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Leave your headcanons at the door.


Time travel magic can be tragic. Twilight Sparkle and Starlight Glimmer might never realise just how tragic.

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Damn man, this is deep and dark. But well written, that I'll give you.

And yes, the word of God tibit does not only give hope, but also closes that plot hole "what about the really breaking being?"

Good story. Depressing and sad, but good nonetheless :pinkiesad2:

That comment about Discord at the end really shows how important he is to the world survivability... Yeah Discord!!!! Booo nigh eternal torment.

Dat ending :pinkiegasp: DISCORD! SAVE THE DAY ALREADY!

Reading the first chapter, I didn't think the plot of this was anything special. As soon as I saw the second chapter starting with the same bleak atmosphere as the first though, I realised where you were going with it and completely changed my mind.

Really clever story. Excellent twist.

Twilight had become the Princess of Friendship for the brief time before things such as royal titles became irrelevant, she had come into power in an established system. The other had organised her own town. She hadn’t lacked for egomania at the time, and her concept of friendship had been twisted, but

she had truly united a ragtag disparate group of ponies who had held together with common bonds even after she had been exposed for a fraud. Twilight had hoped that in a different timeline, she could heal the wounded psyches of the pony masses where Twilight had failed.

What happened?...

If I'm interpreting this correctly, this paragraphs she refers to Glimmer and not Twilight (unless they are both one and the same) The way it's written it's a little difficult to know for sure.

The conditions required for this have to be very specific given the amount of variables, specifically the part in which both Elements of Magic decide to overwrite everything rather than just the part where they messed up but it's all coherent and a nice work all and all.


Oh my gosh it's so sad! :fluttercry:

I know this one is really short, so I'm excited to see how it turns out, but man this feels like a setup for something longer! Great beginning! :twilightsmile:

Wow... I am amazed how much you packed into such a short story. I figured it was going to be a time loop as soon as Starlight was admitting failure. That was rather depressing and sad. Well played. :applecry:

I did appreciate your faint ray of hope that Discord would eventually unspool the loop, but the entire situation is really sad even still. I got a bit misty when the end of the story was right where it had begun... "The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed."


I knew of the general plot of that series but I've only read the first book. I'm still thinking it was some story somewhere I had with this type of ending that I subconsciously swiped to get this. Anyways, thanks for the read!

Yeah, when I was writing it up, I was thinking about Discord. I figured it'd be a bittersweet ending if he were to eventually break it, but all those doomed timelines...

And that's why withholding crucial information from your allies (even in the presence of time-travel) is a very bad idea :pinkiesad2:

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