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CinnamonSwirltheBreaded


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Among unicorns, it is traditional for the student to thank their teacher or professor upon graduating with some sort of small gift that properly reflects how much the student valued their instruction.

Twilight has been an alicorn for several months now, and she still hasn't found the perfect gift to give Celestia, who, after all, decided to skip over making Twilight a doctor and head straight to making her a Princess. What sort of gift could she probably give her?

Perhaps an apple will do...

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Comedy gold... LOVED IT!!!

Somehow, I upvoted this before I finished reading it; it was that good. :rainbowlaugh:

Ara

5/5 I clapped. :ajsmug:

XD XD XD XD XD

Soooo, AJ is the Princess of Lesbianism or something now?

Dead.

Somebody drag my corpse over to the Spirit Healer because I am 100% officially dead from laughing too hard at 4 in the morning reading this.

10 outta 10 apples for this one.

This was great! Applejack must be really, really good at pie eating to become the alicorn of it :applejackconfused:

Oh that's so...funny ish.

I have no words....

Wait...

Hillarious.

Great all around. 10/10 8/8 5/5

Why was this not featured?

I was expecting the "best apple" to be Big Mac, considering the earlier line.

And, if that work had been particularly difficult, she had a tendency to go to the local taverns and pretend to be interested in some companionship—only to buck the offender in the head when he got too fresh.

Okay, this part kinda bugs me. With the way it's worded, it looks to me like she's baiting stallions on purpose so she has an excuse to kick them. There's not enough information to suggest anything else. It makes her look, in my eyes, like some crazy woman who likes to lead men on just so she can get away with some physical abuse. Like a sociopath. It's not a flattering look for her, and it seems really out of character. I find it hard to believe that Applejack is the sadistic type.

Plus, it's a small town, so word would get out sooner or later. Not sure Granny Smith would approve of this at all.

I could be wrong, of course, but it's the "pretend" part that bothers me. Just makes it sound like she's only there to hurt someone, under false pretenses. And doesn't sound like the Element of Honesty at all, does it?

I'm gonna keep reading the rest of the story, but I'd suggest you take that out. It doesn't really fit Applejack. If she wants to destress through violence, there are far more honest ways to go about it.

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