• Member Since 13th Apr, 2016
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Bringiton6611


Recently turned 18 year old that came back to the site after a loooooooong break. Mind you, still not that talented in terms of writing XD but I try.

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Changelings are known to be heartless and suck the love from ponies. But not all changelings are like this and I can prove it. My name is David, and this is a story of how I found something that I thought was just a bug.

Thank you to BubbleLee for letting me use her art for the cover art for the past long while, but I've made some custom art for it now! Her link will remain as a tribute.

'Press F to pay respects.'


http://askbubblelee.deviantart.com/art/Crash-Landing-594190346

Special thanks to Bestiebest, princessfizzyheart and Raistlin Phantom for being my editors.

Holy Balls! I got featured! (briefly) 11-26-16
Holy Balls! Again! 100 likes! 2-18-17
All The Balls! Now has a YouTube reading by Lead Bread! It can be found here. 3-5-17
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Chapters (19)
Comments ( 175 )

Some of the sentences might need to be revised, as a better word could be put in their place. Such as,

climbing through some thick stuff

could be replaced with 'tightly woven branches', or something else. Also, the first paragraph could be revised. Otherwise, decent story

You definitely need a proofreader. However, you do have my interest.

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Thanks for the feed back.
Yes, I know I need a proofreader. As I said , this is by frist story. Ever. So I'm not the best at writing.

But I'm glad I have your attention.:twilightsmile:

Not great, but I read worse. Still gut my attention. Interesting where and how it will goes . Sorry if my English suck.:derpytongue2:

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Its fine, I don't expect it to great, i'm not the best with grammar.:derpyderp1:

You don't have anything to be sorry for.:scootangel:

This looks good, interesting
Please continue
I'll give you 8/10 moustache
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
And a like nice work still can you make it like 1 chapter every week though?

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Thanks for the mustaches! Glad to see you like the story. As for updates, I will try my best to post a chapter a week, but a can't make any promises.

:rainbowhuh: ... I have no clue how to respond to that. :rainbowlaugh:

Keep up the moustache! :moustache:

Well it's a little(short ) candy, but thank you for new chapter anyway. It been so long time ago, that I started worry. :pinkiesad2: You remember about us. (Readers)

Impossible they knew where the shot came from. It showed one *BANG* and when you fire, the sound echoes and bunces off things. Say I'm a quarter mile to your right, I fire, and when you hear the sound, it bounces back of things such as trees, making it sound like it came from the other direction as well, so there is no possible way they could have depicted where the shot came from :p

7685162 This is fanfiction... I do what I want :derpytongue2:

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Lots of crap has been happening scine it's Nightmare Night.
Plus I have two othere stories in the making, one of which will probably be posted in the next week or so if it is approved.
Dont worry. I wont forget you guys! :heart:

Wow, I really am liking your fic so far! I look forward to seeing more.:pinkiesmile:

7685364 Glad to see you're enjoy the fic. :pinkiehappy:

7685162 Dude i've found many hunters on my land just from them fireing once. You call tell where a shot comes from if you have sense.

7687482 Probably takes some time to develope that xD I went hunting once and the first shot i heard i got scared lol

Wow never thought Thorax will be in this chapter still been waiting for 2 weeks now, can you make it more faster? i'm just saying not forcing you.... or maybe i should use the TARDIS to go to the future to read more newer chapter. Well i'll just wait. Good Luck

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Sorry about the delay, as I said the the authors note I'll try to make the next chapter longer.

Take your time and make it good "we" can wait:twilightsmile:

Need help editing your stories? message me if you do :)

Thorax was definitely unexpected. I like when an author can do that well. Keep these coming, I really want to see where this is heading:rainbowkiss:

interesting no comments

Well I like it so far, my only problem is there needs to be slightly more detail, not much more, but some parts feel a little rushed

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Thank you very much for the feedback! I'll keep that in mind while writing the next chapter. :pinkiehappy:

I did rush a bit while writing "The Invasion" toward the end. I just wanted to have the chapter out.:twilightblush:

The end part is in italics.... i think you need to fix that:facehoof:

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:rainbowhuh:I have no clue what happened there. There's no reasoon it should be like that. I cant fix it because there are no italic marks in the editing thing or in the google doc. I'll look into it more.

Thank you for pointing it out!:pinkiehappy:

7685162 Think of sound as a pebble dropped into a pond. The ripples are sound. Now imagine that the ripples never stopped going outward until they eventually ceased to exist, or shrunk so small they couldn't be seen. That is sound. it does not bounce or ricochet. It is the spread of vibration until non-existence. You could easily determine the location of a gunshot with some practice once you're used to it, because you're going to be only hit by the sound on one end. Otherwise hearing would never be a reliable sense, and you would be able to hear foot steps at your rear, in front of you as well as on all sides of you.

Take him with you. It what I always peek when I play the TellTale games. Because it more 'fun ' way. :pinkiehappy:

Minor typo

Setting the gun down down, I continue

I know castle are supposed

"Gotta!"

it think you mean Gotchya

but are we there we there yet?"

you cloned we there

Throw the changeling at him

Let me see chance be caught by guards with possible mercy. Or run to the forest where you are meal. Yeah, enough stupid decisions for now.
Try sneak past.

Sneak past Them. Dude need to get home.

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