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The Mysterious Lombax


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One stormy night in Ponyville, Nathan accidently triggers open a Power Ponies comic, sending him inside. As soon as he is knocked out, the Mane-iac takes him in as her prisoner. As the Mane Six gather these news, they realize she has allies, and they must gather new and old friends to help them. Will they save Nathan and stop the Mane-iac and her minions?

Crossover of the Donkey Kong Country Trilogy.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 15 )

Alright uh... Wow. I haven't read this yet, and I likely won't for a while simply because of how giant that chapter is. I simply don't have the time to sit down and allocate the time for something that long in one sitting. :applejackconfused: I'd advise splitting it up if you can, but of course that's just me. But I'd like to know one thing... How did you write a chapter that long?!

7156098 Yeah, I'd kinda like him to split it up too. Not only do I have a short attention span, bit I don't have time like that. But it's his story, so he can do as wishes.

7156125 Oh, okay I get it now. ShinigamiKing14489, you could probably read it if you want. Most of it is filler, you'll find out if you read it. :ajbemused:

No offense, but this is just lazy. Most of that was just filler: "Please?" "No" I don't know if you're trying to be funny, but there's probably only, like, 200 words of actual story content.

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7156239 Reason it's long because I've been seeing many people disliking my stories or others because they ahev seem kind of rushed. So I'm trying to go to a new method.

7156505 Yes, well I think you should come up with a new way that isn't like this. Yes, it's long, but it's not story. "It's just "Please?" "No" with, like, three minutes of actual story. In a way, that's even shorter than usual.

7156511 Makes sense. Any suggestions for the next chapter?

7156516 Nope. I have no idea where you plan on taking this story.

7156525 It's a reboot of the story xd777 made.

7156544 Well, I don't know that story either.

I better get back in the game time for me to go write my child in equestria fic

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