You seem to have javascript disabled, or your browser is failing to execute it properly. Much of Fimfiction's functionality requires javascript so we suggest you turn it on!

ocalhoun's Big 250k Contest133 stories ·122 members

Twilight Sparkle Takes Pinkie Pie To LineCon

This story is a sequel to Twiley takes Shining Armor to LineCon

What began as a normal day for Pinkie Pie quickly takes a turn for the weird, when she is invited to LineCon by Twilight Sparkle.

Luckily, entertainment is provided.

Originally written as an entry for ocalhoun's big 250k contest.

Chapters (1)

Comments ( 3 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 3
- Newest First
- Oldest First

ocalhoun

ocalhoun #1 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

Was this supposed to be a contest entry?

silvershinepony

silvershinepony #2 · Apr 1st, 2016 · · ·

7083688 yeah- but it didn't get past moderation in time D:
I submitted it like yesterday, thought there would be time

ocalhoun

ocalhoun #3 · May 27th, 2016 · 2 · ·

(I will do my best to refrain from putting any one-liners into this review.) Not bad. Not bad at all, especially for a first story! I hope you write more sometime. The humor actually worked pretty well in it for the most part, and I can't fault the execution. It is odd how it sort of parallels the original while also making a pun of the original's premise... odd. And that did seem to get a bit messy when combined with Twilight thinking about her previous experiences with LineCons. Is that too strange? You might even say... it crosses a line. (Drat! One slipped in anyway!)

cdn-img.fimfiction.net/group/vkuc-1448531607-209408-128
A review for ocalhoun's big 250k contest.
Remember to vote for the winner of the People's Choice award!
The rankings and ratings of stories in the contest are visible in real time, and you can see them here.