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Spike is always looking for ways to be helpful. So, when an opportunity to babysit Flurry Heart so Princess Cadence and Prince Shining Armor can have a weekend together comes up, Spike is quick to take on the opportunity of responsibility.
Spike has bravely helped to save the Crystal Empire from King Sombra and melted a lethal ice cloud during The Equestrian Games. So watching over a baby Alicorn should be easy for the "Brave and Glorious" dragon, right?
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I loved it!
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Thank you very much for giving this fun, little story a read through. Knowing you liked it means a lot, too. :)
I do think it would be a fun episode if Spike was to watch Flurry heart. His pride in being "The Brave and Glorious" of the Crystal Empire would certainly be put to the test as caring for a foal is a lot different than saving the day from evil kings and looming ice clouds. :)
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I think it would be a good episode as well!
Holy SHIT!!! She said her first words!!!
....unless this is a time in the future where she's already had her first words...
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Oh, this definitely would be a bit into the future. Moms and dads, particular moms, don't like to be away from their little ones until they feel safe enough to trust someone to not let anything happen while they are away.
For this story, I kind of figured Sunburst had done a pretty good job with helping Flurry Heart not have such destructive results from her foal magic. Things would have been fairly settled, which is why they'd have had a chance to build her a private bathing chamber, while getting the staff of the Crystal Palace pretty used to what she'd need.
I'd put Flurry Heart between eight and twelve months old in this story. Not so much separation anxiety so long as she is entertained. And, well, Spike definitely helped to keep her entertained. :)
Thanks for reading and commenting. :)
This fic actually wasn't half bad. It had a few cute moments, but I do wish the chapters were longer. I can see this as a actual episode, which is pretty good.
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Thanks very much for reading and commenting. :)
There was definitely a lot more I could do with this story, but I thought it may be easier on readers to have short, quick chapters to allow them an easy read where their imagination could do the rest.
My shorter stories seem to be more of what FiM fans like on here. There's usually a correlation between longer stories and less interest. So, I suppose I'm just going with what I know people like from me. :)
Quality cousins time.
Nothing makes Flurry Heart laughing like Spike's fire burps.
"Flurry Heart's Bathing and Beauty Center?" Who's the ick that name that bathroom name?
The rattle IS the soft toy.
Cute.
7193503 hurt nothing wrong with 5k stories as long as pacing keeps the readers attention. Yeah I just finds a thousand words too short but two thousand has to be god right Bow to acurally ease this story
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Thank you so much for all of your comments! They are very much appreciated along with the time you took in reading this short story.
I'll admit, I was at a loss for what to do for Flurry Heart's private bathroom. I probably could've just called it that, but I tried for something fancy. Kind of a fail, but oh-well. :)
Right, because that's not going to inflate her ego AT all.
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<LoL!> Nope. Not at all. :)
I was trying to think of something "Princess-like" and do believe I may have gone overboard with that elaborate title for a bathroom.
7439352 You think?
Cute hope to see more soon! Hehe I am kinda surprised none of Flurry's spells turned Spike into a baby pony, or at least shrink him down to her size.
bro just a quick heads-up, Flurry Heart tag is now available, you should add it. Great story btw
Realest Kids In Equestria! How ya doing?!?
You know, when Flurry Heart popped that pacifier into Spike's mouth, I think it would have been cuter if Spike had noticed it his mouth when he woke up, and would've decided to keep it in his mouth.