Wrong Universe #3 - Fury of the Green Sun
The following was not written by me, it was written by Kamin 989 of the Spacebattles forums, and is posted here with his permission.
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Fury of the Green Sun
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The man walked calmly into the throne room of Canterlot, Celestia looking nervously at him. He was...human, but odd, very odd. For one, he had four arms, and his eyes glowed bright burnning green, smoking like windows into endless furnaces.
'Celestia,' he said. 'I must regret to inform you-'
'Who are you?'
'I, my dear lady, am Ligier, also known as the Green Sun,' he said, bowing politely, with a shred of barely-contained rage in his voice. 'As I was saying, there is an obscure loophole in those treaties of surrender we made long ago. For, you see, while we are forbidden to manifest on this planet without express invitation, those rules do not apply to the territory contained by-'
'What are you?'
'My dear lady, I am a Nihilem of Malfeas, better known as his fetich - the core aspect of his personality,'
'And who is this...Malfeas?' the Princess asked.
'Why, are you so ignorant? Malfeas is our City and our King, the leader of our people and their empire as one. You don't know what that...draconequus really was, do you?'
'What?'
'Ah, therein lies your ignorance. He is an...aspect of Oramus, one of the King's kind dreadfully incapacitated as of the present time - in your country on some business, probably. Anyway, I'll make it clear - in about...five days we, by which I mean the Yozi, rightful rulers of this reality, are arriving, and...we will not like what you are doing to the world we made.'
'I command the Sun! What makes you think your pitiful green spark will compare?'
'Oh, now Milady, you've made me angry. Barely containing the rage...graargh...I will take my leave.'
In a sudden flash of emerald fire, Ligier vanished, tendrils of viridian flame lancing out, shattering a chandelier and incinerating several guards.
Celestia glared.
'Keep up the Conversion! Expand the Barrier!'
~*~
The City did not appear suddenly.
The mirage-towers loomed over Ponyville impossibly. For about four days they had been shimmering nearby.
But it did, on the morning of the fifth day.
They tore themselves up from the ground, leaving cracked, charred earth where the walls met Equestrian soil. A group of pegasi and unicorns went in.
The city itself attacked them. They were dragged into the streets, sealed up under pavement stones or into walls. There was one survivor, and she was found at its edge, mane falling off in clumps, wasting away.
She died a day later, leading Celestia to declare war.
It was her biggest mistake.
Ever.
~*~
She was currently analysing how the sapient equine species reacted to stress. Deconstructing them and the habitations they used seemed a logical experimental method.
So far, there had been 34,578 attempts to escape the situation, along with 1,178 attempts to attack Her spheres. All without impact on the analytic framework or the experiment itself. Currently, She had disassembled 500,000 equines, gaining profound insight into their thought processes, soul structure, metaphysical capabilities and biology.
The ponies below saw none of this. They saw almost ten thousand crystal spheres floating above Manehattan, immune to all harm, blazing with heatless fire. They saw invisible death disintegrating buildings and sweeping over the streets to reduce ponies to a fine, white-grey dust. They ran and hid and died wherever they were.
~*~
There were no attachments. No friends, no fetters, nothing holding you down. Just motion, constant motion. Why couldn't these creatures understand? Oh, she had been so foolish back then, but Lillike, sweet Lillike, had died and the River of Torments had become the Silent Wind.
She blew through the streets and the towns and the fields, freeing the poor little creatures from the lives that fettered them, held them back. They had no music to keep her away, after all.
She was spreading the enlightenment, and giggling. Who said you couldn't have fun?
~*~
He was in the night. He was in the absence, in the dark, in the black mirror held up to all Virtue. In fact, he was that mirror.
He crept, slithered furtively in the deepest shadows - such was his essential nature.
And in the dark, he encountered a unicorn. The last one he had set his mind to.
The shadows around her took a shape. A very familiar one.
'Oh, Twilight Sparkle. What are your fondest childhood memories?'
+~*~
Appleloosa screamed in the storm. The sand just kept coming, a flaying, endless wind.
They didn't know who was behind it.
Cecylene kept on the barrage. The wretched creatures held to some idea of law. But there was no law but the basic one essential to all from the lowest wretch in the City to the highest of the high: The Strong Rule the Weak.
Anything other was a lie.
~*~
The devastation in Equestria was total. Worse, those ponies who had borne the Elements of Harmony had...killed themselves. Such a thing was unheard of, and Celestia was in a panic. She was alone in her throne-room.
A wind blew into Canterlot, and silence reigned as the royal guards slumped over dead without a sound. Then he came in. A trickle of quicksilver under the door of the palace's most secure chamber, eventually resolving itself into...Celestia. But her eyes were silver mirrors, and with horror she realised what was going to happen.
'You thought the Silver Forest wouldn't have his fun?'
'You-what are-'
'Oh, right now I think I reflect you perfectly. Shame there can only be one of us now.'
Celestia screamed in horror.
'Oh, you're going to die anyway - my brother could crush your silly palace with a single hoof.'
The earth shook.
'Ah. He's on his way. Might as well put my effort in.'
~*~
The unicorns were thin-spread right now, but still a large number had been sent to defeat the Thing heading, quite literally, through the mountains. The mountains themselves were somehow not there when they stood in the way of It, that immense boar, its presence twisting the sky around it.
Isidoros himself did not care. The magic striking his flesh caused no harm to Him, the most sovereign creature in all existence, whose will was blocked by no-one and nothing. He pressed forward unstoppably, his hooves ripping craters in the ground, smashing forests and towns beneath them. He kept on moving, and in one hoof-strike Canterlot was obliterated.
He never even noticed.
~*~
The all-eating swamp crept and ate Equestria. The silver mirror took Celestia's shape and defeated her. The desert blew with its soul-flaying sandstorms. And the black sky-twisting boar rampaged, smashing Canterlot beneath his hooves and barely noticing.
Seven days after the Yozi had begun their attack, the Barrier collapsed, they suddenly left, and humanity took its first steps on Equestrian soil.
The first ponies they met begged for mercy.
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Which universe is this one? I haven't heard of it.
Have one set in the Half Life universe. More specifically, after Episode 2.
As usual, extremely well-written... I simply have no clue what this is from. My fault, there.
780606 i approve of this notion.
then we need celestia to go up against, well, I'll let these guys speak for themselves.
This is the Exalted universe, right?
I can see the Combine saying that, and them turning to ponies into synths.
780606
The Combine in Equestria. I would love to see that.
I'm... at a loss here. I can't find any source or evidence about this universe. Where is it from?
780728 we need to get Dalek to put the Halfe Life 2 universe in his story.
>I would love to see their reactions to the Overwatch announcer.780745
780622
...It's Exalted, and I didn't write this one. Look at the disclaimer.
These are the Yozis from Exalted. Their a form of cosmic world-beings that have been banished from their Creation and imprisoned in the body of their king Malfeas (the giant city). And poor Twilight and the Ebon Dragon
780789 Yes, my bad. Still great, though. And thanks for the info!
775616 I'd say WWII Draka, since they're the ones I'm most familiar with.
I wanna see them deal with the Helghan (and Visari cause fuck-damn his speeches).
What if the Conversion and Bubble were the reason for the Helghan Exodus?
Freddy Krueger pays a visit to Celestia, he is unhappy with her because she is taking away the humans, which in turn is taking away his prime hunting ground.
Humans belong to him and the other monsters of the world, she has no right to take them. So he torments her night after night, due to her inability to affect him.
New idea for a 'joke' chapter: Equestria appears on Cadia.
The continent is immediately nuked from orbit and life for Cadians go on as normal.
780752
OK, but it says that a passing knowledge of the TCB subgenre is necessary, and I have no idea what it is. When I hear that The Conversion Bureau, my mind instantly goes to some of Aku-Oreo's less inappropriate transformation comics on deviantART. Don't know why, but I just do.
785959 Oookay, let's see.
DALEK IX PRESENTS: A HISTORY OF THE CONVERSION BUREAU
A long time ago, on Equestria Daily, a bloke called Blaze wrote a story called "The Conversion Bureau". This story had Equestria be part of Earth for centuries, with a magical barrier that killed anything human separating it from the rest of the world, thus meaning that anyone who wished to enter Equestria would have to become a pony via a ponification serum. Hence, the titular Conversion Bureaus.
A later interview later revealed that this was so that the author could justify the fact that there were no humans in Equestria. To justify why someone would wish to become a pony, he portrayed the human world as vaugely bleak and unforgiving, and Equestria as a paradise. All in all, the story wasn't all that great; the early chapters have a completely different style as the later ones, the characterization was way off at times, and the tone of the first chapter was a bit misanthropic (something which would eventually characterize this subgenre of MLP fics) and the fact that the potion changed one's personality was creepy. It wasn't ever finished, and the author has stated that he has no desire to continue it.
Of course, then came the recursive fandom. Soon, everyone and their mother was writing TCB fics, and in a way this is something to be expected: despite being a very rough story, it did give us a "sandbox universe" for people to play in (much like FO:E) and there was also the whole "Wish fulfillment" side of things. As you can expect, this didn't help the quality of these fics much. Those early fics were horribad.
Then, came the lady we call Chatoyance. Say what you will about her subject matter, she did an aweful lot of worldbuilding for this subgenre, and was a pretty decent writer to boot. The expanding barrier, the cyberpunk-ish human world, the megacorporations, Celesita being a goddess and the ponies having unnaturally long lives were all her idea.
Unfortunately, her rather... negative views of humanity, her selective disregard for anything in MLP canon that contradicts her personal fanon on how Equestria should be (namely, a picture perfect utopia overseen by an omnipresent goddess, where everything the author does not agree on is prohibited), and her inability to -to quote Winston Churchil- change her mind or change the subject, led to the TCB subgenre becoming a banner for misanthropes and generally crazy people in the fandom.
Add to this the fact that she seems to be capable of writing a lot in a very short amount of time, which meant that many people's fist contact with the TCB was through one of her stories, which in turn meant that she pretty much appropiated the subgenre.
That's why, when someone mentions The Conversion Bureau, the fist thing that comes to the minds of many is a bunch of out of character, misanthropic, extremely long lived, pacifistic, pastel ponies led by what is essentially an Alicorn Cthulhu.
And that's why we get stuff like Ten Rounds, Ten Minutes, Thus sayeth the Lord, and this little thing. As catharsis for that.
Wait! Idea!
Have you ever played Iji? If you have, I'm sure the Tasen would like to say hello to the TCB ponies.
786954
FO:E? What's that? Also, due to that description you gave me, I got a little pushed away from the series. Honestly, the entire thing about out of character, misanthropic ponies reminds me of The Turning of the Screw. While it was interesting, I wasn't exactly fond of It-both TCB and TTotS.
788461
FO:E = Fallout: Equestria.
It's a pretty popular fanfic, but in all honesty I think the only reason it's popular is because it's Fallout 3 with ponies tacked on. I personally don't like it at all.
790461
I don't like Fallout, so I probably won't like FO:E. I would like to give this series a try, though. Can someone point me towards the first in this series?
790461 i think that if Kkat actually tried to make lil'pip likeable i would've liked it more. fallout 3 was a really great game. and my first foray into that glorious universe, but the plot of FO:E just didnt captivate me like the original did.
just like with the conversion bureau. there are side-stories that are much better than the original.
791079 go to EQD and type up Fallout Equestria. at the top of the page should be something called "Story: Fallout: Equestria (Updated 100% Complete!!)" click on that and read to your hearts content.
Alt Worlds Ideas!
I see a lot of people commenting on Kratos; here's hoping he RIPS HER HEAD OFF.
If Celestia tries to do anything in the DC or Marvel Earths...well, she dun goofed.
Warhammer? FOR THE EMPEROR! I don't think Celestia will have any chance against humans; throw in everything else, and she is screwed.
However, I don't think any one has suggested this.
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I'm quite sure the Darkness will enjoy slaughtering a world full of seemingly innocent ponies.
791491
I meant the first of TCB, not FO:E.
Wow that was very good, despite never hearing of Exalted, this was painfully awsome!
791079
If you mean the conversion bureu, the original can be found here http://ponyfictionarchive.net/viewstory.php?sid=569
The spin offs are pretty much all over fimfiction. Word o warning, the original and a large majority of it's spin offs are awful, with terrible writing and misanthropy that will make you as angry as The Hulk.
791491
For me I basically couldn't take it seriously, I mean I'm a fan of the fallout series (played 1, 2, 3 and NV) and MLP (new and old) and It just doesn't work for me. The whole time I feel like the main idea of the crossover was "take Fallout,replace humans with ponies = story". Various other things didn't help, like Little pip constatly lusting over mares (which just made me feel akward). Ultimatly my biggest problem is that for something that's supposedly a fusion of Fallout and MLP it manages to feel like niether. I bet with a few minor tweeks you could make it into a piece of original work
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Anyway, I've been thinking something. What would happen to all these HiE/PoE fics if humans became canon. Either like in the original MLP (from earth arriving through some unexplaned way) or as part of the world (having their own countries and being in diplomatic relations with Equestria for instance). I mean Luna was one thing, but something like this would be huge blow to a lot of peoples fanon. I just can't help but wonder what it would do to the HiE genre, because if they're canon it changes everything.
792229
Well, NOW I'm nervous to even start reading them!
792229 the only story that failed more was PROJECT: Horizons. it felt like the authors thought process was "herpa derp, time to make story. writewritewrite. uh oh, my story is bland as bread. I KNOW, I'll just throw in some rape and slavery. THAT MAKES EVERYTHING DRAMATIC AND SERIOUS!" it feels like the author didn't know how to write an actually serious fic so he just threw everything he could think of into the story in a desperate attempt to tell the readers that his story should be taken seriously. an attempt that failed spectacularly.
792118 same thing. just replace fallout with conversion bureau. WARNING: Any twilight sparkle fans will froth with rage at her portrayal in the first few chapters.
you could have equestria landing in the dead space universe and having necro ponies everywhere
793591 The characterization of TCB!Ponies is so off that they're practically a Mirror Universe.
795243
Do they have goatees?
hmmm
Alt universes ae?
How about DBZ? Lets see how omnipotent Celestia is compared to warriors who are stronger than the Gods themselves.
Halo? The Covenant could do with changing up the Grunt's diet. A little pony meat should do it.
Half-Life? This. Definitely this.
Who-verse? Lets see how the Doctor reacts to someone trying to wipe out Mankind. Probably less merciful that Sec (Ironic no?)
40k? Oh god what have we done.
Fallout? Yeah, lets see some radioactive mutant ponies. Magic doesn't work on radiation. HA.
DC? Batman.
Thats off the top of my head right now, so go nuts. If you want too.
i would love to see chapters with
.doctor who
.warhammer 40k
.fallout
.duke nukem
especially the last one
keep up the good work
796226 No, but they might as well have them.
Here's some of the crossovers that I've planned:
- FoaSE (Including IC ponies with big frakking space guns)
- Submachine series
- Homeworld
- Harry Potter (I want to do something other than pure curbstomp, so I think Harry Potter would make for an interesting war fic)
- Undead WWII (Why? Why the frack not?)
I'm just going to leave these here.
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Idea!
Equestria appears on Command and Conquer Earth.
I wonder what Tiberium does to ponies....
801909
Kane would know all of Celestia's moves before she even makes a plan. Then she would try to KILL him. I would love to see her try that. In the name of KANE!!!!
802372 Dont forget GDI, or the Scrin...
Wait a minute...Equestria...in the Tiberium Wars...
That's a fic all its own!
Hmm, one other bad possibility would be Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagen. I could actually envision this starting in Equestria where a resistance led by Simon had been captured and ponified, however now Simon had mannaged to completely reject all the mental changes of the transformation and was restarting the fight while drawing more and more to his side. And of course building to a big moment with Simon and his group being seal in a magic forcefield, and Simon pushing to drill out of it
"I'll keep advanceing forward no matter what you put in my way! Put me in a grave and I'll never stop my drill, and if I break through I've Won! WHO THE HELL DO YOU THINK I AM!!!"
Followed by a wave of spiral energy turning Simon human again, and forming a giant robot around himself to take the fight to the next level.
Here's one that noone's been thinking of:
Dead Space. Seriously, think about it (and not even the necromorphs either.)
812163 screw that, we need some Alien all up in this shit. (xenomorphs, the human space empire who's name i never tried to learn, space jockeys.)
802372
in the name of Kane for you can't kill the messiah
for the brotherhood
814747
Exactly. Celestia would soon suffer a extremly powerful Kane. And if that doesn't work just let E.A write her life story, and turn it into a game.
813949
No, I'm not talking about necromorphs. In Dead Space canon, humanity has ships called Planetcrackers, which can tear out huge chunks of a planet's crust and pull them into orbit.
So, instead of sitting on their asses doing nothing as in normal TCB, humanity instead decides to simply remove the problem in an overly over-the-top fashion.
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815554 "Oh dear." says celestia. "I hadn't thought of that." and equestria promptly vanishes in a puff of logic.
Hmm, contemplating odd takes and crossovers with YuYu Hakusho, I'm suddenly envisioning a scenario where at some point deep into the whole CB thing, the ponies suddenly discover a bit of magitech telepathically broadcasting the Chapter Black videotape into the subconscious of everyone in the world. Less a big smackdown, and more Celestia and the ponies discovering that their whole "Benevolent crusade" was done under the influence of a rather crude brainwashing tool.
832606
*dons tinfoil hat* This actually did happen, long ago, and stuff like benches with backrests and unsuited-for-hooves teacups are the result of the ponies going What Have We Done and trying to preserve as much of human culture as was left. And Lyra is a member of a religious order of atoners who takes things farther than most.
796955 Undead WWII? Is that a setting from a specific story? Because I know there are at least two settings during the first World War that feature the undead. Anno Dracula, and The Great Undead War. I've never read Anno Dracula, so the only thing I know about is that it features Dracula flying a triplane. I have, however, read By the Blood of Heroes, the first book of The Great Undead War, and it features such things as lighting guns (invented by Tesla of course!), electro/clockwork prosthetics, airships, burrowing machines, and, of course, corpse gas, a German weapon used to turn corpses into soldiers. Do you think that would work?