Twixt Fœnum and The Hold Lies the Door to Equestria

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Applejack's investigation of the Flim Flam brothers' newest scheme will lead to a chance encounter with something that Equestria has never seen before. Starting with one new friendship, and then six new friendships, the gap between two worlds will be bridged, and the Equestrians and Fœnumians alike will discover just how close their worlds really are.

Them's Fightin' Herds crossover.

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CactusGuy

CactusGuy #1 · Aug 7th, 2016 · · ·

Cool, tracking

Dan-heron

Dan-heron #2 · Apr 3rd, 2017 · 2 · ·

pretty good all around, the way you portrayed AJ was great in my opinion. Nice callbacks to canon and a nice way to set up some character development down the line

Now, the issues I have with this is Pinkie's and Arizona's info dump. Pinkie explaining the plot out of nowhere has always been annoying at best, it always feels out of place and like a cheap way for an author who has no idea how to implement the info in an organic manner. Arizona's exposition right after awakening also feels forced, and more like you wanted to get that info out for little reason when you could have introduce the information pretty easily in the conversation.

Have Arizona wake up and asks Aj if she's with the brothers. AJ says no and helps her get out, she notes that Arizona doesn't seem willing to go with the scam and starts untying her, Arizona then explains that she didn't agree with anything, she just woke up tied down, sluggish and too tired to move, and waking up in different cities with those two brothers always there, always saying she was a freak show for Equestrians. Or just say she doesn't want to talk about it, only that she's been caged against her will and then have the hooves scene

Oh, and Starlight dropped off the narration after AJ went to the brothers

That's really all I can think to comment of.

Flutters Is Shy

Flutters Is Shy #3 · Feb 24th, 2018 · 3 · ·

'Convinced her to quit her job'
I... Er... Wut?
Applejack came across another individual who for all intents and purposes was a pony that was not only being held captive, but was being exploited by a couple of well known miscreants. Why the heck did she not raise a fuss? 'Hey everypony, these scoundrels are holding a pony prisoner! Lynch em!'

It just seems slightly odd that this setup was not only seen as a 'normal' thing, but a socially acceptable one at that.

Belated1truth

Belated1truth #4 · Mar 5th, 2018 · 2 · ·

Applejack should not really weirded out by talking to a cow after she talks to them several times throughout the show. In "Applejack Season" right after stopping a stampede of them, she is seen talking with one. Also I get that she does not look like one of the cattle due to being proportioned differently, but Applejack comes of as kinda racist. Especially since Equestria has allied with allied with Hippogriffs/Seaponies, bird people, Abyssians, Dragons, a DRACONEQUSS, and Changelings.

An udderless cow seems relativly minor. I get you want to set up a sense of tension and unease down the line though, but it comes off questionable since Arizonia has yet merit such concerns to warrant such an attitude. Unless Applejack can somehow sense that Arizona is more alien than she appears.

Matthais Unidostres

Matthais Unidostres #5 · Mar 7th, 2018 · · ·

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Actually, Applejack's xenophobia was meant to play a greater role in this story.

Comickook

Comickook #6 · Dec 27th, 2018 · · ·

Not much I can say beyond, well, great job on the start of this slightly AU story (not enough so to warrant a tag, but JUST enough so that any differences between this story and the game when it is finally finished are justified). The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked AJ and Arizona's first meeting and the Flim Flams' karmic beatdown.

I will VERY definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also understand the need for real world concerns to take top priority.

Comickook

Comickook #7 · Dec 27th, 2018 · · ·

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Yeah. I kind of figured. Plus, this story is set semi-early in Season 6, well before the season finale. Which also means that it is set well before the movie, which was post-Season 7.

DNC