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Twilight Sparkle is only a few millimeters tall.

A hundred of her could fit onto a single hoof with plenty of room to spare. A single crumb can feed her for a day. Insects are chitinous nightmares. Her family is a race of unreachable giants.

Somehow, she has to survive in a world a thousand times too big for her, in an environment more hostile
than anything she could possibly imagine: her parents' kitchen.

Special thanks to CakeFlank and Ironwill Warhorse for proofreading and editing!

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Comments ( 19 )

So, I take it this is based off of Celestia's Tiny Student?

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No. It's based on Richard Matheson's The Incredible Shrinking Man.

Sad, but good.

Interessting idea.
I saw some mini-Twilight-stories before, but never she was that mini.

Is this only a One-Shot or will there be some sort of continuation?

yay:yay: you posted it.... :moustache: perfect

I really really liked this. Like, wow, this is Dust but taken to a whole new level (maybe even smaller). I cant wait to see if you got any other plans with it.
Peace!

Oh my god! One of the best stories I have ever heard! Please tell me, will you continue this? Maybe a prequel or continuation? :-) You got my mind working and I might do something similiar with a human colony :D

So twilight is about as large as an eraser in a pencil?

An enjoyable read, although I usually prefer my tinies to be around a few inches tall. Still, good job.

I hope Cadance will visit the kitchen soon :-D

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Because she is married to Shining Armor and she has some free time in Canterlot to spend? She can visit her step family and be sad about Twilight. And if you don't want to continue it, you can kill Twiligt off by some insignificant thing, like washed out of Cadance's mane when she showers or somethink... :-D

Comment posted by McProky deleted Jan 21st, 2017
Comment posted by McProky deleted Jan 21st, 2017

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What do you think? :D

Geezy petes, guess I better watch my step just in case any dirt sized humans be walking about. XD Very well done. Super enjoyable. ^^

I came across this looking for 'shrink' stories about a week ago or so, and while it's not really my thing, I get that it's purpose was basically to spark that unsettling feeling in the reader. It certainly does it's job well, but... well there is something that's been bothering me about it.

From what I can gather, Twilight is slightly larger then an ant. Being it describes them as 'wolf size' Which to me means she's probably the size of a lady bug or bigger.

So... why doesn't she contact her family to let them know she accidently shrunk herself? (I'm a bit unclear on that too, but I'm guessing she tried a teleport spell which had the side effect of "condensing" her mass into her new tiny form.)

I get she can't just walk up to them and talk to them, but the simply fact is she's NOT a bug. She's a pony the size of a bug, and while her magic is limited in her tiny form, it's implied she can still do some spells. Simple ones don't seem to be out of the question. So why not set off fireworks or something when one of them is in the kitchen? Better yet, why not spell out "Help I accidently shrunk myself!" with soap flakes or something? The fireworks could just be to get their attention. Yes I realize they'd barely be golf ball size, but they'd still pop and I for one would find golf ball sized fireworks popping off in my kitchen to be rather odd.

I'd find the thing making them to be a small purple dot to be even odder, and from there I don't think it'd be a stretch for one of her family members to peer down and go "Holy crap it's Twilight!" At the very least she'd be taken care off with the Princess looking to fix her.

This also makes me wonder when this takes place in the Timeline. Because if it's AFTER the Nightmare Moon incidence, then Princess Luna, the 'Dream walker' should be able to sense Twilight's Nightmares, and rush to her aid. It doesn't make sense that just because her body is that tiny, that her dreams somehow don't show up in the dream realm anymore. I'd imagine they'd still be able to be sensed by the Princess of night.

At any rate, it just seems rather unlikely that Twilight wouldn't attempt contact, and thus should be discovered LONG before she has the chance to start going crazy.

8058255 Maybe the author will make a second chapter where this is addressed? Try to contact him and ask :)

Wen sequel

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