Pony Fluttershy
Fluttershy sat curled in a ball as her friends formed a circle with her around a table in their suite filled with numerous snacks and drinks. It was one of those really nice, quality built tables with exotic designs that must have been imported from somewhere like Neighpon. So many intricate carvings in the black surface that Fluttershy could spend hours just staring at as the small group sat on the softest cushions that must have ever been made. It would be better than facing things as they were.
“Where do you thing the egghead is?” Rainbow Dash asked, exhaustion and frustration in her voice. Not that Fluttershy could blame her, none of them had much sleep since they learned of Twilight’s disappearance and it was weighing heavily on all of them. She couldn’t help feeling regret for not staying with Twilight when she needed it most. She really wasn’t too sure why she had walked off with the others, but looking across the table to Rainbow Dash made her remember. She followed her friend who assured her that Twilight was just overreacting. At the time it seemed so reasonable, but now Fluttershy couldn’t help hating herself for it.
“Dash, just please cut the name calling out!” Applejack snapped, wiping her eyes with a hoof as she tried holding back tears for their missing friend.
“I don’t care what some pink princess wannabe says, I’ll call my egghead whatever the buck I want!” Rainbow Dash snarled out angrily, “Where does she get off telling me what I can and can’t call Twilight?”
“Ladies, please calm down.” Rarity pleaded, trying to be the voice of reason between the two. She’s been trying to be the voice of reason for the whole group since learning that Twilight was missing which surprise Fluttershy. Gone, well mostly gone, was the drama queen as she stepped up assuming a more leader like role among the group. Not that Rainbow Dash and Applejack appreciated it much at first.
“I love Twilight! I don’t want some bucking pony I barely know telling me I don’t!” Rainbow Dash seethed angrily, clenching her jaw.
“We didn’t show her much love, Dashie.” Pinkie Pie sniffed, her hair flat and eyes watery. “Why did we do it? We didn’t know that meanie changeling queen when she pretended to be Princess Cadence. Yet we sided with her and turned out backs on Twilight. She hates us!”
“Shush darling, don’t say that.” Rarity said softly as she pulled a sobbing Pinkie Pie against her, letting the pink mare wail into her fur without once complaining that it would stain her coat. “We messed up, sure, but friends mess up all the time. We’ll find Twilight and we will make things right.”
“Not if the nag has anything to do with it. She fired you as her seamstress, how long do you think she moves to get rid of all of us?” Rainbow Dash scoffed, her eyes watering.
“That hurt, I admit it, it is going to have a huge impact on my business and livelihood.” Rarity sighed as she leaned her head on Pinkie Pies as the pink pony just curled into the white pony seeking comfort.
“Buck your livelihood! Were talking about Twilight Sparkle missing because of our buck up!” Applejack snarled, drawing back in shock as she noticed the tears running down Rarity’s muzzle.
“Darling, I’ll let that go as I know you are upset like the rest of us. Unlike you though, I don’t have Big Mac to help cover my side of things while I’m away. You should be worried too though because if this effects your farm then it could impact your livelihood.” Rarity explained as she visibly tried to fight back the tears, her body shaking.
“What does my livelihood have to do with Twilight missing, sugarcube?” Applejack asked, calming down a little despite still seeming agitated.
“Tell me, Applejack. If our businesses go under what happens to our families? To Sweetie and Bloom?” Rarity asked, Applejack’s face draining of color despite her fur as realization sunk in. “I’m worried sick about Twilight, but I’m also worried about what little family I have left.”
“This isn’t fair!” Rainbow Dash snapped, slamming a hoof down on the table making the snacks jump as she fought back more tears. “How did we come to this? How the buck did I do something so stupid? So uncool!”
“Rainbow.” Fluttershy sighed as she got up and went to hug her oldest friend.
“I’m sorry egghead! I’m so sorry!” Rainbow Dash cried as Fluttershy held her while trying her best to comfort the brash, sometimes arrogant Pegasus. Fluttershy knew that no matter how brash and arrogant Rainbow might seem at times, the mare was just as caring and kind as Fluttershy herself despite hiding it behind a wall of bravado.
“Look, we’re all tired so maybe we should just get some rest and hopefully things will look up tomorrow.” Rarity suggested and got murmurs of acceptance from the others though Fluttershy herself knew that none of them would sleep well despite her own agreement to try and rest. They were worried about Twilight and more than a few of them kept having nightmares about the wedding where they found Twilight dead because they didn’t take her serious when she really needed them to.
Princess Luna
“What’s wrong your highness?” A threstral night guard asked as she stood watch over the entrance to the chamber holding the mirror that apparently worked as a conduit for a portal to a whole other world.
“I have a lot on my mind.” Luna sighed, looking over to the guard realizing that it was Night Shade who was her most trusted guard when it should have been another. “What happened, why are you here? Not that I mind but, shouldn’t your shift be over?”
“Yeah, but I was worried after seeing how distraught you were earlier and switched out with Reaver so we could talk.” Night Shade replied as she pulled her helmet off. Unlike many of the solar and night guard, Night Shade’s appearance didn’t change much when donning the illusion enchanted helmet of their group. Only big change was the mare’s mane was much longer and a bit of a mess.
“What’s there to talk about? We should be celebrating my grand stallion marrying Princess Cadence. I should be celebrating with my family as I told them about our connections and plans to bring their houses back to the royal status they deserve. Instead we are running damage control because of a failed invasion that really should have been easily prevented in the first place. My sister and I are at odds, my grand mare in missing, my grand stallion and Princess Cadence’s relationship is in limbo. And I have a lot of work ahead of me getting this stupid thing to actually work.” Luna replied in a sarcastic tone while motioning with her front hooves as she grew more and more panicked with each point until she was breathing heavily and focusing on calming down.
“Are you alright, Princess?” Night Shade asked, giving a sad look to her Princess and the one she devoted all of her loyalty to.
“No, I’m not sure I will be either until all of this is settled. And then there is the fact none of it even makes any sense.” Luna sighed, looking forlornly up into the reflective surface of the mirror. “You know I was drugged so I wouldn’t interfere with the invasion right?”
“Yes, I’m one of the only ones who know the whole truth.” Night Shade said, “Are you worried about the security and it happening again?”
“No, well yes, but tell me Night Shade, how does it make sense?” Luna asked, a worried look filling her eyes.
“What do you mean your majesty?” Night Shade asked, tilting her head in confusion.
“Why would an invading force go to such lengths to keep Celestia, Cadence and myself alive? Apparently they had us at their mercy so why spare us? Why go to such great lengths to make sure no pony was seriously physically harmed?” Luna asked, giving the mare several moments to think it over though the confusion in her expression only grew.
“What about tricking Twilight to attack Princess Cadence?” Night Shade asked, pointing at what did seem like an obvious trick on the changeling’s part to try and get Twilight to hurt Cadence.
“I don’t think it was because of what every pony else is saying. Think about it, even in her weakened state Cadence is an alicorn and more than capable of taking care of herself. She would be able to dodge the clumsy attacks of a unicorn who is attacking in a blind rage as Cadence claimed Twilight to be in. Yes the crystals surrounding her nulled her magic, but the moment Twilight shattered the wall her magic returned.” Luna explained, “I have a theory this changeling wanted Twilight to attack Cadence knowing that Cadence would never harm the pony she loved as a sister.”
“Why do that though? It doesn’t make a lot of sense.” Night Shade asked, pacing back and forth now thinking over what she had heard.
“No it doesn’t, I can’t figure out why go to all of the trouble. Was the changeling trying to instill a sense of betrayal? Something more? Something less? I just don’t know and that is what is bothering me so much. Everything is a mess right now and on top of it I’m worried about all of the unknowns.” Luna sighed. Suddenly her ears perked up as she heard a noise shuffling on the other side of the door causing her to make shushing motions with her hoof before moving to open the door to find Celestia pacing back and forth. The white alicorn froze when she realized Luna was standing there looking at her.
“Hello sister, I went to personally bring my journal to your room. You weren’t there so I left it on your bed, but I still wanted to talk to you.” Celestia said as her eyes flicked back and forth nervously, ears drooped as her mane looked as if was barely maintaining it’s ethereal form.
“Hello sister, please let’s step inside to avoid prying ears. Night Shade, if you will please excuse us.” Luna said as she trotted back inside, Night Shade bowing before silently leaving the room. Celestia slowly moved into the chamber closing the door before dropping to a sitting position on the floor.
“How are you doing?” Celestia finally asked, looking up at Luna with a look as if she was fighting back tears. Luna really hated seeing her like this, even after everything.
“I’m doing fine, sister.” Luna said as she sat in front of Celestia, facing her with very little space between them. “I have to say, Starswirl did an excellent job on this mirror.”
“I’m not so sure he made it.” Celestia sighed, old wounds clear in the depths of her eyes.
“If she was here she would know for sure. She would also probably be better at figuring out these unorthodox spell matrices. I believe I can do something, but it won’t be easy.” Luna sighed.
“Please let’s not talk about her, I already lost her and now I’m losing you.” Celestia sobbed out, her body shaking with each powerful sob as Luna gathered her sister into her wings.
“Shhh, you aren’t losing me.” Luna sighed as she nuzzled Celestia. “We are having an argument dear sister. I may be upset with you, even a little disappointed, but I love you. You are my sister, my family, and you will never lose me.”
“I’m so sorry Luna. I try and I try, but no matter how good I am at being a Princess I always fail at everything else. I failed at being a sister. I failed at being a mother. I failed as a teacher. All I seem to do is fail at everything important to me.” Celestia sniffled.
“We all mess up sometimes sister, it is part of being alive. What is important is we learn from our mistakes and move on the best that we can.” Luna said, taking up a kind yet wise tone of voice.
“Since when did you get so smart?” Celestia asked, leaning into her sister’s embrace.
“I can’t always be as childish as I want to be. And after this I think we both will be doing some growing up.” Luna said.
“I hope I don’t do too much more growing, my plot is already going to be huge after all that comfort food.” Celestia sighed earning a bit of a giggle from Luna making them both smile. “Things are going to be okay, right sister?”
“Yeah, they are.” Luna agreed though she couldn’t help feeling a sense of foreboding.
Sunset
Sunset watched Twilight from the corner of her eye as they two rode silently on the bus towards her home after missing another one while listening to Twilight’s story. The darker haired girl was sitting by the window struggling to get the wrapper open on the last burger in the bag of take-out Sunset ordered as they left. They each had a large salad since Sunset was worried about Twilight freaking out over eating meat, and yet when the girl heard someone ordering a cheeseburger as they left Sunset had to hold back the giggle seeing the wide eyed hungry look on Twilight’s face. So Sunset grabbed a couple of them to go on the way out and they just made this bus as it pulled in. She figured why not since Twilight said she already had one since being here and knew what they were when Sunset asked.
It was hard to miss the frustration on Twilight’s face as she struggled to open the wrappers, just as it was seeing her eat the salad with the fork. Her whole fist gripped the fork then, and now she clumsily worked the wrapper. It looked as if she had some experience working her hands, but not enough to be used to things. It would have to be something to work with her with, teaching her dexterity and some of the differences in this world before getting her enrolled at the school if she even bothered with it.
The thing she was dreading was telling Twilight the truth about what help she could give her. Until the portal reopened Sunset wasn’t too sure if there was much she could actually do. She did intend to contact those few she knew who might have other ideas, but she didn’t hold out much hope. She didn’t want to go back to hr world so didn’t care much about the portal, but now with Twilight here there was more of a reason to look into it.
“These are so good.” Twilight moaned as she stuffed the trash back into the paper bag it came in. “I can’t wait to get back to Equestria and try making them myself.”
“What?” Sunset asked as she turned fully to face Twilight with a look of shock. “You said you knew what they were. You do know, don’t you?”
“Of course I do, they’re cheeseburgers.” Twilight said with a huge grim making Sunset want to smack herself in the face. “What? What’s wrong?”
“Later, this is our stop.” Sunset said as she jumped up, grabbed her bags and motioned for Twilight to follow as the large vehicle pulled to a stop. Shrugging Twilight hopped up and followed Sunset out carrying the paper bag full of trash. “Please keep quiet until we get to my office. I don’t want to wake anyone up.”
“Okay.” Twilight agreed, nodding as she followed Sunset closely.
The two made their way down a block and to a large home that didn’t have any lights on showing through the windows. Of course Sunset expected this seeing as it was past Moonie’s bedtime and usually Granny Peach retired to her own room after or stayed up to talk with Sunset depending on the situation. Before the last year the older woman would also wait up for Sunset if she was running late, but after turning over a new leaf and showing even more responsibility that she already did, Granny Peach started trusting her to make it back herself knowing that Sunset sometimes had business to take care if. And with Sunset’s earlier text Granny Peach already knew to expect Sunset to be late.
Opening the door as silently as she could, Sunset let Twilight in and closed the door behind her. Motioning the other girl to follow, Sunset made her way down to her office and put her new purchases next to the desk as Twilight looked around in awe.
“Welcome to my office, feel free to look around, but be careful. I need to go check on something really quick so get comfortable.” Sunset said as she dropped her keys in the desk.
“Thanks, where can I putt his though?” Twilight asked showing the mostly crumpled bag in her hands. With a roll of her eyes Sunset took it with a promise to take care of it. After a quick stop to throw the trash away, Sunset made her way upstairs to first check on Moonie and give the sleeping girl a quick kiss goodnight. After making sure the guest room next to Granny Peach’s was okay and the bed was made and clean Sunset once again descended to the basement to find Twilight looking through her movie collection. Not that Sunset was sure that Twilight knew what a BluRay was.
“These are weird looking books.” Twilight remarked as her eyes traveled from one title to the next, not bothering to pull any out. Sunset couldn’t blame her as the shelves were the perfect size for holding the cases and didn’t allow you to see the tops very well until you removed it from the shelf.
“Those aren’t books, they’re movies. I’ll explain that later though.” Sunset sighed, “I need to talk to you so have a seat.”
“Is everything okay?” Twilight asked taking a seat on the couch in front of the entertainment center.
“It depends on how you look at things.” Sunset sighed joining Twilight on the more than spacious couch. “Look, I wanted to talk to you about something else first. You said every pony really hurt you when they abandoned you. For the moment, I just want you to think about that. Do you really want to go back to a place, to the ponies who would do that to you?”
“I don’t know.” Twilight finally admitted after chewing her bottom lip until Sunset wanted to smack the girl over the head to tell her to quit it. Is this how Gran feels when I do that? “We’ve been through so much, but after the wedding I’m scared that no pony really wants me around.”
“Twilight, while I have my doubts about things, I’m sure that you are wanted. What about your parents?” Sunset asked, trying to remember if Twilight had parents or what. She realized that she actually knew more about the human Twilight that she did about the pony one despite not even meeting the human one.
“I don’t know, we haven’t talked much since I moved to Ponyville. They didn’t even tell me there was going to be a wedding until the last moment, no pony did.” Twilight sighed making Sunset begin to see a pattern. Twilight may be taking things differently than they actually were as she may be feeling put out due to not even being told about such a life altering event. Things may not have been as bad as Twilight was seeing them, still the things that happened were pretty shitty.
“I’m not even going to pretend that I understand what you are going through Twilight. I have a lot of my own demons, a lot caused by that bitch Celestia, but this just sounds like it must have been horrible.” Sunset sighed as she reached over and squeezed Twilight’s shoulder. “I promise I will help you in any way I can. If you truly want to go back I will help you get back. If you want to stay I will give you a place to stay here and teach you what it means to be human and get you set up with an identity.”
“What if I decide to go home?” Twilight asked, though by the tone of her voice and the sad look in her eyes Sunset could tell she was unsure of the idea of returning where she was hurt so much.
“Twilight, the portal naturally opens for three nights every thirty moons.” Sunset sighed as Twilight’s eyes flew wide in shock. “There may be other ways to get it to open sooner though. I have people here that I know who may have ideas. They still know more about this world’s magic than I do, but I’ve learned a lot from them.”
“There’s magic here? I haven’t been able to use any.” Twilight asked, hope shining in her eyes as she wiped them with the back of her hand. It seemed like this Twilight was just as consumed with seeking knowledge as the human Twilight was reportedly.
“Magic works different here. The humans here who can use magic are usually known as witches, though some call themselves shaman or wizards. Humans usually can’t just call upon magic though the ones that are born as a witch can take the magic that they generate or pull from the aether and channel it into medium to get different results.” Sunset explained, “I can do that, and you should be able to, but it works a little different for us.”
“What do you mean?” Twilight asked as Sunset got up and walked over to her desk and opened a drawer on it pulling out a chain with a small red gem attached to it.
“Have you been feeling sore lately, maybe hot?” Sunset asked as she rejoined Twilight on the couch with the small necklace.
“Yeah, I think I’m getting sick from not eating much or something.” Twilight said as she shook her head.
“That isn’t it. We may share many similarities with the witches of this world, but we aren’t connected to it. I’ve found that different species from our world likely react to the changes differently. Unicorns such as us produced large amounts of magic that we constantly discharged through our horns which were our medium there. Here, we don’t need such a medium to cast magic as we can’t do all the things we did in Equestria. Our mediums here consist of runes or potions for example. They can do a lot, but they can’t levitate our tea for us. We have hands for that anyways.” Sunset reached into her top and pulled out a necklace she was wearing showing Twilight. Unlike the one in Sunset’s hand, the one she was wearing had a slight glow to it.
“Why is that one glowing?” Twilight asked.
“Because it is drawing the excess magic out of my body that I don’t use. If left unchecked it can make you sick and maybe even kill you. Of course that is just conjecture, but I was very sick before Granny Peach took me to see a shaman she knew. It was this shaman who figured out what was wrong and since then she crafts these for me. They’re great because they can be charged and used for spells later. They can also be used to create small shields or shock waves for protection if you release the magic stored in them.” Sunset explained helping put the new one around Twilight’s neck.
“That already feels kind of better.” Twilight admitted, heaving a sigh of relief.
“As long as they make contact with skin they will draw out excess amounts of magic and store it. It will have to either be discharged or changed out about once a month, but you don’t need to wear it at all time. At most I would go without it maybe a day or two if needed, but a few hours away from it won’t hurt you.” Sunset explained. “I’ll teach you about magic for as long as you want or as long as you are here. Of course you will have to spend weekend class time with an apprentice I have.”
“This world seems so weird.” Twilight sighed, “Maybe it would be best if I go back. Though the thought of learning does sound kind of exciting.”
“Good, just concentrate on the fun you will have learning for now. I’ll get a hold of the people I know after I get done at school tomorrow and see what they can do to help me with the portal.” Sunset said, relieved that Twilight wasn’t completely breaking down. Then again she cried pretty good when Sunset first found her so maybe Twilight was still just emotionally burned out from that. “Twilight, I do have several rules about staying here with me. There isn’t many people I would allow to do this, but you need help and frankly I have no other ideas on what to do with you.”
“What do you mean?” Twilight asked, playing with the gem on her necklace.
“The most important rule is don’t hurt my daughter and things will be fine.” Sunset said getting a shocked look from Twilight.
“You have a daughter?” Twilight asked a little shocked.
“Yes, and I will do everything and anything to protect her. I’m taking a huge risk on you, but you are from my world and I kind of can’t turn you away.” Sunset said, Besides, if I’m right, it would be wrong to turn you away.
7330273 Thanks, I really didn't want to leave Sunset homeless and wanted her to have someone she could trust and actually come to love as a parental figure. And the MLP universe she created, I kind of thought it would be cute and ironic so happy that it turned out okay.
I will admit that scene has given me the most headaches and I do plan to go back and tweak it more. I just needed some time away from it as I changed it so many times trying to get it right I couldn't take it anymore. Hopefully when I tweak it more it may end up better.
It was more supposed to be all the students filing into the school and Gilda planning to harass Twilight, but Rainbow stopped her. There weren't no fighting or anything though as the security guard was close by. Not that Twilight understood what was going on or was happy to see what she thought was her Rainbow Dash.
Thanks, she's supposed to be really stressed and not at all happy with them. They may play nice later, but Cadence is really not happy with them.
Hopefully things will work out and you will like it. The new chapter doesn't have as much interaction as I had planned because after rereading what I originally had it sounded worse than the Luna scene originally plus way too big of an info dump when some of it will be explained soon again anyways. So I cut it down some and reworked it to sound hopefully better. They will be working out a better plan on dealing with Twilight the next chapter. And sadly Luna is more fearful of what could happen to Twilight's family if her immediate family learns of them than anything.
Hopefully super adorkable lol.
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I really thought I changed that to bags, but will have to try again lol, thanks. Hopefully things will turn out to be how you like them.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Another great installment.
I see nothing exceptionally out of place.
Not sure where Twilight got her first burger, but I hazard it involved either begging or dine n' dashing.
The Elements sequence is awkward, but that's mostly because it clashes with the indifference seen in the previous chapter.
That and Dash is using "egghead" like it's their bedroom name...
Still not sure why they kicked Twilight to the curb to curry Royal Favor, yet now they would rather lash at Royalty rather than appease them.
Seems very fickle and horrifically self centered. Cut off your nose to spite your face level.
Especially now that they have No Twilight and No Favor.
Might be best to get the whole lot of them banished back to Ponyville till they become plot relevant again.
Good chapter! Although the ending was kinda...too soon. That's my opinion at the least. But still, I enjoyed this! Keep up the grand work! I look forward to the next chapter.
P.S. Boy will Twilight be surprised she ate meat! Lol.
Now that you mentioned Twilight's parents we need a scene where Luna confronts them about not informing Twilight about the wedding.
How is any of this going to affect their livelihoods? At worst Rarity lost the sell of a dress, but I don't see anything that could put their livelihoods or their family in danger, unless you are referring to taking time off to look for Twilight but they spent more time away on one of their trips then they have on the search. And speaking of Families, Rarity's parents have jobs and can take care of Sweetie belle without Rarity's financial help, and could be said for the families of the other main 6. Likely more so for the apples, as baring a disaster of some kind I doubt the demand for apples are going to die down anytime soon. Of course this is all based on my canon understanding, and I'm assuming you haven't changed that in your AU.
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I'd say you're right about Applejack not being in a bad position businesswise - it looks to me as if Rarity just brought that up to show her position.
Rarity though... is at least potentially ruined. She's in a line of work where the big money comes not from the local townsponies buying an occasional dress, but from the nobility, where reputation is everything. Being rejected from the biggest social event of the next decade is going to make the nobility and rich social climbing types keep away from Rarity's work because 'nopony who's anypony' would be seen wearing something made by a designer who a princess won't touch.
It's not a question of the quality of Rarity's work, it's a question of her reputation among a bunch of petty snobs who won't publicly do anything a princess disapproves of, and Cadance flushed that reputation down the toilet.
7331393 Thanks, hoping I don't disappoint.
7331466 Thanks, as for Twilight getting her first burger, that was in chapter one when she got a free sample.
I maybe having trouble showing the emotions and stuff when I need to, it's a little hard to. I really didn't mean to make them seem too indifferent, but I'm thinking about how to fix it so it doesn't seem so. Since the previous one was from Cadence's point of view, I'm not sure how to show any defense for them about them being tired or how Cadence more or less surprised them into being more quiet.
If you mean in the show, I really have no idea as I never understood that scene fully. As for the story, I'm hoping that seeing Cadence crying, even if they were fake tears, got them to go check up on her while believing Twilight was the one being mean. Not sure if that is a good excuse, or one I will go with for sure yet, but I really hope that was why in the show because if it wasn't, that is really screwed up. Not that it wasn't a crap thing anyways as some pony should have at least stayed to talk to Twilight about it. I would have thought anyways.
They will be soon, I'm just not sure exactly how long between now and when they are really needed that it will be.
7331475 Thanks, though sorry about it being too soon. Glad you enjoyed though. And she will be very shocked when she discovers just what it is she is eating.
7331480 I've actually thought about that, but not sure how much of a confrontation it would be. Or if she will find out that detail very easily. Shiny would have likely wanted to tell Twilight himself and ask to be his mare of honor so probably begged them not to say anything.
7331577 Well, they are already in the public eye being the Elements of Harmony which they will be learning more about soon enough. The two it would more likely effect the most would be Applejack and Rarity though as since they already are in the public eye, if news gets out that the biggest wedding of the century since it is for a Princess fired it's seamstress and caterer, then they will likely be getting lots of bad publicity which means that sales may or may not go down the drain. The farm would have a better chance of surviving that, though Rarity's career wouldn't. And then if it gets out that they turned their backs on Twilight when she was right and tried to warn them, there would be more bad gossip. Especially when it comes out just who Twilight is related to and that she is a Princess basically even if she doesn't have wings. And since Blueblood can be called a Prince, I'm pretty sure Twilight can claim her title since she has a better claim to it.
As for the families, I'll admit I don't know anything about Rarity's. All I have seen of them is Rarity taking care of Sweetie so I'm not even sure if they have family directly involved with them or not. Applejack's, I know there is Granny Smith and Big Mac, but I thought her parents were dead. And as you said, the demand for apples probably won't die so they would have a better chance of surviving the shit storm created from all of the negative publicity they would possibly receive.
Rarity is concerned about all of this which is why she's the one trying to keep the calmest since she is worried sick about the fallout over this and what it might cost Sweetie because of it while also being worried sick about Twilight. I might be pushing that a bit too much though, I'm not sure.
7331653 Yep, that's pretty much it exactly.
I liked this chapter a lot better than the last one. Some good fluff with good ponies comforting each other after Cadance went bitch-mode on them, and progress with Sunset and Twilight! Though, I have two hunches as to who Twilight's 'classmate' will be...one is 6, and the other is great and powerful.
7332048 Thanks, there will be a little more anger and confrontations to come, but a lot more fluff now that the story is finally done with the chapter 2 rewrite. I'm possibly going to tweak a few things sometime, but I have one more chapter to rewrite, though hoping it won't take 4 chapters to do and I really don't think it will. And I'm sure Twilight will have some of them in her classes.
Conversation between two guards on brake:
Guard 1: Say...
Guard 2: What is it?
1: Do you think Princess Cadenza's been acting a bit weird lately?
2: She has been thru a lot lately.
1: Even so, You'd think the Princess of Love would be mature enough not to be so cold to others, even at the best of times, the rest of the time, she's been outright spiteful to everypony, even the other princesses... Are we sure this is the real Cadenza, and not another changeling in disguise?
2: ...errrrr...
1: Yeah, my feelings exactly...
2: Hey wait! Where are you going?
1: To see if any of the other guards have been getting the same gut feeling.
2: What if you're wrong?
1: Then I've got egg on my face and will probably need to find a new job... But would you want to take the risk by doing nothing if I turn out to be right?
2: ... Point taken. Wait for me.
Just something I thought the guards mite be thinking after the last chapter.
Ow totally forgot about the Parents, sighs this is not going to be pretty, they be devasted and terrified for Twilight.
Also can't wait for Candance to talk to Spike about his crush, sad thing is, it may ever be, he a dragon and he ages slower then Rarity, and Rarity may not relaize just how strong his crush is and may think it just a childhood crush, still doesn;t excuse her from what she done to take advantage of it.
That will be bad gossip as well.
I found it hilarious that I found a story that matched my title.
And I didn't even know this existed
7332432 Would make for an interesting scene.
7332484 I kind of want to give the parents a bit more of a pass, even in the cartoon they could have possibly been asked to keep it a secret until Shining asked Twilight to be mare of honor. Not that they won't be asked about it though it if comes up. I'm not so sure I want to actually write Cadence giving Spike the talk exactly, but might do something at least. She will be talking to Rarity more though before it is over, though not as heated of a discussion though.
7332697 That's two now, maybe I should change it to the title I was originally going to use "Through the Looking Glass." Your like the second person who brought it to my attention that my title is the same as theirs, sorry, it wasn't intentional. Just so hard coming up with an original title or story as it seems everything has been used in one way or another.
7333008 No, no it's fine. (To be fair, your response threw me off when I found my way over to this story ;) )
7333015 Cool, thanks. Would have been happy changing though if you liked, but kind of happy to keep it this way to. I really need to check next time before I publish a story to see if the name is in use. Love your avatar pic, it's awesome!
7333054 Thanks, man.
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7332697
Ehem, inhales
Through the looking glass by X3n0heart
Through the looking glass by Darkryt Orbinautz
Through the looking glass by Queen_Celestia
Through the looking glass by nutcase4real
Through the looking glass by Shiro Otokonoko
Through the looking glass by Shadowwk
Through the looking glass by Electuroo
That's not even including the ones such as
"Princesses Through the Looking Glass"
Or
"Distorted: Through the Looking Glass"
As for "A Whole New World" there's one by (in search order)
Applepip
Knight Light
The Lunar Toaster
Twidashforever
Rosebadwolf
Nick the Brony
DeadBloxxEpicGaming
Muse Scroll
Windlife
The 8-Bit Flame Princess
Prisoner 24601
Writer Fire
Surprisingly the list goes on but I think I've researched enough. My conclusion is yeah like both of you said it's not that big of a deal and it's really hard not to copy someone's title by accident.
7333640 Holy...Wow...Just...wow. That is a ton of stories with both titles.
7333768 Yeah, I don't think I was expecting that either.
I hope Cadence learns from Luna about Rainbow and the others nightmares so she'll lay of them. And I am interested in how Sunset adapted to this world like her being raised by Peach and her interacting with her daughter.
7334214 Maybe just a bit. Actually, I wanted to do that with all the replaced chapters but someone said something about I shouldn't really keep doing that or some people might think I'm padding my story. So sadly no more cut scenes and original chapters which there is only one left anyways. Then on to all new material.
7334220 I know I sure wasn't, I'm still in shock by just how many of them there are.
7334708 Cadence will be nicer to them, though there may still be a few words left to be said. Thanks, I was trying for a somewhat original angle though I'm not sure just how original. Next chapter should have some fluffy bits with Twi and Moonie as well as Sunset and a few people.
something ive bee meaning to ask how old was sunset (as a human) when she got raped
Nice story and exactly what i was looking for. I feel now sunset needs to show he has changed even most wont belive her. Still i felt Sunset and Twilights enconter took to much to happend, im glad the sirens are on good terms with Sunset and even famoust stars, i guess they now got what they always wanted(maybe they were looked down upon by the rest of equestria)
7335882 I'm glad that you are happy about it, I really want to make something with a lot of semi-original plot points in it. Not so sure how I'm doing on that lol. Hope wherever the story goes, and don't worry it won't be a ship fic with them, that it doesn't disappoint.
7336268 She was around the age of 12, so she's like 17/18 now and Moonie just turned 5 before the start of the story.
7337969 Thanks, glad it was what you were in search of. She will be drawn out of her shell more and more now that Twilight is here and her plans and everything will start to unravel. Sorry it seemed a little much to get them to meet, but happy you like the Sirens part. Yeah, thanks to Sunset they have their dream now and more about how that happened will be coming up soon.
7338090 ah thats what i thought just making sure i had my numbers correct
Nice chapter, good work.
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7340270 Sorry, I kinda rewrote it to add more substance in an attempt to get the story to flow better. I'm working on the next two chapters now which will be released at the same time. I had a good part of the next chapter done and after a few comments, one in particular, I decided to make the next chapter an interlude or something that will only be based on the ponies, no humans in it which needs to be before the next chapter so it won't be out of time. After that though the rest will be new material. I kinda forgot I had another chapter to rewrite when I made a comment earlier about new material coming out next, though with all the newness packed in it it will kinda be like it is new.
7340296 I'm glad you like it so far, and I do actually have them edited, just didn't put the edited mark up for some reason, but I will do so now. If there are any changes to those chapters in the future, it will be very minor ones like a comma here or fixed grammar there kind of thing for the most part. There is one or two scenes I have debated making a few other minor changes to show emotions and stuff better, but I just can't figure out how without messing with the point of view of the character who is main-ing the scene. I have edited it though so nothing should really change, nothing story changing anyways.
7340316 Thanks
You know this story brings up a good question that i have thought about since the wedding. Why where the girls and everypony else mean to twilight
7346620 I wasn't really trying to take a potshot at Hasbro really as I never really came up with a name for the other toy company. Just that it was a huge company that valued quantity over quality that was one of the few mistakes Sunset made in her business ventures since I wanted to show she wasn't perfect. In this world Sunset's stories on Amazon came first and the seeming overnight popularity sparked the interest of big publishers and studios and the like. The toys actually came later in this world and really didn't mean to point it to Hasbro if I did.
7347905 I'm really not sure, but it is a question I really would love officially answered. I can see a majority leaving with Cadence to check up on her as it was 'supposedly' her wedding and she was really upset. There should have been at least one or two of them to stay behind with Twilight to check up on her.
7351613 That is my Point. I would have thought that Aj and at least Rd would have stayed with Twilight. But instead they all follow chrysi.... Then again at this point in time it was still Faust doing the writing
great chapter! One question though... how did Moonie come to be? i looked back in the other chapters but can't seem to piece the information together.
Excelente capítulo e historia hasta el momento,es una mina de oro.
Algunos cuantos detalles aqui y allá pero la trama va por el camino correcto, al fin una historia donde los personajes no son estúpidos para afirmar que todo esta bien; mis respetos.
7356732 Really would have been nice if they did. As for Faust, a lot of people will probably yell at me for this, but I really have no idea who wrote what in the episodes since I never really cared much about the details a whole lot. I just try to enjoy the episode if it is good, if I don't like something I get lots of ideas for fanfics to fix what happened. If I really don't like the episode, I might talk about it some. but for the most I just go 'meh' and watch a better one lol.
7359595 Thanks, the nightmare Sunset has at the start of chapter 2 is actually how Moonie came to be. It was as asshole that raped Sunset when she first came to the EG world when she was living on the streets scared of the humans around her.
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Excelente capítulo e historia hasta el momento,es una mina de oro.
Algunos cuantos detalles aqui y allá pero la trama va por el camino correcto, al fin una historia donde los personajes no son estúpidos para afirmar que todo esta bien; mis respetos.
Sorry, I don't really know Spanish so I had to run this through translation software. If it sounds broken or wrong, I'm really sorry.
Thank you very much, I tried to make everything actually have a plausible back story that would really sound legitimate though it is very hard actually writing it. Glad that you are enjoying it though.
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ahh thanks for letting me know... now time to go Dishonored on this guy.. aka do alot of non-sense before getting revenge.
Woohoo!! finally caught up with the latest (edited) chapter and I got to say that I'm enjoying reading this.
7333640 Got a couple that you may have missed:
The Looking Glass by Twidashforver and it's sequel Beyond the Looking Glass.
7401969 They were actually the reason I went to make a list but I left them out when I realized they weren't exactly the same title.
It's odd though cause Twidashforever actually was one of the authors of a story titled "A Whole New World" too
I like this story hope to read more soon
anymore
Sorry for bugging you but do you know when the next chapter will be
Any updates on the next chapter?
when is the next chapter?
OK, just binged through this story and so far... it is good and engaging and I want to see where it goes.
I like what you are doing with Twilight and Sunset being related to Celestia and Luna in different ways and how Twilight's absence is being handled. Seeing Sunset come to Twilight's rescue is nice and it will be interesting to see how Sunset's influence affects where Twilight will want to stay. I also like how you are handling the story of Sunset being raped, as we see her PTSD and how it has affected her life for good and bad; you certainly handle the situation far better than most writers who simply see it as a thing that happens and moves on, thinking it has no importance after the horrific event is done.
Of course, I do have some things to criticize. Starting off with the weakest of them, I don't think Rainbow Dash would be calling Twilight "Egghead" so casually. In the show she usually tends to refer to her as that when Twilight is doing or saying something that Rainbow considers nerdy or the like, not as an everyday use kind of thing. The next thing is that there are so, so many humans that are unlikable. I know there are plenty of jerks in the real world, but there have been far too many who are not sympathetic.
The many people who gave Twilight a hard time just because she didn't understand and was just looking for help really does not paint a good picture for this world and gives us little reason to care about those there. Heck, even some of the Human Mane 6 were unlikable and at the start Vice-Principal Luna was acting in a way she should not have been, even given how Sunset may have acted in the past. Heck, that outburst of hers should cost her her job. I know it was meant to callback to what Princess Luna did, but the difference is that Princess Luna has a different position in society and was much more humorous about it even though she needed to get in quickly to make her position clear about what happened to Twilight. VP Luna fared better at the end of her confrontation with Sunset, but her introduction did not do her any favors given what we had already seen from other humans.
Of course, you have been starting to get better with the human characters not being total jerks, such as with Granny Peach, Pinkie, Patch, and so on. I know not everyone is going to be a saint, there are a lot of jerks out there. And I know some characters act the way they do because of what Sunset did in the past. However, with all of those, there is a difference between complex characters like Sunset here and completely unlikable characters like the human Rainbow. I know Sunset did bad things to them but with how they act I do not feel sorry for them and the humans that were jerks to Twilight had me thinking there were probably not gonna be any. I am glad to have seen some as the story went on.
You can still have insensitive jerks in the story, but don't keep them coming every five minutes. Spread them out and have just as many, if not more, good, sympathetic humans. And I know some of them still don't want to be pleasant with Sunset, but still present them in a way that makes them good humans who just don't like this one girl. Some of the things human Rainbow, Rarity, and Applejack said were completely unlikable.
Still, even given those complaints, I have enjoyed reading this and would like to see what happens next. I hope everything is going well with you.
7371356 Currently he is rotting in jail, pretty much learning what it's like to have what he did done to him.
7377828 Thanks, I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
7401969 Wow, more still, I really think I need to work on my titles more.
7422462 Sorry that it is taking so long, I should have several chapters posted within the next few weeks. I'm just having an extremely difficult time writing the dream sequences in the next chapter. They always come out crappy, so I'm thinking of skipping over them and just mentioning them if I can't get decent ones finished soon.
7529272 Shining Armor told her not to bother coming to the wedding when she crashed the rehearsal, but he didn't reinvite her right away. He was looking for her to talk privately and beg her to forgive him and ask her to be his best mare again when he realized she was missing.
7529278 I'm pretty sure I explained who they were, and thought I made it obvious that Peach adopted Sunset. I'll look over it again when I have the time though and see if some changes can be made.
7557592 Sorry that it is taking so long, but several more chapters should be done soon. I'm almost done with the next one if I can just get past the dream sequences.
7644881 There should be soon as long as I can finish off the dream sequences for the next chapter.
7658931 Hopefully very soon.
7751376 I'm working on it, just trying to get the dream sequences done or decide if better to skip them and just mention them.
7833384 Hopefully very soon.
7970443 Thanks, I hope it doesn't disappoint.
Thanks, I really wanted to do a sisterly bond (though I admit I did debate about pairings very early on, but I really want to do a non romantic, plus Sunset just isn't ready for a relationship). Yeah, I kind of hate when people whine that a character is acting weak or whiny when having trouble with PTSD. It doesn't matter if it is because of rape or serving in a horrible war or witnessing something extremely traumatic. It causes a lot of damage emotionally and psychologically, and bitching that it is going on too long shows how little some people know about it. It is something that the person carries for the rest of their lives, though they may mostly get over it at some point, sadly it will always be there.
Sorry, I meant 'egghead' as a term of endearment from Rainbow and friendly teasing, but Twilight just has bad memories of the term which is why it bothers her. And sorry about the jerks in the human world, I was just trying to show Twilight having bad luck with the first people she met, though I tried to do it somewhat realistically. Like the bus driver, I tried showing him wanting to stick to schedule and being gruff as well as not liking foreigners that much. The librarian I tried showing as someone who is fed up with people asking what she sees as stupid questions, and the two police officers one I tried showing more nice and understanding while the other thought Twilight was just crazy and wanting to grab her and get it over with. The school's security guard...he's just an ass.
When it comes to human Gilda and Rainbow, I was trying to make both somewhat gruff, though Rainbow really doesn't like Gilda. The only reason they aren't getting into it is because of the security guard and the zero tolerance for fighting in place now because of recent events.
VP Luna, well, she has a dark side and at times...can have trouble keeping it under check when being protective. I tried making Princess Luna a bit of a smart ass, but also serious. I do admit I may have went a little overboard with VP Luna and Sunset's altercation. The girls, Sunset caught them at a bad moment, though I may have exaggerated their good and bad points a bit getting the scene worked in. Rarity doesn't really hate anyone, but I tried to show her acting all prim and proper and well, stuck up, but she would really help anyone who needed it. They will show a better side as Sunset, Twilight and the girls get closer.
Sunset knows a lot of weird people, Granny Peach who is sweet and kind. A certain shaman who helps her with problems at times. A certain person masquerading as a certain principal who can be...infuriating with her advances and either carefree or bitchy attitude depending, but has come to care for Sunset as a daughter. The woman's daughter who is sweet and kind with a steel edge when threatening her family and loved ones. And possibly a certain man from another dimension who came there to get away from all the trouble that keeps forcing him to call his darker half to take care of. The last one isn't a guarantee, I'd just like to work him in as he would be perfect for the world I'm creating, but unsure if he would be pushing it for the story.
I don't really plan to show too many more insensitive jerks except for the villains, but hope you enjoy what is coming up. I'm doing...ok I suppose, thank you. I really hope you and all my readers are doing good and I am sorry for how long it has been.
8041952 Pony Twilight went through the portal mirror and is now under Sunset's protection until she can be sent home or decide to make a life there.
8049361 There are two more ponies besides Twilight's family for Lune, a sister for both Celestia and Luna, and a true blooded niece that you already know.
8050056 ok
8050056 Thanks, and I look forward to what is coming next.
8050056 I have one question. Are the princesses, Shining Armor and the Mane six gonna go after her? Will there be a scene where Twilights gets angry and refuses to accept their apologies.
8050088 You're welcome.
8050208 This is going to be filled with heavy spoilers, so only check if you are sure. Just be warned that things may change, especially since I may be getting help with the rest of the story which I will talk more about sometime in the next two days in a blog when we work out some more of how we are going to go about things. As for the spoilers: The first two that will go after Twilight will be Luna and Cadence after they get back from the empire and deal with the trouble one of Luna's grandbabies are causing and saving the other. So story time wise Twilight will be in the human world for at the least 2 to 3 months before Luna will get the chance to do much with the mirror herself. Though rescuing the one may come before the empire for reasons.
Twilight will refuse to go back at first, and when she does it will mainly be because of Luna, Cadence and her family. I don't think she will hold much against Spike, if anything, but she will always have a grudge against the main six and Celestia. She may forgive them, but she will never forget and she will never be Celestia's student again and she will never be close to the others again. Not as close as she once was anyways if she ever does decide to get close to them again. And I'm also debating if she will ever go back to Ponyville at all and resume her position as the bearer of magic or let her cousin take over that while Twilight is groomed to someday take over for Luna if something ever happens or Luna retires. Sunset was originally going to be groomed to take over for Celestia, but now another of true (alicorn) royal blood will take over and it won't be a descendant of either Celestia or Luna.