Page generated in 0.034 seconds
Total duration
1,033 users online
1,407,037 hits today, 1,822,946 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Seems good so far, needs quite a bit more progress before I put it in my favorite category.
A few months ago I read up on all the implants of a super marine, they're quite op and I really hope he gets to use some of the more interesting ones of them.
encrypted-tbn1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRCnoehVvkgeYpzi67toC8qKAvASfoQLFJUsru1g_Hy0MRbe_I5oQ
Just because he's paranoid doesn't mean there isn't an invisible daemon about to eat his face.
7316396
I can't look at that dude's face without laughing!
Man, I remember that moment in the show where Pinkie stared straight at the camera and shouted "Hey, look at me! I'm a Deadpool ripoff who will constantly fuck with the fourth wall!"
Look, the story is good, but I can't stand it when stories do this. So many good stories with talented writers, and they characterize Pinkie as Deadpool, but small, pink, and hooved. And also less violent.
Or a loaded Boltor.
I'd recommend dropping the "we are" "you are" and the like. They sound way too robotic, especially for ponies like Rainbow, Applejack, and Pinkie. Heck, in the second chapter AJ kept saying little sister like a robot, and it just threw me off by how un-texan she sounded.
In short, I'd recommend going over most of these chapters after watching some of the show and reading a few more stories. This story is good, but the lack of proper spacing, the few typos, and the robotic dialogue make it a tiny bit lackluster.
9500200
I agree informalize it a bit for the equestrian characters. We're, it's, wreckon, they're. Ect.
Very nice story btw. For me it feels just a tad rushed, but thats most likly noones fault, I usually just like reading really long stories.
You WANT to be probed and/or invaded? XD
Wait... did pinkie break the 4th Wall to Antonius? XD
Ooooh thus will be awesome Xd
Celestia cant Help with pinkie....
Is*
Only an imperial fist could be more deadpan.
9069841
Same