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The irony of Applejack being mad that Twilight has casual sex with ponies but completely fine with the long term mind control on them is pretty delicious.
Aw yis, new chapter.
No, she just tends to plunge herself into her work.
Time will tell. Also, enthralL, two Ls.
Besides, you literally went insane and that was all Celestia could do. Just be glad you're back, you're sane and you're happy.
Big shock.
No shit?
That's a good line.
Which is good, it's not just The Twilight Show.
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I'm not sure they could fool the charm activation, because it actually links them together and her slaves can find her from anywhere and that seems like a way to undo the charm (fool it into no longer recognizing the master) that Twilight could have used. Lingering commands might be abusable, though; if they obey because the charm told their minds to always respond to her it would work, but not if the charm is overriding them directly each time.
Finding a loophole in her commands would be a pretty likely use, though. Maybe she forgot the exclusiveness orders for one slave? Don't remember her leaving any particularly useful triggers anywhere though; even pre-reset Twilight didn't use them as robots very often.
It was interesting to see how AJ and Dash are pondering what's going to happen in the future, and are rightly concerned about what kind of interests Twilight will have.
I need more
Ah'm young!!
Trixie is kewl 2!
So, Celestia and Luna decide to give this, them a chance, without Twilight directly overseeing it or causing it.
Diorite is possibly having lingering effects from the time Celestia charmed her and used her on Twilight. She's now fighting between giving into them or staying professional.
Trixie is having a case of split-personality which is starting to get dangerously out of hand. It's one thing to acknowledge how she's having a better life now, and being a better pony too, but to wish for her original self to die, or feeling intense hatred for her, that's another. Her ego could also use some taming, or her heart'll get broken each time her Mistress has some time with someone else. (Also, Trixie definitly needs more spanking. There's still time for her to lie to Twilight on purpose :p)
Zecora and Rarity find solace in each other, as they're feeling the ache of being apart from Twilight. Maybe Twilight should let them tone down their want of her just a little bit, unless if it's caused by them loving her, genuine love, not the charm telling them they need her.
And then there's AJ and Dash, who are apparently having sex competitions. Even though AJ favors her mistress, it does seem like she also wants Dash all to herself. Maybe there should be a threesome between Twilight/AJ/Dash. I'd love to see AJ in more bondage. Or hell, any pony in bondage.
Love the chapter, want more instantly. You've charmed me to adore this fic.
I swear, this is how Applejack must also feel on the show. I also feel rather sad for Trixie, and hope she manages to get her dual personality thing worked out.
A nice fluff piece like is nice every so often, especially if things get a little heavy. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
While a short "filler" chapter it was still a good read, I see a few ponies have somethings they really need to work out with Twilight and I'm eager to see how she takes these little chats later on. And seriously I don't trust Trixie unless she's ""whammied" as Rainbow Dash puts it.
I find deliciously funny Trixie 's true ego being too big to supress entirely even for Twilight's charm .
Rainbow Dash and Applejack's conversation really makes me yearn for a look into the future through the eyes of one of the CMC. Maybe a different alternate timeline tale for each of them?
Really cool to hear what everybody else is thinking, and Trixie's parts keep getting more and more interesting! Though now I'm wondering what Fluttershy and Pinkie have been up to?
7868934 Pinkie's been reading over your shoulder
Random male pronoun in what I don't think is a conversation that has anything to do with males.
This is a lot of very good setup. I look forward to seeing all the plots that spiral out from this.
I crave these updates.
Well interesting little tidbits of everypony else's lives is good. It's interesting to see how they're doing when Twilight's not around.
I think Diorite is a bit thick headed in a way, but she does have a point, added her previous bad experiences with stupid nobles I can understand where she's coming from. Though it would be interesting to see how she further develops. . .
As for Applejack, I guess it's just her regular old habits and ingrained way of thinking that sex more or less equals commitment, which is a pain. The thing with Lightning Dust was a one time test thing to see if she'd go for it. In fact the point that she gave LD a CHOICE was leagues better than what she possibly could have done.
Anyway great chapter, I'd love to see more of Diorite she seems pretty more interesting than some of our other side characters, plus she's hot.
This is an awesome series. I hope you update again soon.
Is there a reason you haven't included some things that seem like they'd normally appear in a clop fic like this, like anal?
Wintermist - I am amazed that you consistently address any major story questions or discrepancies. i.e. 'Group spends a long time at Canterlot', I'm thinking "Don't at least half of them have lives to get back to?". And bam, we get a side exposition. Same thing with Luna's seemingly casual acceptance of the previous events, that gets talked out.
I do hope that when Twilight is faced with the myriad consequences this time, at least some of them don't get a plot write-off like with Rarity & Zecora in the original. For all the irony of reading this manner of content in this setting beyond shits and giggles, I am genuinely enjoying your story for just that, a good read.
Edit: Found one. "If it was a vault spell, he"
I do have a question how much Time is left before trixies trail period ends. I'm really interested to see what happens with that as I feel that it will be the tipping point for twilights character as she will either let follow throught with letting non charmed trixie choose to stay or go and trixie would never agree to stay unless some shenanigans were involved. So twilight to keep trixie because that is the most interesting way for the story to progress will break her main rule. That people will have to agree to be her slave and with that rule broken it can open a floodgate of rule breaks. Also as I was thinking about twilights dream I got a little metaphorical with it and thought about what if twilights dream and the twilight within represents twilights Subconscious and the dream shows what twilight wants the apitamy of her desires. This would lead to Luna who here represents twilights conscious and we see that twilight denies her counscious and ops for her desires. I believe this to symbolize that we will soon see twilight begin her fall from Grace (or as far as she can fall current situation)
Well that all I got till the next chapter. Thanks for giving me something to thing about while I'm working wintermist
7870697 7873397 Fixed, thanks for the spot.
7871573 It's nice to hear that you enjoy Diorite. I'm always wary of including non-canon ponies too noticably in the story, but she's lurking at the edges, being kind of interesting.
7873176 If I haven't included it, it might mean I just haven't gotten around to it, or I'm simply not a fan; I'm not so into anal, for instance. Whether or not I include that sort of thing anyway as Twilight's games get more elaborate... I guess we'll see.
7879591 That's a Tzeectch level of a reply if I ever read one.
7942737 Dude what changeling are you talking about?
Any news on the next update?
7954575 Well, since Christmas, I've been working on a commission. It's called Relaxing Celestia (By Any Means Necessary), and it came out Saturday. FiMC is still my main story, though, and even when I get distracted by other stories, I make it a rule to go back to FiMC after each. I'm busily working at the next chapter, which contains unexpected royalty!
7955063 Cool, Thank you.
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Someone who looked like Twilight went to her treehouse and collected a bunch of books, along with things that were hidden somewhere. It wasn't the real Twilight, since the next scene shows that she just got some books from the library in Canterlot. A lot of assumptions therefor are being thrown around, changeling being one of them.
I finally made it through both FiMC stories after a few days’ binging. When I started I was expecting passable smut, the kind that usually fills the feature box. I did not expect to get enthralled in possibly the best smut story I’ve ever read. I’m not that much into purely F/F clop, yet you’ve written some of the hottest damn scenes ever (particularly the Cheerilee bit with invisible Celestia, and Celestia fucking herself with abandon and realizing Luna’s been lucid the whole time).
I also love how you made the smut part of a genuinely interesting storyline, to the point where I was actually getting anxious alongside Twilight & co. during her battle of wills with Celestia. The charm (does it have a name?) obviously has a fair amount of thought put into it, and the twists and suspense of the original story’s plot are on par with many published books I’ve seen. I wonder what major conflicts will arise in Consequences? The two important issues I see approaching are a) possibly/hopefully enslaving Cadance at some point and the ramifications of that, and b) Twi’s arrangement with Trixie, given the latter’s newfound desperation to stay with her mistress. (I love Trixie’s characterization; again, you took something I expected to annoy me and made it fun to read.) Can’t imagine the latter will be the crux of the story, though, given the scale of the original.
I will say, though, that I miss the lack of dongs (other than that nice Twi-masturbates-Chert scene) or any butt-play in this. At a few points I was expecting Twi (or Celestia) to make one of her puppets finger another, if only for the degradation aspect of it. (I want to see the look on Celestia’s face after she snaps out of her trance to realize she’s been rimming a very contented Luna for the last hour whilst Twilight watched on. How’s that for punishment?) That said, I get it if you’re not into that sort of stuff, so I don’t wanna sound pushy or anything. And besides, it’s not like the story needs it to be hot.
Anyway. Just wanted to get me thoughts and praise out. Upvoted & faved, please keep it up, all that and so on.
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Unexpected!? Hmm... There's a king, queen, and prince lurking about. Don't really see evidence of Sombra unless he was Celestia's original confidant. Blueblood would likely just be a fun victim, though you could always surprise us with him. Chrysalis is a pretty obvious move for mind control shenanigans, and we do suspect a shape shifter about...
Yo wintermist my harambe can we geta quick update i think im starting to suffer from withdraws
8015351 Let's see. The chapter in progress is up to about 5.5k, but it's being slowed down by a parallel piece I'm writing, some 8.5k as of today, which is going to be a cute fluff piece about Luna asking Twilight out. The cuteness is probably going to get finished first.
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Regarding the fluff piece, when you say parallel do you mean that it's set in the FiMC universe?
8024407 Afraid not, only that I'm working on it and the FiMC chapter at the same time. It's actually show-accurate ponies and will be rated 'E', by far the mildest thing I've done here.
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Oh cool! I just wondered was all, thought it might be a side-story or something similar. Looking forward to it!
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E-rated - from Wintermist... Well that sounds interesting.
8026421 8026359 Story complete! Sparkle Date Me! is now posted.
After having reread the entire series, I finally realized that even with all of the sex scenes as of yet, there hasn't been any anal. I'm admittedly quite surprised, as you'd expect that with such an amount of characters, at least one of them would be interested in such.
No matter, I'm quite pleased with the story as it is, and I look forward to any and all of your future creations.
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I said the same thing. There's no anal because he's not into it.
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Well that bit goes without saying. People often only include what they themselves are into.
And eh. I usually don't read other people's comments for a multitude of reasons.
>creepy cosmic whispering
"We wait"
8128878 I am not dead, I promise! I was pretty much taken out of contention for April by a leaflet left on my desk describing a short story contest whose winners get published in an anthology, so I've been working on a pair of submissions. All done and submitted now.
As for FiMC, the current chapter stands at some 12,000 words, and I nearly published it a couple of days ago, but pulled it back to do some restructuring in the middle. So update soon!
8139691 My impatience has gotten the better of me.
We only pester because we care :p 50 Shades has got nothing on you. As an aside, I hope that at least some of the consequences this time around don't get a plot write-off like with Rarity & Zecora.
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My body is ready.
Trixie worrying about her original self ruining everything gives me an idea. The original would agree to stay, only under the condition that she gets to fuck Twilight in front of the rest of her slaves.
I like that Lightning Dust and Rainbow are somewhat dating outside of Twilight's control. It shows that even though Twilight still controls them all, they still have independent lives they lead and can still have good experiences with others beside Twilight. I'd love to see more Lightning Dust in this story.
I find myself imaging a "sexual harassment" conversation. And, I see it going many different ways, depending on whether Diorite reports to Celestia or to Twilight ... or arranges for both of them so that she can talk to both of them.
Honestly, I love this story, not for the clop, but for the look at morality and behavior. I could imagine a "what-if" if this story was re-written for a teen audience, with big hug piles instead of clop piles. Keep all the chess, mind, and poker games. Keep the mind control and the "What are proper behaviors?" questions.
And, I enjoyed seeing all the other point of views here.