Aria

by SprocketProductions

6 Loss of Trust and Love

I cried on my way from the house I lived in for several years. Had it been a mistake for me to tell my parents? Would they ever accept me? I wiped the tears away from my eyes, smearing my make-up as I cleared my vision of the road. I breathed deeply and thought quietly. If they didn't accept who I was, then to tartarus with them. I wasn't going to change who I was for their liking, that's not right. I did have doubts, though, as I still had many fond memories of them. They raised me with a largely happy foalhood. Now I left them behind after destroying their respect for the mare at heart they called their son for twentry whole years.

I saw a motel with lights on just off the road. It had gotten dark, and I needed a place to sleep for the night. I pulled into the parking lot and retrieved my laptop case from the lockbox in the back, making sure it was locked upon closing it. I went to the front entrance to see a nice looking interior with a stallion with a sweet smile on his face.

"Welcome to the hooves Motel, how may I..." he noticed the smeers on my make-up, unmistakably from tears, "miss, are you alright?"

I sniffled, "Yes, thank you. Just a little... sad, I guess."

"Poor thing... tell you what..." he grabbed a key off of one of the hooks and passed it to me, "I'm not supposed to do this, but nopony else is gonna come this late at night. I'll cover your room for the night. It's up the stairs and the last one on the left."

I nodded gratefully as I took the key, "Thank you, sir..."

Heading up the stairs, I looked at the doors until I stopped at the last one on the left, putting the key in and turning it before opening the door. I stepped inside and lay down on the bed, looking up at the ceiling for a few minutes before pulling out my laptop. The motel had free WiFi, thank goodness. I logged into MagickPhoenix and posted about the events that had transpired. I got numerous comments of sympathy, proving once again, my friends were real ones.

I sighed as I looked at the reassuring comments. I didn't need my parents to feel loved. I had so many loving friends and of course, my favorite pony who I would meet with the next day and we could live together, showing love for each other. I shut down my laptop and went to take a shower. The motel obviously had a water softener, as I was much more comfortable with this gentile touch than with the rough hard water from the dwelling I had been living in. It felt luxurious here, and I savoured it.

When I got out, I looked in the mirror at my face, wiping the fog off and seeing the face of a still feminine stallion. I almost looked like a mare even without makeup. For once, I felt pretty without it. I heard the door of the motel room open through the closed barrier of the separated bathroom. I quickly applied some of my makeup, making my eyelashes once again obvious, as without them, I still looked more like a stallion. I put on a soft white robe that the establishment provided and slowly stepped out of the bathroom to see the stallion who had greeted me puting a soft looking blanket neatly over the sheets already on the bed.

"Sorry if I scared you, miss, but I thought you might want a blanket. I also washed your clothes for you." He gestured toward the neatly folded dress and other garments I had worn that day.

I was mildly creeped out that he washed my clothes, but still appreciated it. I thanked him as he left the room. Taking off the robe and climbing into the bed, I found that it was soft and very comfortable. I longed for my significant other, looking at the empty space next to me. Grabbing a pillow, I imagined it was him and embraced it with all four legs, sleeping silently all night long.

I dreamt that I was in a temple made of marble with tall pillars and a pointed ceiling. Golden chandeliers hung drom it, bathing the area in warm light. There were four alicorns around me. They cast magic and I felt a soothing sensation, feeling my very form change, I was becoming a mare in my dream. The rest of the dream was me stepping out of the temple to meet with my significant other, when I stepped out, we hugged each other tightly, and nothing else mattered. In fact, to us, nothing else existed except for-

I awoke to light pouring into the window as the alarm clock on the nightstand beeped repeatedly and annoyingly. I turned it off as I stepped out of bed and yawned. I went to the bathroom and took my morning constitutional before doing my make-up and brushing my teeth. I packed up my stuff into the laptop case and headed out of the room. When I walked down the stairs, I saw the stallion smiling at me as I gave him my key.

"Need anything else, miss?" He asked.

I replied with a barely awakened voice, "Caffeine... Coke? Coffee? Straight up powder?"

"Right over there miss." He giggled as he pointed at an espresso machine with several small Styrofoam cups set to the side.

I made my way there and drank one cup of espresso, "Thank you."

He nodded at me as I walked outside and got in my truck. I started it and began to drive on the route to my favorite pony's location. We had been planning this for years and I knew he had moved in just a day previously. I watched the road go by as I made progress on the long journey. I knew it would be a while to Manehattan, but it would be extremely pleasant when we were finally together. I looked into the rear view mirror at Canterlot getting smaller and bid farewell for a year.

My phone began to vibrate, it was him. My significant other was calling me. I answered it and heard him tell me good news.

"I'm moved into the house and so very ready to see you, Aria." He told me.

I replied happily, "I'm so glad!"

I put my Bluetooth headset on and plugged my phone in so we could talk for the rest of the way, only taking breaks for fuel and rest stops. Even still, I talked with him. I knew that we would be together for as long as we lived when I got to his house. We were special to each other and nothing would change that. And when Shining's birthday came around again, she would be introduced to him. I couldn't wait for her and Aurora to meet him.

Author's Note:

May the 4th be with you

Also, I don't know what the name for Aria's significant other should be. If I don't think of anything by next chapter, I'll use one of my already made OC's.

Comments

[swiftwriter14]

Mmm interesting o far but damn its really makes me feel sad all of a sudden and also amazing chapter w8 for more

[Applejack224]

Poor Aria

[SprocketProductions]

7186543 thanks, and yeah, sorry. It to happen to move the tory forward though

[SprocketProductions]

7187391 also proof that parents who unknowingly hate what their children are can hardly considered parents at all

[Applejack224]

7189251 True

[Gmtecol]

My body is ready!!!

[SprocketProductions]

7195030 why yes *hug*

[SprocketProductions]

7198950 PREPARE YOUR ANUS

[Gmtecol]

7199591
I'll try anything twice!

[SprocketProductions]

7203090 Okay, probably ought to stop before one or both of us gets banned

[Gmtecol]

7219155 vignette3.wikia.nocookie.net/smashbroslawlorigins/images/6/6d/Plumber_Mario.gif/revision/latest?cb=20140806194952
...okay...

[NicLove]

Also, I don't know what the name for Aria's significant other should be. If I don't think of anything by next chapter, I'll use one of my already made OC's.

What does he do for a living ?
How does he look ?

How to name

[SprocketProductions]

7237069 Yes, he knows

No, he's not also trans

Since when do they have to be human or anthro to operate vehicles?

[SprocketProductions]

7237175 you ask too many questions

[NicLove]

7241819 Can you please show me how they would drive a car

7241821 Sorry but this could help you find a good name

[SprocketProductions]

7242861 philomenamagikz.net/file/pic/photo/2016/05/18106c487e1a27fd05ec40c9c13177b6_500.png

[SprocketProductions]

7311580 Wait, Technic was the pony version of my boyfriend in this story all along?

I was going to write him in as another OC XD

You just saved this story from falling into a plot hole

[SprocketProductions]

7311659 oh, this'll probably be one of those, it's just not even close to finished yet. I'm glad you're liking it. The next chapter is about half done so far. I'm probably going to work on it in a little while.

[SprocketProductions]

7320643 I'm so very glad you're enjoying the story so far. I will be the first to admit that I'm not the best with writing natural feeling conversations yet. It's probably my least favorite part of writing. I try my best though. You'll notice that I try to avoid writing dialogue, typically speaking. But yeah, that instance was more Aria sticking up for herself/comic relief.

As for the lying to her parents part... I wasn't originally sure how people would react to that one. I didn't know whether it would make Aria more or less likeable. It seems to have been largely ignored until now. That's actually inspired off of many points in my life. I have actually been in a position akin to between a rock and a hard place when it comes to that. I've had to lie to or use misdirection on my parents in order to avoid them finding out that I'm trans.

Overall, I've been trying the most to make the story seem relatable to any readers, regardless of their sex or gender. I am attempting to add many commonly occurring events in life as well as some new things more original to the character of Aria. I've used my own life experiences as well as stories from other people I know to shape this whole story. I'm trying to make it feel like the readers are going through the good and bad with the protagonist, and I don't know if I'm doing well or not, but people certainly seem to be enjoying it so far. The Looming Noose is one of the better chapters in this story so far, by the way. I'm very happy with how that one turned out.

[boardgamebrony]

For Chapter 6

The start of this chapter and the end of the previous one really threw me off quite a bit. The other one ended so happily and this one started so gloomily that I wasn't sure what happened in the in-between times, though she mentions it at the beginning. I was still thrown off. I had to re-read it to see she was going to tell her parents about her being trans, but the transition between chapters is a bit rough.

Now I left them behind after destroying their respect for the mare at heart they called their son for twentry whole years.

Change to "twenty" :)

"Poor thing... tell you what..." he grabbed a key off of one of the hooks and passed it to me, "I'm not supposed to do this, but nopony else is gonna come this late at night. I'll cover your room for the night. It's up the stairs and the last one on the left."

Be careful how often you do this. It's becoming more prevalent storywise that Aria is getting things too easily and it does throw the immersion off a little. It's okay for Aria to spend money on the room. I can tell you though it's a sweet gesture, hotel managers are EXTREMELY unlikely to give out free rooms, unless they want something in return. That could've been implied by some of his actions later...

I heard the door of the motel room open through the closed barrier of the separated bathroom.

"Sorry if I scared you, miss, but I thought you might want a blanket. I also washed your clothes for you." He gestured toward the neatly folded dress and other garments I had worn that day.

This part threw me off a bit, because in my experience, housekeeping (even a manager) ALWAYS knock on a room to make sure if someone is in there. And he definitely knew Aria was in there. So this sequence felt reallyyyyy strange. Also...when did he get her clothes to wash them? That part I wasn't sure of.

Grabbing a pillow, I imagined it was him and embraced it with all four legs, sleeping silently all night long

Aww I do this too <3

I dreamt that I was in a temple made of marble with tall pillars and a pointed ceiling. Golden chandeliers hung drom it, bathing the area in warm light. There were four alicorns around me. They cast magic and I felt a soothing sensation, feeling my very form change, I was becoming a mare in my dream. The rest of the dream was me stepping out of the temple to meet with my significant other, when I stepped out, we hugged each other tightly, and nothing else mattered. In fact, to us, nothing else existed except for-

This is a beautiful dream. :) It also clearly shows how badly Aria wants to be more feminine and be with the pony she loves.

"Need anything else, miss?" He asked.

I replied with a barely awakened voice, "Caffeine... Coke? Coffee? Straight up powder?"

I like Aria's delivery of that line. Something about the attitude and brevity of the words just works well :)

Good job so far! I got two more chapters to check out today...