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As Time Goes On

When Twilight suffers from insomnia, just days after the wedding, she reflects upon the departure of Shining Armor, and why family, may be just as magic as friendship.

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chronicLurker

chronicLurker #1 · Jun 17th, 2012 · · ·

Not bad, though there are a few typos that threw me off. You used 'privet' (a small bush, I think) instead of 'private' a couple of times, for example. I felt really bad for Twilight's parents in this one, having both of their children leave a note on their way out the door.

Shadow_Wolf

Shadow_Wolf #2 · Jun 18th, 2012 · · ·

A few typos, but overall an excellent story with some good imagery and emotion. I'd love to see a perspective from Twilight's Parents and her Brother as well.