Linear Transformation

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This story is a sequel to Twiley takes Shining Armor to LineCon

After years, Princess Twilight's finally visiting LineCon again. And she's bringing some of her best friends with her. This will be the best con ever!

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Arcane Howitzer

Arcane Howitzer #1 · Mar 28th, 2016 · 5 · ·

"Hey Twilight, when do we get to the con?"
"This is the con!"
"..."
"Right, you guys have fun. I'm gonna go make sure Spike's getting enough Oxygen."

Tatsurou

Tatsurou #2 · Mar 29th, 2016 · 2 · ·

That pun at the end...

Fruity Treeze

Fruity Treeze #3 · Mar 31st, 2016 · 2 · ·

I completely lost it at The Line King! and Linestone!

PresentPerfect

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PresentPerfect #4 · Apr 27th, 2016 · 1 · ·

we all love Pinkie Pie!

No joke, I laughed at this for like a minute straight. It's hysterical!

I'm really impressed by how you extended the joke of the original story here. :)

ocalhoun

ocalhoun #5 · May 17th, 2016 · 1 · ·

This is a really good one. Finally, a comedy that really makes me want to laugh. And you did a great job of extending the original story in a new direction. And you gave it some stealth feels when you had Twi realize how her passion for lines was alienating her friends and at the same time, newly pointless without being able to share it with those friends. Very nice. It did get dragged down a little by a lack of editing, though. It slipped between present and past tense sometimes, along with misspellings like 'lense'. But that wasn't bad enough to ruin the enjoyment of this story.

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