• Member Since 26th Jul, 2013
  • offline last seen Dec 22nd, 2022

Tee Sion


*Eyebrow-raising, thought-provoking, smile-creating words here*

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She's terminally ill, the doctor said. Spend every last moment with her, the friend said. I'm okay, she said. Don't stay too long, she said.

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Rated 'Teen' for little language.

One-Shot

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 4 )

Don'tcrydon'tcrydontcrydontcrydontcry-FUDGE!

Forced feels huh? 2/8 b8.

7060006 Is that really what it feels like? Hm... thank you.

I Agree with hamster its really forced. At first i thought you were gonna try to go with a delusional protagonist that pretends everythings is gonna be alright or someone having vivid hallucinations or flashbacks. Instead we got some extremely odd pacing and feelings? who the heck is that happy when out of the blue you have 2 days to spend with your loved one. Don't get me started on the random terminal illness. overall i think the major issue is pacing and direction. Then ending was so abrupt.

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