Holy shit. That was something.

You have somehow made your story into a drug and as the creator of said drug you know how much to administer to any subject to make them crave as much of it as possible.

i have to say this twilight is down right evil and i for one love it

More!

Well then Twilight...

This is the best chapter yet,
But I'm afraid to leave no for my liking maybe you could shorten it just a little?

Definitely one of the best chapters yet. Twilight's expressions give me the biggest grin.

Best chapter yet, keep up the excellent work

This chapter is amazing it not only showing how smart twilight is at young age, but also showing a evil passion and interest on using live test subjects to prove theory's.

*Sniff, Sniff* They grow up so fast. Soon enough, she'll be taking her first evil minion.

Readerasm!

By celestia that was disturbing.............I want more :)

The ram's thoughts were now chiding her for not turning her head in that direction fast enough. She didn't want to make Twilight sad did she? She didn't want to disappoint her right? She wanted to feel those happy feelings when Twilight praised her, but that was only going to happen if she was a good girl. These types of thoughts and more began to ring out from her subconscious, pleading with her to stop resisting even as she knew the ramifications of giving into this she demon on an intellectual level.

When i saw this, well how do i say this... Its a little bit dirty but...

I HAD A BONER

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8037524 Gave myself a few goosebumps when I wrote it. It let me know I was going in the right direction.

8037370 It's....Its just liquid pride, *sniff*

8037327 Glad you enjoyed it!

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8036571 Thank you very much. Glad to hear I'm improving.

8036291 I'd rather face down Mlp's villain gallery than be in the same dimension as this filly I'm writing. She spooks me. XD

8036273 You flatter me good sir.

8037743 true, I can see her meeting nightmare moon in her dream and get the mare to give up her plan and join twilight as soon as she lands on ground..... all shall follow this twilight

8037370 um I though that cat lady and spike were already her evil minions

There needs to be more stories with this. Just pure evil. You've got me rooting for Twilight until the end, good cannot be allowed to triumph.

Something I want to ask about (feel free to not answer), this is supposed to be set in the Sombra timeline, so is canon Twilight going to make an appearance (eventually)? I like the idea of her showing up with no idea as to what is really going on, and this story being able to technically fit into the canon show. Maybe even have this Twilight learn about her life as a princess and figure out her own way to becoming an alicorn.

Also looking forward to Sombra's eventual appearance.

8037763 Catrina is currently her teacher, and from everything I've read so far, she sees Spike as a pet. A pet is not really a minion, as it is a pet. A minion is someone who is very obviously beneath her, intelligent (of a sort), and powerless against her. They don't necessarily need to believe in her cause, but it certainly helps.

8037933 so Catrina will most likey go from teacher to head minion down the road.....but not all minon have to be less then boss, most tend to be, I remember reading a manga where the head minion was in fact stronger then their boss but they believe and follow boss that they never turn against the boss

8037938 So then, I the term 'beneath them' would be metaphorical. They don't have to be weaker, physically, but maybe psychologically. Or not even weaker, but maybe subservient would fit better. It still puts them beneath her in the chain of command, but not necessarily beneath her in terms of ability or strength.

As for Catrina, she could also become a partner. She wasn't weak when she was in her prime, and Twilight might grow attached enough they could become partners. Maybe even lovers, but that's not something i'm putting much stock in right now.

OH! I'm so hoping Twilight and company come across Daring Doo and her Arch Nemesis! Imagine it; They're both fighting over an ancient artifact, when out of nowhere this demented genius filly, a cat person, and a baby dragon show up, and declare that they will be taking said artifact. DD and her nemesis come to an agreement that letting Twilight have the artifact, whatever it is, would be a very bad idea, and they try to fight her off. They lose, of course, but Twilight's soft spot for books has her let DD and her enemy go, on the condition that Twilight is put into the next book as a new background nemesis. That slip up could lead to the Princess discovering what happened to the Alicorn Amulet, putting the pieces on those two murders, and realizing that the mare she had been looking for to wield the Element of Magic was now well on her way to becoming the most dangerous dark magic user to ever walk the earth. *Shivers* Oh the possibilities....

8037743 I came up with all of this while responding to someone else, and I really wanted you to see it. Thought it might prove useful in sparking some future ideas.

OH! I'm so hoping Twilight and company come across Daring Doo and her Arch Nemesis! Imagine it; They're both fighting over an ancient artifact, when out of nowhere this demented genius filly, a cat person, and a baby dragon show up, and declare that they will be taking said artifact. DD and her nemesis come to an agreement that letting Twilight have the artifact, whatever it is, would be a very bad idea, and they try to fight her off. They lose, of course, but Twilight's soft spot for books has her let DD and her enemy go, on the condition that Twilight is put into the next book as a new background nemesis. That slip up could lead to the Princess discovering what happened to the Alicorn Amulet, putting the pieces on those two murders, and realizing that the mare she had been looking for to wield the Element of Magic was now well on her way to becoming the most dangerous dark magic user to ever walk the earth. *Shivers* Oh the possibilities....

8038016 true but I can see twilight end up with nightmare moon as a partner/lover
everything else is make me drool with hope,

8038041 Maybe an evil harem? Would luna and Nightmare Moon be separate entities?

8038057 who say that the two get to be separate entities?? well in the end it up to the writer.....

why can i clearly see this twilight chanting the sith code
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I'm speechless. Just... wow. You were pretty high on my list as is. But this? This, is just taking to the whole new level.
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I meant to do this thing for... ages, really. But I never bothered, because... well. I never really felt it would matter to anyone but me. Honestly, this is absolutely redundant, all things considered. But the weirdest thing for one person, is something that makes most sense for another, so let's just assume I explained the logic behind my actions... shall we? Now to actually fill this thing with fics that deserve it.

That being said, I need some time to get my thoughts back in order before I try to think seriously. 8031810 I'll reply to this yet, don't think I forgot.

About fight in the Order Of the Sun. It's not so much about how you described the fight, but rather about how the fight went, and the details of it. Namely, Catrina and Spike.

Someone have already voiced their complains about Spike, so I would not go in depth here, plus he gets a pass as is - he may be a deadly, dark-oriented dragon, but he's still an infant, and so his abilities are limited.

Catrina, on the other hand, is way worse. She's not non-existent in the fight - which would have taken only two or three paragraphs to justify - or useless, like she would have been if Twilight didn't buff her - she feels absolutely counterproductive. What I mean is, she wasn't taken out of the fight early on, she was even given some power by Twilight, yet she is absolutely absent from the fight for... ugh, only about two thirds of it, and when she does do something, it's one of the worst courses of action.

Thus, you have given Catrina an unnecessary idiot ball to play with(lol, that was not intended), and it's a bit frustrating.

Btw, how do you prefer I do it: keep posting here, or move this stuff to pm from now on, maybe?

8040305 I understand that frustration, and it's intentional as well. Catrina has been both without magic and out of the game for a very long time. The size boost and flight that she was granted temporarily was just not enough to give her an edge on her opponents, extremely well trained warriors from a zealous religious order. As such she'll have to either learn how to be useful in a fight, or she is just going to have to wait until her power is restored, if that is even possible.

8041045 but... but that is not the point

It doesn't matter much, but let me, just for the sake of argument, try to roll it once more.

I do not, and never did, expect her to go and wreck everyone in their way. What I am trying to say is not actualy justified by "she was out of the game for a long time". My point, is not to say that she is inept in combat(which she probably is) - she failed on the simple logic in there! Like, she could've, I dunno, go and try to finish off the Ram and Zebra before they healed, or she could've intervened sooner, or something. It is not about her failing as a fighter, it is about her failing as a thousands years old being.

8041138 I can't quite answer much more than that without heading into spoiler territory that I wouldn't even trust black bars with, but it's all part of the plan.

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8041161 hm...
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Close enough

8050637 aaaand edited, thank you good sir.
8050693 Happy to hear you like it! Next chapter is on the way!

Oh man, this story is something I've been looking for a long time, a well written and executed villian story about Twilight! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Twilight you sick lavender monster
I've never been prouder

is it wrong that i can read a story like My Filly, Nightshine. (copyed and pasted) and enjoy it and then read this and enjoy it just as much

How does one get rid of spoiler lines?
Because I have no idea how and it's incredibly annoying,

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just tap/click on them

As in real life, if for vastly different reasons, torture fails to provide any sort of valuable intellegence. And so, she resorts to the tactics that do: manipulation.

That was beautifully sadistic Twilight well done.