The Shimmer In Her Eye

by CaringSlash

Invitation to a slumber party

You finally have the courage to walk out of the bathroom and when you walked out Pinkie Pie hands you something. "What is this?" You ask.

"It's an invitation to my slumber party tonight. Will you come?"

"We've only been friends for a few hours.....but okay I'll come."

"Yay!" Pinkie Pie bounces away.

You read the invitation and it says your suppose to be there at 6:30 and it's at Pinkies house with her address at the bottom. "Okay I can get a shirt and pajama shorts and bring my phone with me just in case anything bad happens." You walk off to continue the rest of the day.

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It's the end of the day and your ready for Pinkie Pie's slumber party. You head over to Pinkies house and Pinkie lets you in and leads you to her bedroom where everyone is. You see Sunset Shimmer but to avoid screwing up things again you sit next to someone else.

"Tonight were going to play-" Pinkie gets interrupted by Rainbow whispering something into her ear. Rainbow smiles evily to you and Sunset Shimmer. "Truth or Dare."

"Oh no." Rarity says.

"Lets just hope Rainbow doesn't ask what I think she's going to ask." You say to yourself. For the first few questions ask on Truth or Dare until it was Rainbow's turn.

"Sunset Truth or Dare?" Rainbow says

"Dare."

"I dare you to confess your feelings to that guy." Rainbow points directly at you.

All of the girls gasp, you and Sunset look at each other, and sigh in defeat. "Okay. Can you girls please leave the room for a second." They all get up and leave and now it's just you and Sunset alone.

There's dramatic silence for a few minutes until Sunset breaks the silence. "So...do you have a crush on me?"

"Uh.....yeah.....do you have a crush on me?"

Sunset starts to blush. "I hate to admit it but when I first saw you I thought you were..........cute."

"When I first saw you I couldn't take my eyes off of you. You were beautiful." You cause yourself to blush.

"You think I'm beautiful."

"Yes I d-" Sunset tackles you and kisses you. You and Sunset stay embraced and kiss for over a minute before finally breaking the kiss and being released from the embrace.

"I love you." Sunset says to you.

"I love you too Sunset." You hear a sound from outside of the room.

"Rainbow I can't believe you got them two together." Twilight says.

"Don't be surprised Twilight." Rainbow says.

Comments

[MatrixZL1]

Well, this was a rushed but nice story

[CaringSlash]

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Thanks.

[CaringSlash]

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Thank you.

[Clayton Harbaugh]

The story was pretty great, although I thought the kiss at the end was a bit out of left field, as was Sunset's crush on the reader. I mean, I know that I'm hot, but I'm pretty sure Sunset Shimmer wouldn't crush on my. So for that, and a few grammatical errors here and there, I give this story an A-.

[CaringSlash]

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Thank you for stating your opinion and enjoying the story.

[Clayton Harbaugh]

7788073 Thank you for enjoying my comment. My sister always says that nobody likes critics, but I think that, so long as it's constructive criticism (meaning I don't just say I love or hate the story without providing insight as to why), it's okay.

[Aussie Who Likes Ponies]

This is so rushed, so rushed... SO. DAMN. RUSHED

Listen, I love the concept of the story and the main character (anon/me/thisishurtingmybrain) seems like a chill dude, but it's just... so rushed, not even after 24 hours both him and Sunset are crushing on each other and smooching and all that. and I knew this would be a rushed story from Rainbow's first line ''I'm going to take you to my friends''

like, no backstory of the character, no development of his crush?, nothing?!

Listen, with a bit more work this story would be great, but as of now it's just a rushed mess of a story

[Kikio3000]

Nice short Fluff-fic!

[tgb089]

What? A guy gets invited to an all-girls sleep over? That just shattered my suspension of disbelief with a baseball bat.

This is so rush.

[PixelatedPerson]

Would've been lovely if it werent so rushed and so short.