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My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
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I think the concept is good, but the execution could do with some polish. There was no way to expect or believe that out of the blue your soccer-loving pony would know to suggest a gangbang to get what they want, and no reason to believe that AJ would agree to it for any reason. The only reason we can assume she's okay with the deal is if she's super super desperate for a plowing, and that's out-of-character enough that it needs some groundwork laid. If instead you'd had a scene from AJs POV showing that her frustration wasn't caused by the stallions' actions but instead the stallions themselves, then it would've worked a lot better. A prereader would've suggested this right away.
That said, I clopped, and I didn't expect this to be anything more than porn, so take that with a grain of salt.
Every single letter and punctuation mark in there is completely moot thanks to this little thing called property laws. She still has every right to deny your soccer addicted ass.
He's also pathetically desperately addicted to a game.
Ramos, you are literally the most pathetic character I've ever read in an mlp fanfic.
I want alink to the image!
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It's called fantasy my friend. Real sex is not all it's cracked up to be. Trust me.