451
Oh, it's been aaaaaaaaaages, I've given up on that idea
1671543
Alright, just wanted to make sure.
OK, I loved all the twists, it was really funny.