The Dragon Lord's Consort Chapter 2
A proposal from a Lord
Spike was slowly becoming aware of his surroundings as his vision slowly started to return. He heard voices, more or less, angry or concerned voices. Twilight? Ember?
“...can't take him he's only a ba...”
“...ish there was another way but… if I don't...”
“… if he says no...?”
“…. he is awakening.”
Slowly Spike sat up from the ground, rubbing his head.
“Ugh… wha? What happened?”
Twilight quickly came to his side.
“Easy… you just passed out.”
He shook his head before looking at Twilight then to Ember, whom looked worried and conflicted at the same time.
“Ember?”
She sighed.
“I am sorry for bringing this on short notice to you Spike. But my choices were limited. Garble would have to have been the following choice if you do not accept.” she shuddered at the thought.
Spike looked around for him, seeing no sign of said dragon or the other one as well. Slowly standing up, he also saw that the others had left as well, leaving him, Ember and Twilight.
With a somewhat shaky tone, he spoke to Ember.
“Why me though?”
“I told you, you were the first to grab the Bloodstone before...”
“No I mean, why me? Why not another dragon? Surely the are hundreds if not thousands of other dragons to choose from. I am just… me.” he stated like if he was nothing special. “I am a pony loving dragon. You said it yourself, I am different from other dragons, I am not strong, I can't fly, dragons aren't suppose to share and… well yeah.”
Ember, grew up with all those lessons burned into her mind since she first hatched from the egg. She knew that dragons are greedy, power hungry and above all… mean. However, the first time since she met Spike, a dragon born outside of Dragonlands, she has found herself drawn to him. He was a dragon born and raised by ponies. Ponies whom loved one another, cared, shared and even sacrificed themselves for each other.
With a rare smile she has been rarely seen given, she spoke with utmost confidence.
“It is those qualities the reason I choose you Spike. Your right, you are different and maybe that is what our kind needs. Change. You changed me in a day to be caring, thoughtful and even merciful. Had I not thought about what you did for me, I probably would never even consider Garble to serve me as punishment, let alone live. To other dragons, ponies might be considered, weak, helpless and not strong enough to handle anything.”
She motioned to Twilight. “I believe they are your greatest strengths, your greatest power and your generous heart. It knows no bounds and that is why I still choose you. No qualities could be found in any other dragon.” She paused and looked him straight into his eyes, baring into his soul.
“Spike I chose you because I… have found a liking to your prestigious upbringing. I’d rather have you then any other dragon, because there are no other dragons that I have become more fond of than you.” She paused again, her cheeks twinging red as she realized what she said.
Spike also grew red and looked away sheepishly.
“I-I like you too… Ember. I know we just met but… I actually liked you. I thought you were stunning and beautiful and...” he paused, realizing he also said to much but when he peeked back at Ember, she was red faced and beyond embarrassed. “...and cute.”
She tried to make a pouty face, but it came out more cuter than before.
“Not cute.” she mumbled.
Twilight was watching the whole display with glee, while at the same time- was writing more notes about dragon culture. Currently she was taking close observation on dragon courtship rituals.
Despite the ferociousness of dragons that many have come to believe, dragons in their rare moments show affection for one another, if emotions are shared simultaneously from both partners…
Partners? Was that the right word? Speaking of…
“Hey guys, I know that we have a moment here, but you think we can get back to topic at hoof… err claw?”
Both dragons snapped out of their embarrassment before focusing on Twilight.
“Yes of course. Now then… I am aware that it is sudden but I will give you time, though I require an answer as soon as possible.”
“Uh… how soon?”
Ember scratched her arms and looked away.
“By high noon tomorrow, I must return to the Dragonlands, with or without you, sealing my fate.”
“What?!” Twilight cried out. “Tomorrow afternoon?! Ember- that is not enough time! Besides, why do you need to have a dragon by your side if you already rule all of the dragons? It’s not like you need an heir, or to be betrothed. The Bloodstone is only handed down after you ruled for years and need to allow other dragons a chance to rule.”
Ember nodded.
“I am aware of that Twilight.... However, part of the rules for the Bloodstone state that I must be seen as the most powerful dragon in the lands. By my side, I need to have a dragon that is worthy enough to be my mate. They must be seen as just as great as me. Hence, should I choose to have a mate, they must be able to participate in the challenge to acquire the Bloodstone. If I didn't choose, then it would be a dragon who comes second close because of the difficulty of the trials. Just as you saw, not all the dragons made it through the first few, and even fewer got to the end.”
“It still doesn’t make sense to me either. But I also believe that is why my father didn't want me to go. All the other dragons were of age to start courting or mating. Seeing as Spike and I are the youngest ones that did the challenge, we can't be courted until we reach age. Yet, the rules are firm about it, though father has been known to bend some of the rules.”
“So… because I survived the Gauntlet, got the scepter- but then gave it to you in the end... I have to be your mate?” asked Spike, both fearful and somewhat curious about it. “... And- Since we are both ‘too young,’ we technically wouldn’t be... uhhh.... Well, ‘Mates’ until we were both of age?” He asked, not too sure about the Draconic Terms full meanings,
Ember gave a small nod.
“In part though Spike, it's because of your intelligence that got me the Scepter- and your bravery that I also decided to choose you.”
Twilight was writing more notes before a thought came up.
“Uh Ember, quick question? What if you had won by yourself; but neither Garble nor Spike were second and you choose no other dragon again, what if the second dragon to come in was a female dragon?
Spike suddenly became very, very interested as well. Even his eyes and tail went up, hoping to hear a good answer.
“If that were the case,” Ember answered a bit hesitantly. “Then she and I would be consorts instead. She would be my life mate.”
If dragons could have nose bleeds, Spike would be bleeding out a river by now.
“Awesome.” he said softly.
Twilight was busy writing more notes, not noticing Spike's reaction.
“Should I choose to bare hatchlings, I would need to find a male worth trying to mate with, but would still be bounded to my mate. We might both even try to become egg-barren but ultimately it would be my choice to participate in such an event.”
Despite Spike's young age, he knew enough about pony related things to understand what she had just said, and what could be described as every colt/dragon's dream.
Two females going at each other... or the Glory of Glories… a full on ‘threesome.’ .... Less not forget- Spike may be young… but he was not innocent.
At this point, Spike's Indignity began to show as he stared at Ember nonstop, his imagination running wild. Ember saw his gaze and looked somewhat flustered.
“Uh Spike? ... Are you okay?”
Spike quickly shook his head before nodding.
“Yeah, sorry just dozed off there for a bit....”
“I see...” Her gaze went to the writing Twilight. “Twilight?”
Twilight stopped her writing and looked to her.
“Yes?”
“Is it agreeable then? Until mid-day tomorrow, I shall have my answer?”
“Uh…” she paused before clearing her throat. “I know that this is difficult for you Ember, but Spike... can't go. He is way too young- a baby at that.... I am sorry.”
Ember looked dejected but Spike quickly spoke out.
“Wait, why can't I go? Why don't I get a say in it?” he asked, sounding a bit angered.
Twilight looked at him, almost in surprise.
“Spike, it’s one thing that went with you last time- at least any of us can protect you and watch you.... But you, going to the Dragon Lands? ... We won't be able to guide you, or take care of you if you stay permanently.”
“Under my rule, he will be protected.” Ember assured. “Despite what you may think you have recently seen of dragons during the Gauntlet, there is a lot more that you do not know.... Besides, no dragon shall dare harm Spike, or come close to me without my say. He will also be raise to act like a true dragon.”
“But he is a baby dragon! You can't court with him! He is not even of pony age!”
Something stirred inside of Spike, an inner anger not akin to greed, at the mention of being called 'baby', seemed to aggravate him.
“And again Twilight, I am aware. However, the rules state I have to be seen with a mate of worth and while he is adolescence, when he becomes of age we can be courted. For now, it would be considered a per-engagement or arranged courtship if you will. Even my father knows that I too am young to be courted but I must wait and if Spike chooses...”
“What if I said yes?” he finally spoke out, his voice sounding a bit mature. “What if I choose to be your… mate? Like you said, we are both young and we can't really… do much but if it means protecting you and maybe Equestria from another dragon's rule or even you from another nasty dragon, then I am willing to do it.”
“Spike!” Twilight spoke in shock. “What… How… you can't go!”
“Why?” he asked, almost in anger, his arms crossed. “So I will continue to be a baby dragon? Like I’m some fragile little foal- That nopony else takes me seriously? That even after I have tried so hard to impress the one I care for and she treats me like a kid?!”
Twilight stared at him, wide eyed and shocked at his response.
Ember didn't need to spend a whole lot of time with ponies to understand the tension in the room. She knew that this was a difficult situation, for both of them so she turned to door, before informing them. “I'll just... leave you two to discuss this...” She said, before she quickly excused herself, and exited the room and closed it behind her- feeling guilty for having divided them so.
Spike was beyond angry now, years of him being called a 'kid' or 'baby'. Yes, there were times when he would allow it but now, now that he had just completed a challenge that would frighten most dragons or even accomplish what many other dragons couldn't do, he felt like he had really matured.
Still, he was coming off too strong and sighed as he looked over to see Ember walking out of the room just before the door shut behind her. Closing his eyes slowly, Spike took in a deep breath like Cadence had taught him to once, before looking back to Twilight.
“I’m... Sorry Twilight... for acting that way- but after that… I just didn't want to be treated like a baby anymore. I mean… I completed a challenge that would get a normal pony hurt- or worse! I know it was because of you, Rarity, and Ember, that we managed to make it to the end but… it was still huge thing for me! And I felt like after that... I shouldn't be treated like a foal or a baby anymore...”
Twilight's gaze quickly softened as he spoke. More and more, she realized what he was saying was true... and the more she thought about it, the more she knew he was right.
Spike was at times childish, but he was really more intelligent than anything else. He was smarter than most any foal around- perhaps even more so than a lot of adult ponies she knew personally. She had raised him to be on par with her own intellect, and he had proven time and time again that he could take care of himself. Whether it was trying to save the Crystal Empire from a Dark Tyrant, or going through a dangerous challenge like the Gauntlet of Fire for a magic scepter.
Not only has he proven himself brave but he has proven that he does have a big heart. He had given Rarity his most prized position of the Fire-Ruby. He has worked non-stop for Applejack due to his Dragon-code (even though he made up the ‘Dragon-code’.) He endured adventures with Twilight that would leave her and her friends exhausted or wounded, yet he would continue on- her Number One Assistant.
How many times had she relied on him on the most prestigious task? How many times has he braved the unknown with her, despite knowing the dangers that comes? The amount of near and unspeakable deaths that they have come close to?
With a reluctant sigh, she nodded.
“You’re right, you’re right. I have been treating you like a baby, but I guess that’s because I still see you as one Spike.... I helped raise you since you hatched. I mean, you are young, but you have grown smarter than anyone else your and age, and have grown to be more mature than most adults. If you leave us, and go to the Dragonlands to take on a challenge that would leave other dragons wounded, or worse then....” She shook her head before looking down a her own hooves. “I guess I just never saw past it, everytime you did something foalish.... But, I know I should be looking at you as more than a foal... less like- ... a baby... and more like a friend...”
Spike smiled though as he looked up at her.
“That is all I want from you.... From everypony....”
She smiled back at him slowly, and put a hoof on his shoulder.
“I know. I can't tell the others how they should treat you, that is for you to tell them, especially Rarity.... I know you keep trying with her… but now that Ember is here, will you stop trying with Rarity and try with her?”
Spike thought about it for a bit.
“I guess… Rarity will always see me as a baby dragon. Nothing more. I’ve been so infatuated with her that I never thought of thinking what would happen when she decided to have a stallion over me in the future. Now that I know that there is another dragon out there that can be kind or as sensitive.… Well, maybe not as sensitive, but that they can be just a bit sensitive or just as caring as me, then...” He paused, smiling at the thought. “I'd never imagine I would meet someone like Ember. Even if this is something I want to do… I don't know, but I guess I should just stop trying to fawn over Rarity because I know she will never choose me....”
Twilight half expected him to break down and cry as he said that outloud, but to her relief he didn't. Rather he took in a deep breath, resting his claw on his chest, before releasing it slowly.
“... Wow Spike.” She said softly, a bit astonished. “That... was a pretty mature thing you just did.”
He gave an almost ‘sad’ smile back at her, putting on a brave mask for her.
“Thanks Twilight.”
She brought him close for a hug before releasing him.
“For what it's worth Spike? I know that you doing this might change things for all of us, but whatever your decision is, I will support it.” He was about to tell her what his decision was, but she quickly stopped him. “I don't want to know just yet, though I think I know what it already is. I’d rather wait until all of us are here, together, when you tell us.... All of us.”
He gave a nod before quickly giving her another hug.
“Now come on, let's go check on our guests.”
In one of the nearby rooms….
Garble was sitting in the corner, trying to make sense of the literature that was in these picture books. Though, his ‘book’ was actually a magazine and showed various pony models.
Meanwhile, the other dragon, Amethyst was casually chewing on the gems left for her. She was watching Garble irritate himself as he tried to read… or study it.
“Are you really trying to read pony books?” she asked, chomping on another gem.
“Shut up.” he said to her, though he answered. “Just trying to see what makes them so interesting. I mean, look at this pony! She is practically a twig! I could use her to pick my teeth!” he pointed at a very tall, and thin cream coated mare with light pink hair, and a tail that covered over her flanks. She was in a strange pose- while holding up some kind of ‘make-up’ in the picture. He then growled. “This is why I hate ponies!”
“Oh?~ Jealous much? Angry because you haven't be able to score a mate yet?” She teased. Garble growled but stopped when the doors opened and revealed Ember walking in, who looked very dejected.
“How did it go, Lord Ember?” asked Amethyst.
She gave a hard sigh.
“Spike seems to want to go but Twilight is holding him back.”
Garble snorted. “Typical weak pony, holding a dragon back. Then again he is a weak dragon.”
Ember growled.
“Weak he may be, but he has a lot more heart, and courage than you Garble!”
He gave another snort before returning to his magazine.
“So… Twilight is holding Spike back.... But will he still choose you?”
She gave a small nod.
“He and I… uh both agree that it is in the best interest of Equestria, and the dragon lands... If I keep him as a consort, then maybe when he is grows up, he can help teach us and all of the dragons across the Kingdom on how to be better to each other.”
“Are you kidding me?!” Half roared Garble. “You want to try and change the Dragonlands to be like the namby-pamby ponies and go soft and weak!?”
Ember growled.
“No. I want to change the Dragonlands to be more civilized and caring for one another. I want there to be peace between each other, not constant bickering or fighting for stupid reasons- like who has the bigger hoard!” At this point, Amethyst stopped chewing and watched the heated debate.
“But that’s what makes dragons strong!” Garble countered. “We are born to be ferocious, strong and deadly! Trying to change that means that you can't handle being a dragon yourself! And that you aren't worthy of wielding that scepter! You are weak at heart, and you’re still that little princess just sitting there by daddy's side.”
The room got a lot hotter in that instant and it took all of Ember's strength not to lunge at Garble and attack him directly. Garble wasn't fazed by it. With a steamy snort and a spit of flame, she growled and walked towards him.
“You will learn to keep you mouth shut Garble!” she spat with hideous venom in her voice. He wasn't intimidated a bit by her, being a smaller stature, however, that didn't stop her from being threatening, even as she pushed her snout close to his. “When we get back, expect to be punished… severely. And trust me, I don't need Spike to think of humiliating ways to punish you as well! Now.... Back down!” she half roared to his face.
They both stared at each other, trying to out glare each other but… because she was Lord, he had to obey. Without another word, he took a few steps back and lowered his head. He then turned away and sat back down away from the two.
Ember gave a snort. She then turned towards the door, just as it opened. She saw that both Spike and Twilight seemed to have made up and slowly approached. She sighed, before clearing her throat as she calmed herself down- feeling a need to explain herself.
“I’m sorry I left earlier, but I didn't want to cause any more tension...”
“No need, Ember.” Twilight said. “I think Spike and I both knew that that conversation was... a long time coming...”
Ember gave a nod.
“I’m glad you worked it out then.... So... have you given an answer?” she asked a bit hopefully, it showing just ever so slightly.
“We have.” answered Spike. “But… I think I will give you the answer tomorrow. At least until all my friends are here so that they can hear it.”
Unsure why it was, she just gave a nod.
'If he is going to answer me tomorrow, then I know what it is. He just needs to inform his friends and family.' She thought to herself.
He gave a smile before turning to the other two. Garble was angrily muttering to himself while the other dragon (he still hadn't caught the name earlier) seemed to be content with munching on her gems like popcorn.
“I know it's only noon, but you all might want to stay over night. I have a few bedrooms to spare...”
Spike snorted with a grin. “A few? More like few hundred.”
Twilight giggled and gave a knowing smile at her #1 assistant.
“But I’m not entirely sure how dragons uh… well- ‘sleep’ compared to ponies.... Maybe a little bit more info?” she sheepishly asked, suddenly the Book of Dragons appearing before her.
Ember gave her a look, somewhat enjoying the look of eagerness on Twilight before nodding.
“Of course, now that I am here, I can gladly speak of more of our kin.”
“Yes!” Twilight squealed, as she bounced in place, while Ember and Amethyst gave her odd looks before turning to Spike.
He gave a shrug, completely use to the site by this point in his life.
“She loves to learn new things. Whether it's magic, history, or learning about another species.... Hell, I think she would get giddy if Queen Chrysalis herself walked in here and asked for an interview with her.”
Somewhere in the Badlands, Queen Chrysalis herself felt her nose twitched and she sneezed.
Ember then turned to her guards.
“Amethyst, Garble, I want you to stay here while Twilight and I exchange pleasantries.” she then turned and spoke to the back of Garble's head. “I want no problems, is that understood?”
Amethyst nodded while Garbled grumbled.
Spike saw that they both (mostly Amethyst) had finished the small pile of gems for snacks.
“Well, while you guys do that, maybe I can whip us all something to eat for lunch.”
Ember gave him a bemused look.
“You can cook?”
“Oh, Spike is almost the best cook in town! ... Well- except for Pinkie Pie, one of our other friends- but he still makes the best meals around! He cooked for Princess Celestia herself when we still lived in Canterlot- and he can make just about anything.” Spike took the compliment with stride as he took a small bow, while Ember looked a bit impressed.
“Not only are you intelligent, courageous, and kind- but you also know how to make a good meal for those you care for? Hmm.... Now that is a dragon worth his weight in gold. A true drake~” She said, complimenting him where it was due.
Garble snorted.
“If you wanted a true drake, all you have to do is look in this direction. I am all that is dragon if not more. I can easily hunt food better than he can prepare.” he spoke, trying to make himself sound and look tough by standing up and flexing his wings.
Everyone gave him a look, even Ember and Amethyst. Tired of his attitude, Ember decide to play it off then.
“Yeah, some drake you are. If Spike says no tomorrow and I still had to choose between you, since you were the second dragon to come in and another dragon to be my mate, I would do so.” she then gave a grin and walked over to Amethyst. “In fact, I would honestly choose Amethyst to be my consort than you. At least she knows how to treat a dragoness- if I were to lay her, which way more likely than me choosing you. I have no doubt she would do the same.” Amethyst gave her a look before seeming to weigh the options and agreed.
The room fell silent as a stunned Garble looked to the dragoness then to Amethyst while Spike was on the verge of having a serious meltdown at what he had just heard. There was no way things could get any hotter...
“I would do so too…” answered Amethyst. However, just to annoy Garble more, she leaned and gave Ember brush of her snout and what looked like to be a draconic kiss as she gave a small lick to the side.
Several things happened at once. Ember didn't react to it, rather her grin grew, Garble's mouth dropped to the floor, Twilight was staring wide-eyed at the display and Spike passed out on the floor again.
Now I'm really looking forward to the later chapters. I'm loving how this is turning out.
I would offer Garble some ointment, but he's a dragon. I doubt he has problems with burns.
Ha, suck it Garble! Oh and can you please not kill Spike with so many saucy thoughts?
That didn't take long.
I liked the ideas and conversations in the first chapter but the second one completely lost me, sorry.
Not only is the part of Ember and Spike gushing over another complete blunt-force trauma to the forehead, the idea of Spike basically tying up all the lose ends (which is his entire life, his home, family, friends, hobbies and everything that ever mattered to him) within one conversation is just so rushed. This stuff should take time and effort. With the addition of Spike's little fantasy, it feels less like him deciding on where to take his life and more like Spike having some serious sexual repression and jumping at the first tail that might get lifted for him.
Which is quite ironic, seeing how eagerly he defended his maturity.
Not sure if I want Spike to say yes... Amber x Amethyst sounds waaay better...
7141285 covering that the next chapter don't worry, I also thought of how and why he did say yes.
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Haha!
I can't stop! It's too much!
I feel like there should be more emotion to Twilight & Spike. Because Spike has been like a Brother/Son to her since she was little, what it needs is them be in tears
"THERE IS NOTHING MORE BADASS THAN TREATING A WOMAN WITH RESPECT" -Mr. Torgue
wow this story blew up fast... in a good way
If we are honest here Garble has a point. Dragons as a species are still alive and they dont seem to be struggling with anything considering the numbers we have seen in the show with the dragon migration and the last episode. Do they really need to change? If you told me they were a species with issues like the krogan of mass effect I would understand but they seem to be doing rather well.
7141367 I meant as a way to change along with the world. I mean, they are intelligent right? So maybe make them more intellectual or make is so they are not greedy or dangerous as their ancestors. You know?
Kinda like Luna. She was on the moon for a thousand years and now she has to catch up. The moon wasn't her fault but she is trying to change. The dragons choose not to change so i figured, why not work that>
Still quite interested where this will go; especially now that it's been established that both will have to wait until they're more mature to court. I can see some potential with Spike learning more about his species and culture, and such arcs are quite an enjoyable process for character growth - but only if they are done properly.
That being said, I do have a few pieces of constructive criticism.
Grammar, punctuation, and overall errors are definitely much, much better. I'm glad you found some help, though sometimes it's good to find additional editing help beyond just say one person. For instance I'm in the process of a story myself, and have the help of a pre-reader that is helping as a second opinion for pacing and characterizations, and two who will help with the editing process. While I wouldn't go overboard on the number of people that help you and just have a few, the more editing assistance you have, the cleaner and more polished your story will be. Whether you're a high school drop out or became an English Professor, no one is by any means perfect. Then again, that's the beauty of rough drafts and having perspective from more than one person.
That being said I still noted some errors, but it's definitely an improvement.
Pacing is an important part of the process with writing a story, and I would advise as a fellow writer to make sure your story's pace is neither too slow or too fast. Shipping stories are also fun to write, but keep in mind that you need to get a relationship properly developed. They both only just met and got to be friends, so build on that.
I understand that this story is more than likely heading in a mature direction and there will likely be sexual acts or themes, but don't rush it; not unless you want the story to be pure clop. Even then, I think developed clop is better than it not being so.
Pace the relationship and you should be fine.
Also, there's something unsettling about Spike saying "Hell". Description is one thing, but whether FIM was a kid's show (which it is) or not, I can't see him saying that... or being as perverse as you made him out to be in the chapter. I get that he's a male and of course that potential will be there, but I felt you were laying it a skosh thick.
Just my two cents, though. Take it as you will.
and then spike was all like
Knowing Twilight she'll inform the Princesses, her brother, her parents, Cadence, etc. about this strange development.
I'm looking forward to more amazing chapters you have in store.
This was good. Thanks for the update.
I'm with Spike, I would fall on the floor too.
Wow, I'm liking Ember more and more. She has got a lot of sass and backbone. And she is open-minded too, Spike really won lottery with her.
I really want to see the next chapters, then humor is great and I liked the characterization.
Yes, the odd grammar/spelling problem but it a small number.
Overall, looking forward to the rest.
I mean, this story needs some kind of editor, but it isnt an unreadable mess, and it's pretty funny and interesting. So I'll stick with it.
Damn Spike, you lucky bastard
Heh heh! That's our boy, go get 'em!
Wait, what of the others? Will they try to stop this, or go along with this reluctantly?
...Eh. It's only been two chapters in I feel like we're gonna start to feel the f*ckstorm of cliches that this story promises. I foresee more lesbian awkwardness humor, the constant threesome lingering undertone with the Amethyst character already, some SUPER tedious foreshadowing of said threesome (seriously? the girl-on-girl kiss in front of obvious future lover? not too sly) and then of course, the grammar.
Granted, I've never expected anything to truly catch my interest; however, the tension with Garble and Ember in that room together would a great lead into a bigger story line about what the dragon way of life should be and may perhaps become a great piece for a larger plot thread. That being said, I'm not against the whole romance plot (hell that's why I clicked in the first place). In fact, I believe there's potential for the characters to grow into something more. My BIGGEST disagreement has got to be with that little tidbit about the two saying they liked each other that way anyway. What episode were you watching? I saw no signs of compatibility between these two. Though, I can definitely see the possibility (again, i clicked on this). I just hope it gets a chance to develop and display their fondness grow rather than be just a cut-&-dry love since the beginning thing.
I hope I pointed something out.
Happy that you decided to continue this and not make it a one-shot story. Definitely one to keep track of.
FUS RO DAH!
I'm kind of looking forward to hearing about dragon background. Also, I wonder, will there be any word on whether or not Spike actually grows wings?
MOAR!!!
Years in the future:
Ember:Honey I'm home?
Spike: It's so good to see you * A buff Spike coming out of a dragon kitchen wereing nothing but apron* You look tired would you like to eat first or a lava bath?
Ember: I'd rather have you. * jumps Spike*
7142024 Ill keep it in mind!
HE PASSED THE FUG OUT
Once again, a nice chapter. And goddammit, Spike you lucky bastard.
But... yeah. You need an editor. The most obvious error for me was: "He is awakening." You probably meant "He is waking up."
But still, looking forward to it.
Lol best way to end a chapter
7142238 I Know Right I Cracked Up
7139966 LOL!
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I think the writer even mentioned having had someone edit the chapter at the end, but I'm thinking they should have an additional editor to cover more ground that the other most likely missed while reading through it (it's not painfully obvious, but at the same time you can tell the type of things this editor clearly lacked and did not catch).
7141367 Surviving is not thriving, the dragons seem to be a largely nomadic or tribal group rather than a nation state because of the style Garble seemingly supports. If they can learn to show compassion to one another and work together a nation state can emerge and while a tribal or nomadic style of living may have a few advantages to a nation state, the nation state has a vast number of advantages over tribal and nomadic groups.
Change is a dangerous game but in this case the reward I think out ways the risks.
I cannot wait for the bits where Spike comes up with things that the dragons don't even know of.
I swear.
Dragons have had their arses kicked how many times in this show by ponies? Directly? Indirectly? Millenia?
I mean freaking ponies move the sun and moon.
You'd think nobody would mess with them, but NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
All of them are trying for the ruddy Darwing Awards!
ONE DOES NOT MESS WITH BEINGS THAT DIRECTLY INFLUENCE THINGS THAT DIRECTLY INFLUENCE YOUR LIFE!
7142545 I would, I'd probably end up roasted or turned into an icicle though...
This is so awesome and hilarius!!!
Spike is a lucky son of a horse!
7141163 You can serve 'em up hot yourself, dude.
I give that one 10/10.
Oh, the Chrysalis part tho XD
Book of Dragons, you say?
Well then, you must mean this thing.
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I just noticed something weird with your writing, you don't seem to use contractions very often. You always have everyone say " I am" and never "I'm" for instance, it's especially noticeable for characters who as far as I know have never used I am in their episodes. At least at the start of the story and then you start using them again about say...halfway through? I just found it a little weird at first and a little odd is all although when you started writing with contractions again I felt the characters did sound a bit more like themselves again so it's all good in the end.
plz let chapter 3 come soon!
7142047 I just felt like that pretty much somes up the relationship plus some personal wishes.
This is a nice story but there are many grammar and spelling issues.