"The road to hell is paved with good intentions."
What would you do to protect those you love? What actions would you take in order to guarantee their safety? What lines would you cross in order to ensure their freedom? How far would you go to safeguard their well being?
How far is too far when seeking to help those dear to your heart? And would you even recognize the point of no return as it appears before you?
Would you realize that, even the best of intentions can lead one astray, before it’s too late?
Embark alongside Snowdrop into a story of pain and loss, hope and redemption, defiance and determination, as she journeys against all odds in search of a way to help her dearest friend in her moment of greatest need; no matter what.
This story starts right after Discord’s defeat in ‘The Return of Harmony’ of the canon timeline; and if the presence of Snowdrop hasn’t been a clear enough sign, and the Tag up above, let me make it clear and state that it will be an AU.
Knowledge of the awesome animation "Snowdrop" by the SillyFillyStudios is not necessary to read this, but it would make the read far more enjoyable in my opinion.
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No criticism required.
I like this story. It's got a rather interesting idea, and you are writing in a bardic cadence for recanting epic poems. I have no idea if that is intentional, if so bravo, if not, keep doing what you are doing because it's excellent.
My only negative point is the simple [ hr ] tag to separate scenes is not quite enough. You should put a blank line above and blow those tags to make sure they are visible. The line is simply too thin to realy notice without extra space. Or perhaps use two hr tags instead, to make it a bit thicker and more noticeable. Like so.
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Scene 2
7193881 I did try to give this chapter a more poem like feel, glad to see that it worked.
Regrettably I doubt I'll be able to keep the style for the rest of the story.
The double hr line is a good idea, will do.
Thanks for the review.
7193851 Thanks!
Now that I'll have to see!
This seems oddly familiar...
Oh that's why!
Jokes aside, interesting idea, looking forward to how you will develop it.
7213806 Thanks!
I don't know if unrevealed is the word your were looking for. Unrevealed is to be hidden. I think you were looking for something more along the lines of released.
Title drop!
I am adding this to my tracking list. I'm excited to see more.
Overall, this was a very interesting read. My only issue with it is Snowdrop's monologue. I find the words to be strange, only because of the original animation having very little of the old language. Outside of that, I was highly pleased. I feel like Celestia screwed up, but why? How? And did Luna know? Because Luna believed Snowdrop to be dead. (Again: only if you're going by the first animation). I also agree with the lines being really light. Hmm. You can always insert a divider if you'd like. I'm still looking for a good one for Echoing Silence.
You could use similar dividers such as these:
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I'll be following most of the animation, save for the very ending since Snowdrop is obviously alive.
The divider idea is certainly interesting, I specially liked the first and second examples you showed.
Regarding the old language, in my head canon the animation lacked it since ALL the ponies talked like that, after all back then it wasn't an 'old' language yet. I used it as a way to show Snowdrop had been frozen for a long time.
Glad you liked it, thanks for the review!
Ps: You were right, I meant to use unraveled, not unrevealed.
Interesting, good chapter.
7912603 Thanks!
Finally a snowdrop fanfic that actually gets updated
Hmm, not nearly as ominous as the first chapter, which is interesting. Has her friend also been locked away in ice or something to that effect? I'm curious about what Snowdrop has to say about Celestia's current PR
Sooo... is this a flashback, or is it modern day? If it's modern day, and she's in the castle of the two sisters, is this chapter like those scenes where the character walks around talking to someone, only to realize that the one they've been talking to is a figment of their imagination? Like that part in Scrubs, and in Always, and I can't think of any more examples right now. but I love those scenes
Now I can't wait to see what's actually going on
8089234 It's a flashback showing what happened to Snowdrop in the past.
Both this and the previous chapter are retelling of what happened in the past before Luna's banishment, and most future one's will remain so until Snowdrop's ends imprisoned into the glacier from chapter one, upon which we will go back to the present. Like Celestia said to the bearers and Luna at the end of chapter two, she is telling the story of what happened.
Hope that clears it up, glad you are liking the story,
8090139 Oh okay. Now you made me wanna write a scene like that though. Snowdrop visits the ruined castle and talks to her old friends, who are all happy to see her, then she goes to the throne-room to talk with Luna and suddenly realizes that it's all in her head, and she's standing in an old ruin and all her friends are gone. It's such a great scene... in my head
8090742 It's actually a pretty good scene indeed.
And there is still the present side of the story later on to consider...
Totally agree with your comment about the difficulty of coming up with pony names. And I always end up feeling weirdly self-conscious about it, too. Is this good enough or will people think it's stupid or clunky??
8121487 Yeah, there is a surprisingly thin line between too bland and too pretentious in regards with their names.
Heh, I just read the description again, and I just though, "The road to hell is paved with frozen solid intentions"
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Will Snowdrop be badass in this story?
8197685 Considering she is the main protagonist and will be the Hero/villain of it?
Yes she will.
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Bruh
Will fix it, thanks for the heads up.