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Rytlock's Journey: A trip through the Mists

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Jade Nekotenshi

Jade Nekotenshi #1 · Apr 7th, 2016 · · ·

I like the premise here, as a fan of both GW2 and MLP. However, I have a few complaints.

One, it's Rytlock, no "h". Second, the colored text for dialog is very jarring. Both of these things verged on being enjoyment-breakers. Otherwise, fairly well done, if a little telly.

GuardianofRoin

GuardianofRoin #2 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7103587 I figured the colored text might help differentiate who's talking when, though in this case it's not helping. Will fix the spelling error as well. Thanks for the feedback!

-Brutus