The Great Alicorn War

by 21latenighter

Silient Night

"A hero is someone who has given his or her life to something greater than themselves" - Joesph Campell

He sat in a small dark room, alone. The room was lit by a single small candle, which shone like the hope in the world, bright, but in a world of darkness it was but a glimmer. In front of him was a small rectangular wooden table. Upon the table was a map of the known world. To the north was the great empire, which now covered half of the map. To the southeast was a large forest, which was in real life a large forest of young trees, but him and others took solace in the fact that they could call it home. There were small villages that dotted the map here and there, to the west and south, and a couple within the forest. Upon the map were small pieces like that of a board game, but rather than being simple pawns or knights, they stood for earth pony battalions, pegasi flight squadrons, and unicorn mages. There were fives pieces that marked his own generals, his friends which he held dear. There was a large red piece that adorned the place of the empire that represented his enemy, Kaorn.

There was a small box to the left side of the map that held six pieces in it. His eyes trailed from the map to the small box that stood beside it. The pieces inside stood for the Great Alicorns, creators of the world around him, and were his family. The alicorns had charged the empire to end the fight, but the master of chaos had other ideas. Beings of chaos stormed through the front doors of the black castle, their chaotic forms propelling them towards their enemies. Once they had reached them, the soldiers let loose a magic that altered the very fabric of the universe itself. Him and the others fought their enemies through time and space, through fire and ice, and found themselves fighting on water and through land. They battled through the chaos to find their enemy standing ready for them. His magic had separated the other alicorns from him and hurricane, and he was forced to watch as he....

"Fury......... Fury...." came a small voice from the dark.

Fury Flight lifted his head and realized that he had begun to cry. Three drops had made their way down his muzzle and fell to their demise on the map, forever staining it with their water.

"Fury?..." came the voice again. The Voice sounded like that of a young filly foal. "Are you in here Fury?" Came the voice with fear rising, beginning to be afraid of the answer she was going to eventually get.

"Yes Luna, I'm in here," Fury answered, "I'm in here..." He said again barely above a whisper.

The small red door behind him opened to show a small purple filly walking through. She carried a small stuffed opossum with her. The young alicorn filly had just received her cutie mark the week before, and now a brilliant white crescent moon adorned her flank. The young filly took careful steps towards the other alicorn in the room.

"Big brother? why are you crying?" Luna asked as another tear made it's lonely trail down Fury's face.

He began to smile as he turned his face away from the table and the sadness that it had brought him to the young filly at his side.

"I'm... I'm not crying Luna," Fury said as he wiped away from his eyes, "See?"

"Fury, your crying," Luna said as she leaned against Fury's side. "Have you seen mommy, she was gonna tell me a bedtime story tonight, she promised me she would!" Luna said excited, not noticing the well of tears in Fury's eyes.

He hadn't told them yet, that mother and father were never coming back. He tried to gulp down the lump in his throat that wouldn't go away. He looked down to the filly and made one of the toughest decisions he would ever make.

"Luna," Fury started, but he couldn't continue. "How about I read you a story tonight?" Fury said as he looked down to the young filly.

"Ok Fury, but what about mommy, where is she?" Luna asked, a border of fear in her voice.

"I'll tell you in the morning Luna, alright?" he said, hoping she would buy his white lie.

"Ok brother, come on, let me show you the story," Luna said as she grabbed Fury's hoof with her own and began tugging on the alicorn.

"I'm coming Luna, I'm coming," Fury said as he rose to his hooves and followed her out of the room.

He heard a creak of the floor as he and Luna walked out of the room and found Celestia standing beside the door, obviously not eavesdropping in any way. When the door opened, Celestia jumped back nearly ten feet with her wings flared.

"Anything interesting?" Fury asked sarcastically as he passed the young white alicorn.

"What!" Celestia yelped, trying not to act suspicious.

"Oh come on Tia, I heard you a mile away," Fury said as he smiled.

"Ok," She started, "I heard you talking about mom Fury, and I wanted to know if she was alright?"

Fury hung his head, this wasn't going to wait until the morning. "Follow me Tia, we'll talk in a bit," Fury said as he led the two fillies into their room. He then tucked each of them into their bed, and then sat down beside them. The bed was huge, much to big for the two young ponies, but they didn't mind at all. The covers that covered them were thick and protected them from the cold and the shadows of the night. It was decorated to show the stars, and to one side shown the sun falling to the night, slowly giving in to the temptation of rest. The rest of the room followed suit in Decorations, revealing a room that covered the night sky.

Fury used his magic to light a large candle by their bed. "Do you remember what mom and dad used to tell us, about a place we all most go one day, when we are called?" Fury asked after the candle flame flickered and began to burn bright against the night, banishing the shadows from the room, and illuminating the entire room.

"Uh huh," Luna said, looking confused at the alicorn.

"Well," Fury began slowly, looking to his hooves before returning to the two fillies, "Mom and dad went there yesterday," he said slowly, letting his voice slip.

"What, and they didn't take us too?" Luna said, looking even more confused than before.

"No Luna, they didn't," Fury said, tears starting to roll off his cheeks, diving to the floor where they met the ground with a graceful splat.

"When are they coming back?" she asked again.

"They..... they..... won't be...." Fury choked out.

"WHAT!!" Luna screamed as tears gathered in her eyes, "Why not?!"

Fury thought hard about the next words that he would say to the young filly. What would he tell her, what should he tell her? "They... They..... have to... get your room ready there.." Fury said, trying to be as sweet and kind as he could.

"They are? When will they be done?" Luna asked with teary stars in her eyes.

"I... I don't know Luna, but let's wipe those tears away and try to get some rest for tomorrow," Fury said as he wiped away the last of the tears away from the young alicorn's eyes.

"Will they make a room for Tiberius?" Luna asked, holding up the stuffed animal up with her magic.

"Yes Luna," Fury said, kneeling down to hug his younger sister, "They'll have one ready for Tiberius," Fury said before rising and blowing out the candle. Luna, satisfied with the answer, laid her head down upon the soft pillow and let herself be immersed in a world of imagination. Fury began to walk around the bed when he heard a small sniffle coming from the other side of the bed. He had spent all of his attention on trying to calm Luna down that he had forgotten about Celestia.

She was wiping her eyes when he called upon his magic and let his horn alight a soft blue. He made his way back over to the other side of the bed where the white teenage alicorn laid, beginning to cry.

He brought a hoof to her shoulder and spoke softly to his sister, "What's wrong Tia?"

"Is mom really gone forever Fury? please, tell me," Celestia said as she took a rag that Fury produced with his magic. "I'm older than Luna, and I know that we're in a war and I know what death is brother, please tell me!" she said, sniffling.

Fury lowered his head and his voice before speaking. "Come on Tia, we'll talk out here," Fury said, gesturing to the sleeping filly beside her.

Celestia crawled out from under her covers and followed the older alicorn out of the room to the long hallway that connected to the room. Fury slowly closed the door behind Celestia, the door silently creaking with his magic. After the door closed, he turned to speak to her, "So...., what do you want to know?" he asked in a low voice.

"Is it true brother, is she really dead?" Celestia asked, sadness and fear beginning to overwhelm her.

"Yes Celestia,...... it's true," Fury said barely above a whisper. "Both of our parents are gone,"

The horror in Celestia's eyes began to manifest itself as the young alicorn began to break down. She began to shudder as the tears of a thousand alicorns rolled down her cheeks and the sadness rocked her body. Fury placed a hoof on her shoulder and soothed her the best that he could, even though he wasn't the right pony for the job. That pony had died, and it was his fault. He had always been the one that had supported her from behind the scenes.

The tears began to die down from her eyes until Celestia was able to wipe them away. She still shuddered, but the initial pain was washing away like the stream. "So what happens now Fury, now that they're gone?" she asked as a hiccup came over her.

"We move on Tia. Hard as it is, we must move forward and stand against the evil before us," Fury said, trying his best to hold a straight face. "Mom and dad would want us to move on, and remember them as they were Tia," he answered again. He wanted so badly to hold Celestia and cry with her until the pain finally ended, but that wouldn't save them.

"So...," Celestia started, "Does that make you the new king?" Celestia asked, the last of her tears making their way down her cheeks, and falling to the floor with grace.

"No Tia..." Fury answered, "I will not be king, but another will take their place upon the throne."

"Who?" Celestia asked, looking at him with both interest and confusion.

"You and Luna will take up their place of course," Fury said, pointing to the young white alicorn.

"WHAT!!... ME!!" Celestia yelled, "But why me brother, couldn't you pick another, I've never lead anypony before like this!" she shouted.

Fury placed a hoof to his lips, reminding her that her sister was sleeping before speaking. "When you are old enough to take the throne, you will, and you will never have to worry about being alone or afraid," Fury said, cheering her up, "Because just as the sun can rely on the moon to light up the night sky when it lowers to rest, you can rely on our sister in times of hardship and need," Fury said, calming down the young princess. "Why don't you get some sleep and talk more in the morning about it," Fury said as he used his magic to open the door to the bedroom as silently as he had closed it earlier, gesturing with his head to go in and get some rest.

Celestia smiled a small smile before walking in and crawled back under her covers and let sleep wash over her like the sea. Fury gently closed the door, hearing a small click as the door shut. He then turned to walk away when a small whisper stopped him.

The voice was weak, and sounded like that of a mare, soft and delicate. "Fury Flight, the time has come......"

Fury looked around to find the owner of the voice, but found nopony near him. He changed his mind about walking back to the war room and called upon his magic. The air around him began to electrify as he cast the spell for teleportation. A white light then began to cover his vision as his spell progressed. He closed his eyes and felt a jerk as he left the ground and reappeared. He opened his eyes to see that he had teleported out of the castle to the bridge that crossed over a deep crevice in the earth. He walked to the side of the bridge where a single stairway lead down to the bottom of the ravine. He called upon his magic yet again and teleported down the stairs to the bottom.

As he began walking forward through the canyon floor, a cave came into sight, but he felt as though he wasn't alone. He called upon his magic and his horn began to light up a soft blue, and from his horn were sent sparks that sparkled and fizzed around. From the shadows came five others like him, five alicorns that he could call his family, his friends.

Their names were all to familiar to him, as they were like family to him. To his left was Grog, son of Palladia, the Wise, he was a brown stocky stallion with a straight cut black mane. Beside Grog was his sister, Star Shine. She was a graceful white mare with a long silver-grey mane. To the side of her was Silvertail, a blue mare with a sparkling silver mane and tail. She was the daughter of the great time pony, Kronos.

To his right was Serenity, she was a magenta mare with a brilliant blue mane. She was daughter of Pike, the Sturdy. The last was Hurricane, the daughter of Zephira, a blue mare with a mane to match every color of the rainbow. She was his most trusted and oldest friend, the two being older than the rest by a couple years.

They were the next generation in the line of great alicorns, a light in a time of darkness, leaders in a new day. They reached the cave and began to walk into the large opening, which was full of life. They walked into the cave in silence, and gave each other nods of approval before beginning their meeting.

"Hello guys, it's good to see all of you again," Fury started, his voice leaving a slight echo in the massive cave. "Grog, my brother in arms, how fairs the west and the lands beyond?" he asked his companion.

"Fury Flight," came the deep masculine voice of Grog, "I am sad to say that the west has fallen to his control. His alicorn army ran over our forces and we were lucky to escape with our lives," he finished, gesturing to himself and his sister who had traveled with him.

"And to the south?" Fury said, looking to his friends while losing hope, Silvertail and Serenity.

"No better Fury, the draconiquis overran us with their chaos magic," Silver Tail stated in a look of fear upon her as her mind relived the battle.

"What of the north Fury, and our parents?" came the shy voice of Serenity. Fury let his gaze travel towards the floor, he had failed them all.

"Kaorn still holds control of the north, and as for our parents," Hurricane said, looking to Fury with sympathy, "They have crossed over,"

The other four alicorns gasped in shock at the horrible news. How could six of the most powerful alicorns in existence be defeated by one tyrant?

The voice Fury had heard earlier returned and began to whisper in his ear again, "Come and find me Fury Flight, and gain powers like none other..."

"What powers?" Fury asked telepathically to the frail voice.

"A way to end the war and to heal the land...... come find me...." The voice trailed.

"Where are you?" Fury asked again telepathically.

"I am in the forest, where life began, hurry, for I haven't much time..."

Fury's mind brought him back to the cave where the other five had started arguing after Fury had went silent.

"GUYS!" Fury yelled. At this, the five stopped and looked to their friend. "I have an idea of what we should do,"

"What is it?" they all five said in unison.

"Somewhere in the forest is a power like none other that we could to defeat Kaorn and heal the land," Fury said, pointing his hoof towards the young but large forest outside.

"So your saying we abandon out duties as war generals to go in search of a mythical power our parents used to tell us about?" Silver Tail said with a questioning gaze.

"You have a better idea?" Fury said in a monotone.

She looked her head and began to follow Fury and the others out of the cave in search of the mythical life that their parents had told them of old.

"Born from fire and ice, come forth to me thrice, Feed from the hatred of the world and bring forth a winter from which they'll never return............ Hahahahahahahahahahahahaaaaa

Comments

[21latenighter]

a story about alicorns, oh boy, and an oc that has a relationship with the sisters, oh my. First off who cares, it's my oc and i'll do with him as I please, if I want to make him destroy the world with a shake of his tail, then so be it. this may not be the best story on this site, but I take time to write this like everybody else. My interests are different from yours, you believe that the sisters should be left alone when it comes to oc's, and may I dare even mention Mary Sue, that's your choice. if even one person likes my stories, then it makes it all worth it, it means that I reached out to one person and may even inspire them to write something of their own one day. Isn't that what we bronies are, people who dare to dream outside the box, people who inspire others. what has this place become in my absence...

for those who enjoy my work, please forgive me, i'm just tired of receiving down marks and no comments on what they didn't like..... Today is a dark day in the world of Latenighter's creation, the walls are shaking from the tension, the very air is thick enough to choke on. I need a hero of my own here, I really need a girlfriend actually, but those are my own problems, not for on here.

[Sk1Tz]

"Who cares"

Uh, a great deal of people who like stories that aren't shit self-inserts. No offense man, but your "OC" is one of the most bland OC's I've seen in awhile. I can relate literally nothing with him. He's the walking definition of a Gary Sue, and a dull one at that. You basically checked off all the steps of making a stereotypical Sue character. Older brother of the sisters? Check. Alicorn? Check. Backstory bland and overused? Check. Barebone Uniqueness with name and personality? Check.

If this isn't the reason people will dislike your story, then it might as well be the obvious OOC Celestia and Luna characters, especially Celestia. Young as they are, pretty sure they wouldn't speak so "modern", nor act like it. It's odd and out of place, and breaks any little immersion this gave me.

Another issue is with the story idea. Personal preference, maybe, but this idea has been done to death. Cannot tell you how many stories follow suit with this exact same formula, because there would be more stories like this one than the total amount of Fallout Equestria stories (Which is nearing the 3k mark, mind you).

Finally there's the description issue. You write a book's worth of words of every little thing that the protagonist glances at. Should you provide detail of the setting your character is in, and his/her surroundings? Yes, but not too much that it simply leaves no room for thought of the reader to use their own imagination on what the setting looks like.

With that said, I don't think you should prolong this story trend of yours. I checked the past stories you've made, and the only ones that got attention were the eye catching ones, not anything that had to do with "Fury" here. Why not give something original to the audience?

[dyingenglish]

I always like reading about peoples take on alicorn lore and history. Not a bad story. Little Luna with a stuffed opossum sounds adorable lol.

[Gizmo Gear]

7785866 Why be an ass about it?? If you don't like it, then take your sick pleasure of making people feel bad about their stories and go make an ass of yourself elsewhere!!

[Gizmo Gear]

7785657 You need to get laid? jklol! *Lesigh* People have become dicks. These days you can sue someone for farting. I mean, people have become the biggest idiots, and its spreading and taking away 'love and tolerate', one of the many things that leads many bronies to join the brony community. So us bronies gotta band together against the incoming idiocy of the morons that take sick pleasure in messing with others. With that being said, I like the story already! I look forward in seeing where you go with it!!!