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"Pale" is a story following the main character, Pale, hence the title. Pale is a mare with more than a few strange things about her. She lacks a cutie mark even though she has reached adulthood already, and she lacks the ability to show emotions. Her mane and coat are both brighter, happier colours, so many are mislead by her appearance. Her parents are both extremely successful scientists; Doctor Engram being her father, and Doctor Cerebellum being her mother. Both her parents are unicorns, and throughout her family tree, her ancestors are all unicorns as well, but Pale, herself, is neither pegasus or unicorn. She is an earth pony, it seems, but with her strange life, she very well could be something else. The plot focuses on Pale's mysterious and rather confusing history catching up to her, including the death of her mother and many other hardships similar. Through many twists, turns, accusations, and misunderstandings, Pale ends up being chased down by the forces of good, including the Mane 6 ponies with The Elements of Harmony ready to strike.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 11 )

Sounds interesting. I may look into this later.

You have a good concept here. I beseech thee, do continue.

This is new. And it's good. Please continue!

The idea is good but the presentation could use a little more work. Branch out you're paragraphs some more and put more detail. Like first it went from a girl with a pale expression to suddenly saying Die and killing a royal guard. It kinda went too fast. But all-in-all good work. :twilightblush::derpytongue2:

Please continue this story, it's really Good! :pinkiehappy:

ohdamn....
it looks good
KEEP UP AND AT IT MY FRIEND!!

I concur with Ninjuto but preferably with even less emotion displayed honestly like she had in the first chapter
The introduction paragraphs in the chapters have me intrigued to hopefully future chapters

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Haha, I wrote the first two chapters at around 5 in the morning with not one bit of sleep. :twilightsheepish: Yes, I apologise for the rather amateur writing styles, and I'll make sure to try a little harder. :twilightsmile:

cant wait for the next chapter when is it? Also shame on you Celestia because Pale has done nothing wrong except defend herself I hope the elements fail :twilightsmile:

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I'll be posting a little more regularly after, well, now. My birthday was just around, and vacation, and summer school... Just tons of stuff. Probably going to be typing up another one or two chapters right after I post this comment. :raritywink:

I like silent types. Let us see where this leads.:moustache:

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