When you use "cause" as a contraction of "because", it's wise to put an apostrophe before the "c" so people don't get confused with the definition of the same word being the outcome of something.
This fic is off to a great start I think! I don't see many fics about Roseluck let alone one with her and a human I can't wait to see how this plays out!
Nice start of the story, gonna read the second chapter after this :)
One note on language, I hope you don't mind. In the fist and last paragraph, you use the word "anxious" where I would have expected "eager" (or in the case of the first paragraph, perhaps "happy" would fit even better.)
"anxious" usually means 'nervous', or sometimes 'eager but nervous'. So it could fit in the last paragraph in the latter sense, but it isn't explained to the reader why she would have a sense of unease about telling her sisters. So I would still expect 'eager'.
They had picked up somewhat of a reputation around town as being overdramatic, but one thing was certain. Nopony could cultivate a garden quite like they could.
Likely due to all the fertilizer that gets scared out of them.
not much of a human on pony romance, or human on romance clop, but Seven, my friend, you have caught my intrest
When you use "cause" as a contraction of "because", it's wise to put an apostrophe before the "c" so people don't get confused with the definition of the same word being the outcome of something.
Like this:
This fic is off to a great start I think! I don't see many fics about Roseluck let alone one with her and a human I can't wait to see how this plays out!
Man, who ever made roseluck's character tile tag picked the best picture. This is kinda like showing how people become friends.
I like it.
You're doing many things right in my book, the conversation actually felt natural as oppose to forced like a good number are.
I was so sure that Pipsqueak was gonna say that the black lilies were for Luna.
Nice start of the story, gonna read the second chapter after this :)
One note on language, I hope you don't mind. In the fist and last paragraph, you use the word "anxious" where I would have expected "eager" (or in the case of the first paragraph, perhaps "happy" would fit even better.)
"anxious" usually means 'nervous', or sometimes 'eager but nervous'. So it could fit in the last paragraph in the latter sense, but it isn't explained to the reader why she would have a sense of unease about telling her sisters. So I would still expect 'eager'.
Now this is quality dialogue and character interaction. Though I'm waiting for the first taste of meat.
7207191 yeah, he seems to be doing that to all of us today.
Sweetie Belle wears socks?!
That's so l-lewd.
In all seriousness nice story dude.
7212744 I thought he was going to buy them and then give them to Liliy herself. Though Luna would have made sense too.
Pretty self-explanatory. Should be ''here''.
I think you mis-typed that again, as "herr," mein herr :p
Is it odd that I kinda hear Rose sounding like Kristen Schaal, and I picture Clyde looking like Zach Braff? A great start to this anyway.
7212744 7214667 Not because of anything romantic, hopefully, because that would honestly be moronic for a colt and adult princess.
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Interesting beginning, now let's see where this takes us
This... looks quite interesting, nicely done~
While short I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and eager to read the rest, good job!
This is a pretty nice intro. It's sweet seeing roseluck gain a new friend such as him.
Can't wait to see what blooms from this
lovely chapter! this site needs more of this :)
Likely due to all the fertilizer that gets scared out of them.
. no that would be Pinky
I can't help but imagine a mailbox split down the middle verticaly