Discorded Fusion

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Discorded Fusion

Discord accidentally unleashes a spell he shouldn't have. The Mane 6 are not amused.

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toxiconym

toxiconym #1 · May 13th, 2016 · · ·

I don't usually read MLP fanfiction anymore, and when I do I almost never go to the new stories section, but this premise caught my eye. Interesting plot, so I've decided to give it a whirl.

Oh, please do excuse my laughter. In spite of the current situation, it still cracks me up hearing that southern drawl coming from a mare with Rarity's voice. I should probably explain what's going on, no? Well it was just an average day for me in my little chaos dimension. By average, I mean very boring. I'd finally run out of new episodes to watch and fanfics to read. I must say, you humans do write the most intriguing stories. One of my favorites would have to be Cupcakes.
Anyway, i'm going off topic here. I decided to find the ponies you humans call the 'Mane 6'.

Whoa whoa wait, we're jumping right into this? No explanation at all? It's understandable I guess since it's Discord we're talking about here, but we could say that about any story.

so that was no accident

don't use emoticons or emojis in your story just.. just don't... it's improper formatting.

i'm

You make this mistake a lot. "I'm" is a contraction of "I am", so the "I" in "I'm" should be capitalized.

exited

Excited.
Erm, well. This isn't the worst story I've ever seen, but it could use work. The most irking factor I've noticed is how out of character the characters can be at times. There's also formatting errors everywhere, but your dialogue is surprisingly well done. This made me suspicious of the entire fic being a troll, but it doesn't seem bad enough to be one.
I give this chapter a meh out of ten.

NintenDOS

NintenDOS #2 · May 13th, 2016 · · ·

This was an enjoyable read. It was nice and humorous. Good job.

Amethyst Heart

Amethyst Heart #3 · May 14th, 2016 · · ·

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"I'm" is a contraction of "I am", so the "I" in "I'm" should be capitalized.

Thanks for pointing that out. When I was writing I actually had no idea if it was supposed to be capitalized.

don't use emoticons or emojis in your story just.. just don't... it's improper formatting.

Just Discord breaking the fourth wall .

The most irking factor I've noticed is how out of character the characters can be at times.

Well considering they are each merged with their opposite, my logic was their clashing personalities would cancel each other out. Sorry if it bugs you guys .