• Published 8th Apr 2016
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The Sour Sweet First Date - Nico-Stone Rupan



Sour Sweet tells the Crusaders the tale of her first date with you.

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Chapter 3: Private Treasures

Sweetie Belle wiped a tear as Sour Sweet finished her story. “Wow, Sour Sweet. That was beautiful. I hope I can experience what you have someday.”

“Yeah, Ah wouldn’t mind havin’ a relationship, mahself,” Apple Bloom admitted. She then grew a sly smirk. “And then we would just need ta get Scootaloo ta admit her romantic feelin’s fer Rainbow Dash and all three Crusaders would have special somebodies!”

Scootaloo threw her arms up. “HEY! I do NOT have romantic feelings for Rainbow Dash! It’s purely idol worship and nothing else!”

Sweetie Belle went over and placed a sympathetic hand upon Scootaloo’s shoulder. “It’s okay, Scoots. We’ll love you no matter what your sexual orientation turns out to be.”

Scootaloo blushed and rolled her eyes. “Aw shut up, you guys! Now, come on! Do we or don’t we have a fan film to make here?”

Sour Sweet chuckled and lugged the Ahuizotl mask back over her head.

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After a long day of amateurish filmmaking that would make Ed Wood proud, Sour Sweet returned home. She had had a smile plastered on her face ever since she told her story to the Crusaders. Verbally reliving that night only made her want more. She wanted to relive it visually and tangibly as well.

She entered her room and went straight over to the dresser next to her bed. Inside the top drawer, she stored her most personal possessions. She opened it. Right next to her container of birth control pills and a framed crayon drawing of a little girl who she hoped to see again one day, was a red, pocket-sized booklet containing The Communist Manifesto.

She picked up and opened it to reveal the photos nestled within the pages: the photo booth strip and a copy of her mother's snapshot of the first kiss she had with the love of her life. Sour Sweet sighed contently, closed it back up, and held it out to bask in the memories.

“Does that say ‘The Communist Manifesto’?”

Sour Sweet jumped and turned to see her mother standing at her door.

“Mom, i-it’s not what it looks like!”

Mrs. Sweet went over and placed a sympathetic hand upon her daughter’s shoulder. “It’s okay, honey. I’ll love you no matter what your political orientation turns out to be.”

THE END

Comments ( 55 )

Moms; it's what they do.

That was awesome. I gotta say that the stories that through in something completely out of left field and make me wonder "what the hell am I reading?" are always some of my favorites.:rainbowlaugh: Great job on this one. I'm actually interested in sour's father. I'm curious if you're going to use him in a future story possibly.

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I'm actually interested in sour's father. I'm curious if you're going to use him in a future story possibly.

Sooner or later.

If you ask me, the waiter is the real hero of this story. Been there....

It's a tough spot for the boyfriend to be in too. On one hand, you can't let someone offend your date, but on the other hand, the offender is absolutely correct.

And just how old are your Crusaders? If you follow the cannon, they should be around 12. Isn't it a bit too early for a date?

kul
kul #6 · Apr 8th, 2016 · · ·

Aw its cute.. Kinda wish it was longer tho, especially in post-Italian dinner scenes. Telling us about the photos and the restarted date is nice, but I wish you showed whats truly been exchanged between these two lovebirds. Ah young love..

7105908 I went on my first date when I was twelve. Happens a lot, nowadays, from what I've seen.

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It's a tough spot for the boyfriend to be in too. On one hand, you can't let someone offend your date, but on the other hand, the offender is absolutely correct.

Just remember her behavior is due to a mood swing, which she is shown to regret and the boyfriend totally understands that she can't help it.

And just how old are your Crusaders? If you follow the cannon, they should be around 12. Isn't it a bit too early for a date?

In the Equestria Girls universe they are Freshmen, which would make them around 15. Also, Button Mash didn't really ask her on a serious date. Sweetie only wishes it was one.

Incidentally, my mom was actually 12 when she first met my dad. Married 36 years now with three children.

Another awesome fic nico! Can't wait for the next one!

7106099 15? I'll never buy that. Sailor Moon is 15.

kul

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Sailor Moon is 15?? Man, I find that hard to believe

I wonder if Starlight is going to end up falling foul of the Rainbooms, get expelled from CPA (for trying to mass-brainwash the student body) and end up in reform school... with Twilight Sparkle as her visiting peer counsellor.

"So, why didn't you use your rainbow laser thing on her?"

"Wouldn't that be excessive? It might have turned her into stone or something!"

"It's so nice that you were concerned for her! Even though being a pigeon perch is the most that kook can expect out of life!"

I wonder how many stories are left.
Feels like this series is reaching it's end game. Be ashamed to go, but as the wise creator of avatar said:
"If you said you knew the greatest story ever, but it had no ending, I'd walk away. Unless it was the neverending story."

This is adorable. 10/10

I love you for making these stories of Sour Sweet, they're really sweet. You make me smile with their shenanigans and romantic, sometimes hoity-toity, moments. It warms my heart that she's getting better and that she has someone that loves, and understands, her with all his heart despite her illness.

You have my like Nico, and five derpy's :derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

My favorite Sour Sweet stories, as always.

I think you made a minor typo in chapter 2:

Sour Sweet glanced over. After a moment of silence, he finally smiled and nodded.

Shouldn't that be She?

7107184 Thank you, fixed it. Darn overlooked typos...

These stories are some of the sweetest things I have ever seen.

You've done it again! Earned a spot in my favorites! Both this and Sour Sweet Motherhood were done really well. If you continue, can't wait to see what's next!! :pinkiehappy:

Wonderful story, you've done it again. You get a like and a favorite from me.

If you’re a mom, you take embarrassing pictures. It’s what you do! Was that a GEICO reference?

7107833 I would love to see an Equestria Girls GEICO commercial, wouldn't you? :rainbowlaugh:

7107893 I definitely would.

Nico, never stop being the best.

That ending made me laugh like a maniac.

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Don't do this. We know she has an accent. Let us fill in the blanks.

It's a personal preference to write out the accent... especially since I'm southern myself :raritywink:

Not sure why the protagonist wasn't a nervous wreck like in SSP but this is great.

Sour Sweet simply being around him gives him confidence. I understand your interest in the boyfriend, but early on I realized that Sour's struggle with her condition should be the main focus, so his development is kept subtle.

That ending made me laugh like a maniac.

I try :twilightblush:

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I'm southern myself

Just for you, maybe-Rev. Nah but seriously I'm like one of three people that get annoyed by it, and if it's you I'm fine with it.

I understand your interest in the boyfriend, but early on I realized that Sour's struggle with her condition should be the main focus, so his development is kept subtle.

Wow, he got gud fast. Fair enough.

I try

No, you succeed.

10/10 would send ninjas to kill you again

Dude, how do you keep doing this? This stuff is amazing!
I loved the keepsakes thing. My girl has a similar collection of mementos.
(I really hope we get to see Bitter Honey in the future. Adorable beyond measure)

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Dude, how do you keep doing this? This stuff is amazing!

My method is quite simple, really. Firstly, I start writing a bunch of crap ( often weird crap ), hoping to God that I can somehow make it plausible and heartwarming by the end. Secondly, I submit. Thirdly and lastly, I sit back in utter shock and confusion as bronies tell me how amazing it is :raritywink:

I really hope we get to see Bitter Honey in the future

Patience is a virtue.

Great to see another Sour Sweet Fic from ya bro!:pinkiehappy: Lookin forward to more:twilightsmile:

Well, color me impressed. Second-person perspective has some heavy stigma attached to it, but you definitely make it work. The realistic, respectful approach to Sour Sweet's mental condition also helps. The perspective character himself is still rather underdeveloped, but you have me looking forward to future installments of this saga.

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The perspective character himself is still rather underdeveloped

That will have to be a permanent flaw, I'm afraid. As I have explained to others, I feel that Sour's struggle with her condition should be the focus, not the self-insert boyfriend. In hindsight, I probably should have made her date a canon character, but I honestly never thought I would end up writing a popular extended series when I submitted the original story, Sour 'n Sweet 'n Pretty four months ago. Life is funny.

7107905 20 bits says it either involves pinkie or rainbow dash

I've mentioned that I love this little anthology before, right? Oh well, just in case, I love this little anthology. It's kinda funny how well Sour actually gets along with the CMC, but that's great in itself. Then the drawing of Bitter made the tears come back again.

Kinda hoping we get tour see the boyfriend screw up a bit in the future. So far he's the "Nice Guy," which is good for developing Sour's story further, since she's the main focus. But I would like to see the reaction when he messes up a little instead of her condition warping her thoughts from something minor like in Sour Sweet Gesture.

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Kinda hoping we get tour see the boyfriend screw up a bit in the future.

If the boyfriend was a real character then I would definitely put mistakes in, however he's supposed to be a self-insert. I wouldn't want to write anything that would make anybody go, "Hey, I wouldn't do that to poor Sour Sweet! This sucks!"

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Fair enough. Like I said, him being the nice guy is a good foil for developing Sour.

D'aww she kept those? Why next to that kind of medicine I don't really get. Then Bitter came to kick me right in the soft and squishy feels... Thanks for another great fic!

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Why next to that kind of medicine I don't really get.

Sour Sweet treasures the (responsible) physical intimacy she gets to have with the love of her life, especially since it took her so long to overcome the anxiety to go through with it. Also because one day she hopes to get off birth control in order to add some "Bitterness" to her life.

Incidentally, the story that I'm currently writing right now is going to add a lot more to this desire-for-family theme. Turns out it's contagious :raritywink:

7183214 Oh that makes sense... Wait what?! Contagious? I can't wait to read that! And seriously thanks for such a great story. I heard about it at BABScon and I couldn't stop reading it! Sour Sweet Scrappers has been so good that i'm trying to savor it as much as I can.

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I heard about it at BABScon and I couldn't stop reading it!

What, did my stories happen to come up in a conversation you had or were whispers of Nico-Stone Rupan dominating an entire convention hall? My ego hopes it was the latter :rainbowlaugh:

But seriously, thank you for being a fan! :twilightsmile:

7185356 Just a group of Equestria Girls fanatics told me about it after I gave a Flash Sentry cosplayer a high five for being so brave.

oh my god! IL CAVALLO RAGAZZA translates to horse girls

and a framed crayon drawing of a little girl who she hoped to see again one day,

Oh god :raritycry:

I actually am part-republican with communist views.. :rainbowderp:
The good side of communism where everybody is supported, of course.

7317648 I've come to realize that everybody has a little "Red" in them when you look deep enough. However, "Commie Starlight" jokes are just plain funny to me:

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:rainbowlaugh: I totally agree, especially the way you do them :twilightsmile: Hilarious stuff~

Mrs. Sweet went over and placed a sympathetic hand upon her daughter’s shoulder. “It’s okay, honey. I’ll love you no matter what your political orientation turns out to be.”

Sooo what if she starts ideniting as a neo nazi

(Yes i know that whouldnt actually happen)

“HEY! I do NOT have romantic feelings for Rainbow Dash! It’s purely idol worship and nothing else!”

Yes! Loving these stories so far, they're really touching.

Day 23, still trying to find the beginning of this sequel line.
Supplies are beginning to run low.

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