Everfree

Granny Smith once stole the Zap Apples from the Everfree Forest to feed her family. Now she is an old mare and sick and weak. Time is ripe for Everfree to pick an Apple instead.
Zap Apple

Thanks to my proofreader: Celina Rose (chapter1-4)

Chapters (6)

An apple a day · 18th May 2016 · 2,269 words
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Into the woods · 18th Jun 2016 · 1,860 words
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Rescue Mission · 18th Jul 2016 · 1,390 words
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White Mare · 5th Aug 2016 · 2,372 words
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Chapter 5 · 5th Aug 2016 · 3,186 words
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Chapter 6 · 5th Aug 2016 · 2,203 words
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SusieBeeca

SusieBeeca #1 · Jun 5th, 2016 · · · An apple a day ·

Certain parts of this felt rushed, which is a shame since it's such an interesting premise. Even though there were phrases that seemed a bit clunky, it had a nice flow and draws the reader in. How long do you think it'll be altogether?

Verzeih Turncoat

Verzeih Turncoat #2 · Jun 5th, 2016 · · · An apple a day ·

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I can´t say right now, it was supposed to be done by now
This month is crazy with work, so if I don´t want to sacrifice my social life it will take some time (sadly).
I am just here to take what is already writen as a file with on the work trip, else you would even got an reply...

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