Twilight thought that everything would be fine after she got transferred to Canterlot High, that she would be able to surpass every problem with the help of her friends, that she would be happy. She was wrong, for the new enemy was herself.
Today she woke up in pain, as every single day.
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Oooh you got to make another to this! I want to see Twilight fess to Sunset.
Add another chapter. Or do a sequel. But please don't let it end here!
Yes. Please write a sequel... this was absolutely amazing.
Please please please don't end it there!
“We were wondering if you would like to come with us, I'll pay.”
and plz sequel
I'd take you up on that, but there were just too many to fix in just a single comment post. I recommend finding somebody to edit for you.
This story goes well with 'The Road' from Old Man Canyon
Dang it... I wanted Sunset and Twilight to just accept it and start going out.
Sadly, I didn't make it very far into the story. I found my inner editor kicking on almost immediately and ran into quite a few errors in the span of a few paragraphs.
I would suggest knowing your irregular verbs ("leave" is "left" in past tense, not "leaved") and try to use verbs other than be and its tenses (am, is, are, was, were). And, most chiefly, definitely confer with an editor.
I really enjoyed it. And I honestly don't think you should write a sequel. It ended perfectly on an uncertain note.
But you should get in touch with an editor.